Demon Seed With Interest
100 word horror28 total reviews
Comment from Sefiros
Nice. At first I thought this was a newfound father working out some fears about inadequaty, before he holds his child in his arms and breathes in its smell. I bet every father balks at a weak moment. Then the picture of Donald Trump comes along, and it totally makes sense for different reasons. Nice job.
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Nice. At first I thought this was a newfound father working out some fears about inadequaty, before he holds his child in his arms and breathes in its smell. I bet every father balks at a weak moment. Then the picture of Donald Trump comes along, and it totally makes sense for different reasons. Nice job.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2015
Comment from seaglass
LOL... a parent's worse nightmare...This is funny and you nailed it right on the head. God deliver us from him winning the presidency.
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LOL... a parent's worse nightmare...This is funny and you nailed it right on the head. God deliver us from him winning the presidency.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2015
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the pictures. I love the surprise ending. Donald Trump probably did start his life this way. I feel sorry for the step father. Great work.
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I love the pictures. I love the surprise ending. Donald Trump probably did start his life this way. I feel sorry for the step father. Great work.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
Comment from CR Delport
Haha, Mikey, this is supposed to be horror, but you won the competition with comedy. Brilliant! Well deserved I might add. Good job.
Take care.
Christelle.
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Haha, Mikey, this is supposed to be horror, but you won the competition with comedy. Brilliant! Well deserved I might add. Good job.
Take care.
Christelle.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
Comment from mfowler
Clever, clever! So Donald Trump's look alike baby is the demon's seed. I hope America never gets to find out. You tell this so beautifully for a mini-flash, building up our interest with talk of cheating wives, fugly babies and unwanted responsibilities. The reveal gives us a kick with a laugh on the end. So well done; I'm not surprised you've shared the spoils on this. Congratulations.
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Clever, clever! So Donald Trump's look alike baby is the demon's seed. I hope America never gets to find out. You tell this so beautifully for a mini-flash, building up our interest with talk of cheating wives, fugly babies and unwanted responsibilities. The reveal gives us a kick with a laugh on the end. So well done; I'm not surprised you've shared the spoils on this. Congratulations.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
Comment from Nosha17
I don't normally read horror and thriller, but this was not too gruesome and no blood. Must be awful to have to bring up a monster until it utters those words! Well written within the constraints of the contest. Good luck in the contest. Faye
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I don't normally read horror and thriller, but this was not too gruesome and no blood. Must be awful to have to bring up a monster until it utters those words! Well written within the constraints of the contest. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
Comment from rama devi
Ha ha ha-=clever closing twist. Matches the artwork too. This is funny, and makes a great entry in this contest but it needs a few small tweaks, IMHO.
NOTES:
The child, that precious child, well, not mine(,) thank God.
Why not Brad Pitt, he's got bucks.
Spaggy. Suggest:
Why not Brad Pitt? He's got bucks.
Would I be liable if they had a stroke?
Would I be liable if they have a stroke?
Good luck in the contest, Mikey. This is likely to win votes...great POV, pacing and also a witty closing.
Warmly, rd
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Ha ha ha-=clever closing twist. Matches the artwork too. This is funny, and makes a great entry in this contest but it needs a few small tweaks, IMHO.
NOTES:
The child, that precious child, well, not mine(,) thank God.
Why not Brad Pitt, he's got bucks.
Spaggy. Suggest:
Why not Brad Pitt? He's got bucks.
Would I be liable if they had a stroke?
Would I be liable if they have a stroke?
Good luck in the contest, Mikey. This is likely to win votes...great POV, pacing and also a witty closing.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
Comment from LIJ Red
I was thinking, well, he's getting sort of melodramatic, until I saw the last line and the pic. Lee Iacocca, when a run was suggested to him, said it was best to distance oneself from that damned mess...this is more humor than horror, ya know...
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I was thinking, well, he's getting sort of melodramatic, until I saw the last line and the pic. Lee Iacocca, when a run was suggested to him, said it was best to distance oneself from that damned mess...this is more humor than horror, ya know...
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
Comment from Bill Schott
This story certainly deals with a true horror story in the making. It seems like Trump cannot be crude enough to dim his popularity with Republican pollsters. Nice story.
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This story certainly deals with a true horror story in the making. It seems like Trump cannot be crude enough to dim his popularity with Republican pollsters. Nice story.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
Comment from l.raven
OMG Michael, I am LMAO....made me spill my glass of water....this is truly a horror poem if I ever so one...and lets hope other people in the US figure it out....so very well written...and soooooo damn funny...the picture says it all you...great job...Luff Linda xxoo
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OMG Michael, I am LMAO....made me spill my glass of water....this is truly a horror poem if I ever so one...and lets hope other people in the US figure it out....so very well written...and soooooo damn funny...the picture says it all you...great job...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
