The Almond Trees
Blank Verse52 total reviews
Comment from ravenblack
Shame on you for those inline rhymes ( believe me, just kidding. You really transported me to that place. Utility- not everything that is beautiful need be useful. Those trees- like age- have a hard-fought wisdom. And with the slight personification of almond eyes, they show truth. I would go more in depth, but I am stuck on my phone and scrolling is killing the joy of the read. Excellent blank verse. You have a keen eye for nature.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Shame on you for those inline rhymes ( believe me, just kidding. You really transported me to that place. Utility- not everything that is beautiful need be useful. Those trees- like age- have a hard-fought wisdom. And with the slight personification of almond eyes, they show truth. I would go more in depth, but I am stuck on my phone and scrolling is killing the joy of the read. Excellent blank verse. You have a keen eye for nature.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Many thanks for your review, Ed. Appreciated, especially under the circumstances! I' not sure what the attraction of iPhones is. Now we've got iWatches, for God's sake! All the best, Tony.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
a few at first,
small vanities of age, quite shyly worn
I've grown to like their lovely uselessness;
their stand in face of failing life and age.
(I like these lines)
A very thoughtful poem on the subject of aging. I really like the conclusion. Weell written, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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a few at first,
small vanities of age, quite shyly worn
I've grown to like their lovely uselessness;
their stand in face of failing life and age.
(I like these lines)
A very thoughtful poem on the subject of aging. I really like the conclusion. Weell written, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Many thanks for your review, Debbis, and for pointing out the parts that worked best for you. Appreciated. Tony
Comment from Dawn Munro
Tony, what a simply superb blank verse (one of the most beautiful and most challenging of forms, IMO) - this is so exquisite, so sweet it's like the finest music ringing in my ears as I read! Example - "I thought the trees no good, they'd had their day, but then the blossoms came, a few at first, small vanities of age, quite shyly worn..." Shucks, I'm tearing up at the beauty - gotta stop re-writing now!
This, my friend, has touched me deeply. Simply masterful. If this isn't POM I will not believe it was even seen by those who nominate or whatever it is that happens!!!
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Tony, what a simply superb blank verse (one of the most beautiful and most challenging of forms, IMO) - this is so exquisite, so sweet it's like the finest music ringing in my ears as I read! Example - "I thought the trees no good, they'd had their day, but then the blossoms came, a few at first, small vanities of age, quite shyly worn..." Shucks, I'm tearing up at the beauty - gotta stop re-writing now!
This, my friend, has touched me deeply. Simply masterful. If this isn't POM I will not believe it was even seen by those who nominate or whatever it is that happens!!!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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What a wonderfully affirmative review this is - and six stars and a bookmark too! Thank you very much! Best wishes, Tony.
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It was (and is) so much my pleasure!
Comment from TAB_that's me
I'm glad you mentioned inline rhymes because I was going to mention them. Personally, I like a little assonance/near rhyme add to poetry. Your meter is spot on.
Lovely blank verse written perfectly (with added assonance:)
Teresa
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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I'm glad you mentioned inline rhymes because I was going to mention them. Personally, I like a little assonance/near rhyme add to poetry. Your meter is spot on.
Lovely blank verse written perfectly (with added assonance:)
Teresa
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Thank you, Teresa, for this most complimentary review.
Comment from poetadeu
You set a picturesque scene while adding touches
of not only natures realities, but of man's, too,
Your notes have reminded that fires are painfully
destructive and what nature has gifted will not
soon return to the land, if ever. Most excellent
read and thank you.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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You set a picturesque scene while adding touches
of not only natures realities, but of man's, too,
Your notes have reminded that fires are painfully
destructive and what nature has gifted will not
soon return to the land, if ever. Most excellent
read and thank you.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Thank you, poetadeu, for this most complimentary review.
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It was my pleasure. Thank you!
