Comment from Treischel

Excellent

You manage the pack two scenarios into these few words. The drips and the phone calls. In conjunction the are very creepy. Congrats. It looks to me like it made it into the contest. This site can be frustrating at times.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2015

Thanks for the positive response, Mr. "T". I sincerely appreciate it. :}
~Dean

Comment from Chrissy710

Excellent

another good piece Dean just enough in 100 words to portray a spooky feeling and a bit glad I am not alone. the dripping tap was effective also . a good writing prompt entry Cheers Christineð???

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015

Thanks, Chrissy. I'm glad you liked he story--sound FX and all--and I appreciate your feedback.
~Dean

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Exceptional

You've done it again Dean.
Maximum impact yet so few words.
The image is stunning and the message cold and calculating.
Check the fourth line- I think you may mean faucet.
:-) Shirley

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2015

Comment from Deepmar

Excellent

You really got me !!
Here I am alone I open your posting and I start jumping wondering why is a phone ringing and water dripping !!Loll
Excellent work horror piece .
And welcome back , you went missing for awhile maybe Nina wanted your company !
Maria

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015

Not Nina, Maria (thankfully!), but a few others required my immediate and undivided attention. I appreciate the positive feedback for the story, and I'm pleased to know that you enjoyed reading it.
~Dean

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

I forgot I'd left the speakers on. I heard a phone ringing somewhere. Got a hell of a shock until I realised I was reading your work. The penny dropped and I read on. This is a spooky little piece. Nice story line leading up to the reveal. Loved the phone calls especially Nina asking for messages. Very good. The closing line is chilling and very satisfying for a thriller type story. Sorry, you missed the contest. Happened to me today. Bloody annoying.
One spag: facet..faucet

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2015

Thanks for pointing out the error, mark. It's either time to learn to spell or get another updated spell-checker. I believe I'll opt for the latter, it's much less expensive, LOL.
I appreciate the positive review. Glad you enjoyed the story.
~Dean

Comment from Benjamin Valencia

Excellent

Hi Dean. Riveting write. You really went all out with the image and the sound effect. Awesome. This sounds like it could come out in a newspaper. Sorry to hear about that misfortune trying to enroll the piece in the contest. Take care and cheers.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2015

Comment from Michaelk

Exceptional

Ahh, there's those chills I've been missing. A spectacularly creepy tale as only you can tell it. Very compact tale, but each scene is condensed with the greatest concentration of tension. The feeling is ominous from the beginning. The whispered voices lights the fuse, and 'Nina wants company' is the bomb.
Excellent twist, excellent story.
Great to have you back.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2015

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

welcome back, dean, I have missed you. I think I would ignore the bath and find another place to live. I enjoyed reading it and am sorry you missed the contest

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2015

Comment from write hand blue

Excellent

Good tension is initiated by the animated dripping tap this is accentuated by the sound of the steady drip.

Stark black and white gives no relief to the tension. This is built up as the story unfolds told in just 100 words. The reader is soon compelled to jump off the balcony. Lol... No but the object is achieved by a sense of unease felt by the reader towards the end.

Good story, sorry about contest debacle, tell me about it. I had my contest entry disabled by a glitch, after a week of crap with Tom (the idiot routine), so I had an entry with just a title all week. A complete waste of time.

:) Mel.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2015

Comment from Jaxpoet

Excellent

It worked man. Gave me the willies. The hair is still standing on my arms. It does not help that is after 1;00 and I am sitting in the dark with only the light of my computer screen.
Great job
Jax

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2015