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Comment from Jaq Cee
Well, well, well my metaphorical marvel. Good to see you are still producing thought evoking poems.
Some beautiful lines in this.... I particularly liked the 4th stanza my friend.
Keep on keeping on Michael, love Jaq :) xxx
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2015
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Well, well, well my metaphorical marvel. Good to see you are still producing thought evoking poems.
Some beautiful lines in this.... I particularly liked the 4th stanza my friend.
Keep on keeping on Michael, love Jaq :) xxx
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2015
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ha..Jaq what a surprise...-smile- thank you Sweetheart...miss you around here. It aint like the old days...-wink- hope you're doing well my friend. love Michael
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I hope to find some words soon my friend. Missing reading yours too xx
Comment from amanda98653
This is a spectacular poem, Michael!
"sudden vulnerability is a straw house of strength"--Wow! What an extraordinary use of metaphoric phrases!
"Taos hums New Mexico's ghost music
dead wind inexplicable
if you listen closely you can hear almost"--so hauntingly beautiful!
Such a strong, poignant poem.
Hugs
Amanda
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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This is a spectacular poem, Michael!
"sudden vulnerability is a straw house of strength"--Wow! What an extraordinary use of metaphoric phrases!
"Taos hums New Mexico's ghost music
dead wind inexplicable
if you listen closely you can hear almost"--so hauntingly beautiful!
Such a strong, poignant poem.
Hugs
Amanda
Comment Written 07-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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spectacular is sunshine your wake creates. Hello Princess...-smile-...thank you lil' wing...always pleasure when you show. You still singing rocky mountain high...I cant hear you ...higher!...hah....kiss you on cheek.....love Michael
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I saw a cute wolf today!
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at the zoo right ...? dont make me worry lil' wing-
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Wolfwood refuge organized the event. The wolves are all very friendly :)
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I'm sure , just wear mittens...-wink-
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Hugs :)
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big bear squeeze...-smile-
Comment from ravenblack
I really like your poem, ancient answers on the wind that are missed in the now. I really like the stanza with a straw house of strength- an illusive strength that just takes some wolf breath to blow down, in this case the disconnected Babel of modern times. Just a few suggestions- " your never happen"- your never happening and you can hear almost- you can almost hear... excellent poem.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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I really like your poem, ancient answers on the wind that are missed in the now. I really like the stanza with a straw house of strength- an illusive strength that just takes some wolf breath to blow down, in this case the disconnected Babel of modern times. Just a few suggestions- " your never happen"- your never happening and you can hear almost- you can almost hear... excellent poem.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Babel was marvel of its time...the tower...so impressive in reach...even God worried. -smile- Hi Ed...I asked somebody what were some of the world most extraordinary things...and listed some them in the poem. My writing has evolved...its now usually just an emptying of this moments thoughts. this ...I guess is a guy listening to the hum....of his extraordinary life and wondering about the almost and should have beens, knowing through experience and faith there will be a tomorrow with all that she brings...-smile- thank you Bro...love Michael
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Our Sojourn~by reconciled
Taos sings old songs to gain advice from his elders. Vulnerability is a straw house of strength with windows of shattered souls.
Your poem is very esoteric and hard to understand.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Our Sojourn~by reconciled
Taos sings old songs to gain advice from his elders. Vulnerability is a straw house of strength with windows of shattered souls.
Your poem is very esoteric and hard to understand.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Look Gypsy if your going to resort to using big words I can too..so...so...supercalifragifisticexpialidocious ! I'm not playing!....smile-...O my God...homework people...its happening in your hometowns....all around the hum...the hum...it comes!.....-wink-....love Michael
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Michael! What are you talking about?
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um...its called humor Gypsy. Now, careful... don't get too close you just might crack up. -headtilt-
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You are so estrange LOL
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yes I am...but I used to be!
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Cool, I am kind of strange too :)
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strangers in the niiiiight...exchanging glances..hm hm hm hmmm...haha
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LOL Good night Michael, don't get into too much trouble. :)
Comment from XGoneX
Hi,
I don't know Mexico to comment about it in your poem. But I liked how you linked Mexico, with a ghost music and a dead wind. It brings a sense of nostalgia and magic.
