Dead Man Walking
A young Life Wasted38 total reviews
Comment from Jean Lutz
Just said a prayer that your talented words would reach hearts that are lost. So much sadness, lives ending 'way too soon. Some are taking to the streets trying to take our children back. If you do a search of Project H.O.O.D. and "Let Us Live Peace March" or Pastor Corey Brooks you will learn of some of the efforts in Chicago. I wrote about it in one of my poems which I think you reviewed.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Just said a prayer that your talented words would reach hearts that are lost. So much sadness, lives ending 'way too soon. Some are taking to the streets trying to take our children back. If you do a search of Project H.O.O.D. and "Let Us Live Peace March" or Pastor Corey Brooks you will learn of some of the efforts in Chicago. I wrote about it in one of my poems which I think you reviewed.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2015
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind review comments. The subject matter of this poem is near and dear to my heart. As a father and grandfather I live in dread of my son and grandson becoming a victim of violence despite my successful efforts to keep them from becoming involved in a violent lifestyle. Make no mistake, no one is completely safe from random acts of violence.
Comment from Day Z Chayn
Technically, we're all 'dead men (& women & children) walking when we choose to ignore the right or just actions we ought perform for our brothers & sisters within collective society as we walk this earth. Too many misconceptions (& perhaps preconceptions also) put us at risk with crippling ourselves by either our actions or collective inaction. Evil happens when good men do nothing.
Blessings,
Shane
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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Technically, we're all 'dead men (& women & children) walking when we choose to ignore the right or just actions we ought perform for our brothers & sisters within collective society as we walk this earth. Too many misconceptions (& perhaps preconceptions also) put us at risk with crippling ourselves by either our actions or collective inaction. Evil happens when good men do nothing.
Blessings,
Shane
Comment Written 26-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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Thank you so much for your insightful comments. You are obviously a deep thinker and I appreciate your sharing of your emotions and thoughts.
Comment from I am Cat
HI Nomi,
As always, you tell a tale with a lovely lilt and a way in which everyone can relate...
Too often, many of these kids don't even have good role models so it's not even like they could look to good parents for ways to do better, so it's truly sad. Often fathers don't stick around, and mothers have to go back to work, and there is abuse left and right... it's sad.
The devil is the least of their problems, with no money and no sense of purpose... they just try to survive, stay alive. They only way they know how to do so is to become tougher than the next guy.
I've no idea how they get by without crying themselves to sleep at night. I know that's what I'd be doing.
It's a sad world for some kids... truly sad with no light in the darkness.
Ah well... I suppose we can't solve the world's problems in this tiny little box either, can we? :(
But hey, we can try. lol
Thanks nomi... always a pleasure to read your thoughts.
Cat
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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HI Nomi,
As always, you tell a tale with a lovely lilt and a way in which everyone can relate...
Too often, many of these kids don't even have good role models so it's not even like they could look to good parents for ways to do better, so it's truly sad. Often fathers don't stick around, and mothers have to go back to work, and there is abuse left and right... it's sad.
The devil is the least of their problems, with no money and no sense of purpose... they just try to survive, stay alive. They only way they know how to do so is to become tougher than the next guy.
I've no idea how they get by without crying themselves to sleep at night. I know that's what I'd be doing.
It's a sad world for some kids... truly sad with no light in the darkness.
Ah well... I suppose we can't solve the world's problems in this tiny little box either, can we? :(
But hey, we can try. lol
Thanks nomi... always a pleasure to read your thoughts.
Cat
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Yes but you see, we through our writing can maybe, just maybe reach somebody's heart and conscious mind and influence them to break the chain and do a better job of being a parent/custodian of the young lives that have been entrusted to us.. As always I thank you for your review comments.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Great poetry. The young ones, before they know what hits them they are on a road of now return. It is very sad because most of them are from good parents but they simply rather believe the devil and his followers than the loving parents. I am most grateful that my children did not get lost on this terrible road.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Great poetry. The young ones, before they know what hits them they are on a road of now return. It is very sad because most of them are from good parents but they simply rather believe the devil and his followers than the loving parents. I am most grateful that my children did not get lost on this terrible road.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Thank you for your wonderful comments. The tactics of the devil have not changed, he convinced Eve that she did not need to listen to or obey her heavenly father which led to disastrous results, in a like manner he convinces children today to disobey and disregard their earthy parents with bad results.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Well nothing convoluted or obscured in this poem. It is as straight-talking as they come.
