Big Brother
Bruce is always there19 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
Aw, this is a heartwarming story Gunner. It would be nice to have a big brother to take care of one like that.
And you've got all the necessary elements of a short story inside a 100 word dash, so congratulations to you.
Nice work!
Gloria
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Aw, this is a heartwarming story Gunner. It would be nice to have a big brother to take care of one like that.
And you've got all the necessary elements of a short story inside a 100 word dash, so congratulations to you.
Nice work!
Gloria
Comment Written 11-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2015
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Thank you for your kind words!!
Comment from XGoneX
Hi there,
I liked the story and how you managed to tell it in just a few words as required by the contest.
I could connect with the characters and found it a cute story. Good luck.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Hi there,
I liked the story and how you managed to tell it in just a few words as required by the contest.
I could connect with the characters and found it a cute story. Good luck.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from MsPetra
You nailed it in 100 words. I liked that your story came to a positive end. You could have went anywhere with this. Your story goes well with the photo.
Please keep writing. I will be looking forward to future offerings from you.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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You nailed it in 100 words. I liked that your story came to a positive end. You could have went anywhere with this. Your story goes well with the photo.
Please keep writing. I will be looking forward to future offerings from you.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2015
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Thank you for taking the time to read my short and giving your review.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements splendidly with a correct word count. This is a delightfully uplifting tale and extremely well penned. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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This meets the contest requirements splendidly with a correct word count. This is a delightfully uplifting tale and extremely well penned. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from mfowler
Oh, this is sweet. Everybody wants a kid sister or a dashing big brother like this to make a family. You set up the narrative very well, describe the emotional aspect of the child really well, and conclude with a satisfying resolution. Good work in 100 words. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Oh, this is sweet. Everybody wants a kid sister or a dashing big brother like this to make a family. You set up the narrative very well, describe the emotional aspect of the child really well, and conclude with a satisfying resolution. Good work in 100 words. Best of luck.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Thank you for your kind review. Flash shorts are fun.
Comment from BeasPeas
As it should be--brother looking after little sister. She'll be there for him, too, as they travel through life. A nice story.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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As it should be--brother looking after little sister. She'll be there for him, too, as they travel through life. A nice story.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the kind words.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Bruce is certainly the exception when it comes to big brothers and they ways in which they like to taunt and tease their baby sisters when they see them crying. With my son, who is four years his sister's senior, it was always something like, "Whassamadder, ya big baby? Did its poor wittle ball go bye-bye, hee-hee?"
That being said, it's nice to know there are some children out there who actually look out for each other.
Well done, and way to go, Bruce!
Good luck in the contest... ~Dean
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Bruce is certainly the exception when it comes to big brothers and they ways in which they like to taunt and tease their baby sisters when they see them crying. With my son, who is four years his sister's senior, it was always something like, "Whassamadder, ya big baby? Did its poor wittle ball go bye-bye, hee-hee?"
That being said, it's nice to know there are some children out there who actually look out for each other.
Well done, and way to go, Bruce!
Good luck in the contest... ~Dean
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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It was a fun story to write.
Thank you.
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You're welcome. :)
Comment from MelB
Fits requirements for the contest. What a nice brother! It's nice to know that some brothers take care of their sisters. Mine didn't. Best wishes to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Fits requirements for the contest. What a nice brother! It's nice to know that some brothers take care of their sisters. Mine didn't. Best wishes to you in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Thank you.
Comment from write hand blue
I wondered how the big brother got hold of her ball so he could give it back to her.
I haven't counted the words but I assume that your story complies with the 100 word limit.
Good luck with the comp.
:) Mel.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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I wondered how the big brother got hold of her ball so he could give it back to her.
I haven't counted the words but I assume that your story complies with the 100 word limit.
Good luck with the comp.
:) Mel.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Thank you!!
Comment from barkingdog
Big brother and little sister seem to make the perfect pair. She looks up to him, and he doesn't mind being her 'hero'.
I was afraid she'd climb the fence and go after the ball. What a relief when she didn't.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Big brother and little sister seem to make the perfect pair. She looks up to him, and he doesn't mind being her 'hero'.
I was afraid she'd climb the fence and go after the ball. What a relief when she didn't.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Thank You!!