I also liked the contrast of words you used when conveying your message, such as:sudden vulnerability is a straw house of strength.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Hi,
I don't know Mexico to comment about it in your poem. But I liked how you linked Mexico, with a ghost music and a dead wind. It brings a sense of nostalgia and magic.
I also liked the contrast of words you used when conveying your message, such as:sudden vulnerability is a straw house of strength.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Taos New Mexico...is in the United States. There is heard a hum, constant and inexplicable. No one has been able to figure its origin. I thought it quite extraordinary...but I find myself where no one else looks...hah...thank you Sweetheart...good to see you...love Michael
Comment from Joan E.
More stars than Iceland in the picture you selected, but we are amazed by the geysers and waterfalls! I admired your tercets and the contradiction in "straw house of strength". Here's to "New Mexico's ghost music"! Cheers- Joan, from Reykjavik
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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More stars than Iceland in the picture you selected, but we are amazed by the geysers and waterfalls! I admired your tercets and the contradiction in "straw house of strength". Here's to "New Mexico's ghost music"! Cheers- Joan, from Reykjavik
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Hi J....-smile- Oh yea, I've heard if you stand under them there geysers you get wet...the only waterfall I've ever seen is when I relieve myself...haha...alright kid, lifejackets and seatbelts....love Michael
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Time to get you out and about--Niagara Falls awaits! Big smiles- Joan
Comment from robina1978
I really don't get this one, Michael. I don't see what the picture is. Your poem is a free verse alright but covers quite a lot of ground. I don't know anything about New Mexico or what they do.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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I really don't get this one, Michael. I don't see what the picture is. Your poem is a free verse alright but covers quite a lot of ground. I don't know anything about New Mexico or what they do.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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Hm.....have you up dated your gps..? A navigational system is as good as the information given....any Sunday works for me....smile....yes sister there is an inapplicable hum admitting from Taos New Mexico ....I'm on my way now....I believe it's my cousin Samuel .....stay tuned. Love michael
Comment from Nottoway
This poem is inspiring in its ability to make us reflect on the past and ponder our future. To me it includes and element of hope and a certain level of warning about our own mortality. The photo offers great hope for whats possible and great solitude.
Beautifully written.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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This poem is inspiring in its ability to make us reflect on the past and ponder our future. To me it includes and element of hope and a certain level of warning about our own mortality. The photo offers great hope for whats possible and great solitude.
Beautifully written.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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yes...thats where I was...listening to the hum of history and reflecting I guess...appreciate your time....love Michael
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, this sounds like a very rare occurrence...something you don't hear everyday...in this little town in New Mexico...a hum that rings out for all to hear...supernatural...amazing...almost magical...and told loud enough for you to hear...truly written in your own unique style...very well done baby...love Linda xxoo goodnight
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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HI Michael, this sounds like a very rare occurrence...something you don't hear everyday...in this little town in New Mexico...a hum that rings out for all to hear...supernatural...amazing...almost magical...and told loud enough for you to hear...truly written in your own unique style...very well done baby...love Linda xxoo goodnight
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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every second is a rare occasion were just not aware...-smile- hello sugar plum....thank you so much.....love Michael
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Hi Baby, sorry...and of course you are always so welcome...tomorrow...and love ya too...going to bed...think I am catching a cold...xxoo Linda
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
I particularly like these lines in the first and last stanzas of this poem: "ancient as what was almost said" . . . "if you listen closely you can hear tomorrow."
These are wonderful descriptions of "New Mexico's ghost music": thoughtful, eerie, and expressive. Otherwise the whole thing is a rather interesting stream of consciousness. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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I particularly like these lines in the first and last stanzas of this poem: "ancient as what was almost said" . . . "if you listen closely you can hear tomorrow."
These are wonderful descriptions of "New Mexico's ghost music": thoughtful, eerie, and expressive. Otherwise the whole thing is a rather interesting stream of consciousness. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2015
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absolutely...life is, if nothing else an interesting stream of conscious experience...-smile-...thank you Jeanie....love Michael