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is a beautiful write, tfawcus, excellent imagery presented in this blank verse, nice incidental rhyme, beautiful picture and enjoyable author notes. I enjoyed reading it
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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this is a beautiful write, tfawcus, excellent imagery presented in this blank verse, nice incidental rhyme, beautiful picture and enjoyable author notes. I enjoyed reading it
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Many thanks, Sweetwoodjax . I appreciate your review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from OLA THOMAS
I celebrate this poem because of it flow and smoothness of rendition. I flow with the smoothness and it thrills my mind. Great work.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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I celebrate this poem because of it flow and smoothness of rendition. I flow with the smoothness and it thrills my mind. Great work.
ola thomas
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Many thanks, Ola. I appreciate your review. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from w.j.debi
You have such excellent story telling skills. These almond trees seem to have endeared their uselessness to you as just plain tenacious and lovely as they have endured the years and all the troubles that come their way.
Your iambic meter has such a gentle pacing and enhances your word choices. You create great sensory imagery of the gardens with your descriptions. You make the almond trees seem almost romantic with the line
and overlooking all... these almond eyes.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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You have such excellent story telling skills. These almond trees seem to have endeared their uselessness to you as just plain tenacious and lovely as they have endured the years and all the troubles that come their way.
Your iambic meter has such a gentle pacing and enhances your word choices. You create great sensory imagery of the gardens with your descriptions. You make the almond trees seem almost romantic with the line
and overlooking all... these almond eyes.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Many thanks, WJD. I appreciate your review and kind words. So glad you enjoyed my poem. Thanks, too, for the generous star rating. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Wonderful photos to go with your well written poem.
-There is so much vivid imagery, the reader feels that he/she is there, sharing in these events going on with the almond trees: feeling the uselessness of having the trees affected by the fire, the many birds and bees returning to use the trees for their purposes, regardless of how they look now, and finally, the hearts of the lovers who stand below.
-The extra photo you have is so beautiful.
-Some of the particular lines or images I like are:
* "extend arthritic arms towards the dawn"
* The next to the last stanza, with so much imagery, ending with "... these almond eyes." I like the personification you use here.
-An effective conclusion, and I, too, would find it hard not to appreciate the beauty of the blossoms on these trees even though they are not what they once were; I am sure that is very hard when you knew about their history.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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-Wonderful photos to go with your well written poem.
-There is so much vivid imagery, the reader feels that he/she is there, sharing in these events going on with the almond trees: feeling the uselessness of having the trees affected by the fire, the many birds and bees returning to use the trees for their purposes, regardless of how they look now, and finally, the hearts of the lovers who stand below.
-The extra photo you have is so beautiful.
-Some of the particular lines or images I like are:
* "extend arthritic arms towards the dawn"
* The next to the last stanza, with so much imagery, ending with "... these almond eyes." I like the personification you use here.
-An effective conclusion, and I, too, would find it hard not to appreciate the beauty of the blossoms on these trees even though they are not what they once were; I am sure that is very hard when you knew about their history.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Many thanks, Respa. I appreciate your review and kind words. So glad you enjoyed my poem. Thanks, too, for the generous star rating. Best wishes, Tony
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You are welcome for the rating and the review. Your poem deserved it.
Comment from sgalletti
Hi Tony! You are, by far, one of the most excelled poets of Blank Verse I have read. Your ability to describe images so vividly and with such delightful, flowing enjambment while maintaining iambic meter and avoiding rhyme impresses the hell out of me! This is an ambitious piece and a wonderful poem to read and enjoy. Sue
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Hi Tony! You are, by far, one of the most excelled poets of Blank Verse I have read. Your ability to describe images so vividly and with such delightful, flowing enjambment while maintaining iambic meter and avoiding rhyme impresses the hell out of me! This is an ambitious piece and a wonderful poem to read and enjoy. Sue
Comment Written 09-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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Many thanks, Sue. I appreciate your review and kind words. So glad you enjoyed my poem. Thanks, too, for the generous star rating. Best wishes, Tony
