Dead Man Walking
A young Life Wasted38 total reviews
Comment from MelB
So very well written. Play with fire and you are going to get burned. The devil doesn't play nice or fair. So glad Jesus is there to rescue us, for those that choose Him.
You danced with the devil
Got in over your head
You'd like a "do over"
But sadly you are dead - Unfortunately, so true!
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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So very well written. Play with fire and you are going to get burned. The devil doesn't play nice or fair. So glad Jesus is there to rescue us, for those that choose Him.
You danced with the devil
Got in over your head
You'd like a "do over"
But sadly you are dead - Unfortunately, so true!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much MelB. I really appreciate your very fine comments.
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hi Nomi338.. I absolutely loved this poem. It's dedicated appropriately too. The part with the Devil pulling you down and not letting you fly extends interesting imagery. Good luck sir and cheers.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Hi Nomi338.. I absolutely loved this poem. It's dedicated appropriately too. The part with the Devil pulling you down and not letting you fly extends interesting imagery. Good luck sir and cheers.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Thank you Benjamin, I appreciate so much your great comments.
Comment from happykat4
What a message!!! This is so very sad. Evil is everywhere and wanting the souls of everyone. Thank God he sent Jesus to save us. Very good rhyme, flow and for me, when a poem touches the hearts of many and also engages the mind, it deserves recognition. I hope it is one of the poems considered for poem of the month. Keep sharing and thank you.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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What a message!!! This is so very sad. Evil is everywhere and wanting the souls of everyone. Thank God he sent Jesus to save us. Very good rhyme, flow and for me, when a poem touches the hearts of many and also engages the mind, it deserves recognition. I hope it is one of the poems considered for poem of the month. Keep sharing and thank you.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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From your pen hopefully to God's eyes. I appreciate your awesome comments.
Comment from Clockwise
Having worked in the field of corrections for seven years, this poem really resonates with me. I wish I could force all the young men from those days to read this. I wish if I did it would make a difference. They are a hard-headed bunch.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Having worked in the field of corrections for seven years, this poem really resonates with me. I wish I could force all the young men from those days to read this. I wish if I did it would make a difference. They are a hard-headed bunch.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2015
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Clockwise, this is the kind of validation that convinces me that I just might be on the right track with this. I feared for a time that I might come off as too preachy. Your response makes me feel better. Thank you.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great commentary on how some act regardless of what they have been taught. I liked your great rhyme. The message is strong. The artwork is perfect. Good job expressing your feelings in this well written poem. I see no changes. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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This is a great commentary on how some act regardless of what they have been taught. I liked your great rhyme. The message is strong. The artwork is perfect. Good job expressing your feelings in this well written poem. I see no changes. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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Thank you for your excellent review. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Cragler
You definitely get your message across in this piece the poem flows and rhymes very well I like the narrative style it has. Well done
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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You definitely get your message across in this piece the poem flows and rhymes very well I like the narrative style it has. Well done
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much, your wonderful comments made my day
Comment from meggie13
Children will listen to their friends before they listen to their parents. They do not realize that their parents were younger once. There are so many temptations out there that they need to how to rebuke their worst enemy. He is roaming out there looking for those he can trap. The pleasures of the world for the young ones are drugs , stealing, gangs and so forth . These could surely send them to jail or to the grave. Well written with a good picture to bring the message home. You used a good theme for your poem
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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Children will listen to their friends before they listen to their parents. They do not realize that their parents were younger once. There are so many temptations out there that they need to how to rebuke their worst enemy. He is roaming out there looking for those he can trap. The pleasures of the world for the young ones are drugs , stealing, gangs and so forth . These could surely send them to jail or to the grave. Well written with a good picture to bring the message home. You used a good theme for your poem
Comment Written 04-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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Oh my oh my. I cannot find the words to express how much your words mean to me. I worried that my message might seem too preachy, thank God they did not. I appreciate your awesome commentary on my poem.No Rebekk
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You are most welcome . There was nothing preachy about your message.This was an eye opener, some parents are too young and trust their children too much.
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You are most welcome . There was nothing preachy about your message.This was an eye opener, some parents are too young and trust their children too much.
Comment from rjuselius
this is a fine social commentary and a brilliant philosophical sentiment dear nomi! it is well executed (no pun intended) and the flow is brilliant. the message is quite clear and the guidance of our elder ones is a valuable lesson.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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this is a fine social commentary and a brilliant philosophical sentiment dear nomi! it is well executed (no pun intended) and the flow is brilliant. the message is quite clear and the guidance of our elder ones is a valuable lesson.
thank you for sharing!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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No Rebekka, thank you for sharing your wonderful comments with me. I so appreciate you great thoughts. It would appear that my message reached an audience that could relate. This pleases me very much.
Comment from TAB_that's me
There seems to be a lot of people, young and old, dancing with the devil these days. Great poem with good rhyme and meter.
teresa
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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There seems to be a lot of people, young and old, dancing with the devil these days. Great poem with good rhyme and meter.
teresa
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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Hey Teresa, thanks for stopping by. I appreciate your awesome comments.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello nomi338
I like~Dead Man Walking~
is about a young man that didn't listen to good advice and did some wrong that got him killed. I think you did a good job.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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Hello nomi338
I like~Dead Man Walking~
is about a young man that didn't listen to good advice and did some wrong that got him killed. I think you did a good job.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2015
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Thank you Gypsy Blue Rose, your comments are wonderful, encouraging and inspiring.