Good short verses give it a good pace and good advice and stern warning.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Hi there,
Well nothing convoluted or obscured in this poem. It is as straight-talking as they come.
Good short verses give it a good pace and good advice and stern warning.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Thank you for your kind and generous comments. I appreciate you very much.
Comment from c_lucas
For some, there are no second chances. The Devil pays in counterfeit money and claims one's soul when their forfeit. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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For some, there are no second chances. The Devil pays in counterfeit money and claims one's soul when their forfeit. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Thank you Charlie. I love the way you express yourself, you are among the world's best.
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You're welcome, Nomi
Comment from Chris Tee
Yes there are too many of those knuckleheads and it is a disgrace indeed. Well done with this great poem which had excellent flow and good rhyming.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Yes there are too many of those knuckleheads and it is a disgrace indeed. Well done with this great poem which had excellent flow and good rhyming.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Thank you Chris, I appreciate your kind review comments. My big hope and prayer is that at least one person can and will read what I have written and accept the advice I so willingly offer.
Comment from watergirl
I like your poem about lost or wasted opportunity and the tragedy found there.
You take the reader along a path to meet the one who has gone astray and it is easy to relate to this tragic loss of life lived. The waste is clear to see. Very well done.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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I like your poem about lost or wasted opportunity and the tragedy found there.
You take the reader along a path to meet the one who has gone astray and it is easy to relate to this tragic loss of life lived. The waste is clear to see. Very well done.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Thank you Watergirl, Your kind review is very welcome. I appreciate all of your wonderful comments.
Comment from Senyai
Hi, Nomi338. Glad to meet you. Yes, your poem resonated with me. When I'm in the Mall in my town, I see in the sea of youths walking the floors, an impertinent face here or there. The world is in their way, they are all important and annoyed. Nothing will be fair, every obstacle is an infringement upon their privilege. They want every road to be a boulevard for them, unimpeded as they race through life, taking what they want. Looking into the future for them, I see a broken and disappointed person, surly and bitter. Could it be, me?
Your well written and reflective verse, reins us all in, back to the concrete laws laid down over kitchen tables everywhere.
Senyai
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Hi, Nomi338. Glad to meet you. Yes, your poem resonated with me. When I'm in the Mall in my town, I see in the sea of youths walking the floors, an impertinent face here or there. The world is in their way, they are all important and annoyed. Nothing will be fair, every obstacle is an infringement upon their privilege. They want every road to be a boulevard for them, unimpeded as they race through life, taking what they want. Looking into the future for them, I see a broken and disappointed person, surly and bitter. Could it be, me?
Your well written and reflective verse, reins us all in, back to the concrete laws laid down over kitchen tables everywhere.
Senyai
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Hello Senyai, I don't know how old you are. If you are a young person, you speak with much wisdom and maturity. With a mindset such as yours, you should be fine. The problem comes in when we forget the things we were taught. For those never taught, one can only hope, for those who ignore the fine lessons, there is no excuse.
Comment from Aussie
I understood your wayward poem; to every man there opens a highway and a low, each man decides which way his soul shall go. Young people, would be's if they could be's. You can lead a horse to water, you can't make them drink. Well done poet.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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I understood your wayward poem; to every man there opens a highway and a low, each man decides which way his soul shall go. Young people, would be's if they could be's. You can lead a horse to water, you can't make them drink. Well done poet.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2015
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Than you Aussie, your points are well stated. It is indeed up to each person to apply or disregard the things we have either been taught or learned through experience. What we do with what we know, makes us the persons we become.
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Amen to that. It is disturbing the way the youth are headed today; no respect, no communication, no kindness etc. :-|
