Texas Dream Catcher
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Comment from rmj09
The focus Jim getting rid of Littleton. The storyline development Kuruk is refusing medical care, but has agreed to blood test. The doctor suspects a tick bite, Kuruk may have gotten two weeks ago while gathering herbs. Jim is worried about Soni and Kuruk. When Running-Deer asks who and what Jim is he says he can't say but Soni and Kuruk are in danger. Kuruk is refusing the wheelchair so Jim is pushing him.
We have a clear picture of the characters and their parts in the story. The narration show the anger Littleton has toward Jim as they exit the hospital.
The hook what department in the government does Jim work in?
It was good to see Littleton have to leave without someone under arrest.
Keep on writing.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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The focus Jim getting rid of Littleton. The storyline development Kuruk is refusing medical care, but has agreed to blood test. The doctor suspects a tick bite, Kuruk may have gotten two weeks ago while gathering herbs. Jim is worried about Soni and Kuruk. When Running-Deer asks who and what Jim is he says he can't say but Soni and Kuruk are in danger. Kuruk is refusing the wheelchair so Jim is pushing him.
We have a clear picture of the characters and their parts in the story. The narration show the anger Littleton has toward Jim as they exit the hospital.
The hook what department in the government does Jim work in?
It was good to see Littleton have to leave without someone under arrest.
Keep on writing.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2015
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I am so sorry you had to read this after all the money had dropped. Thank you.
Comment from rydere
I like this chapter about Little ton's cell phone rings Dr. Roberts and the conversion between them. So keep up with the great work!.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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I like this chapter about Little ton's cell phone rings Dr. Roberts and the conversion between them. So keep up with the great work!.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from winespiller
You certainly have the right knack for writing stories. It was very easy to follow and kept my interest throughout. Also takes place in one of my favorite places in the world.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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You certainly have the right knack for writing stories. It was very easy to follow and kept my interest throughout. Also takes place in one of my favorite places in the world.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Thank you for leaving this kind review.
Comment from Lesley Collier
A continuing story of Soni's recovery from an ambush on a mountain and Kuruk, her grandfather, fainting in the hospital making the doctor concerned about his heart and wanting to perform all sorts of tests on him. Kuruk agrees to a blood test only as he has a rash and has flu like symptoms with Soni's boyfriend Jim's backup and as they head off the security agent, Middleton, who wants to place both of the under arrest tries to stop them. Jim makes a quick call which prevents Middleton's interference and leaves Son I and the others wondering who he really is to have such powerful connections. Son I wants Jim to leave when he won't explain himself but he refuses saying Soni and Kuruk are in danger and proceeds to bring Kuruk for his bloodtest. Well written and very intriguing!
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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A continuing story of Soni's recovery from an ambush on a mountain and Kuruk, her grandfather, fainting in the hospital making the doctor concerned about his heart and wanting to perform all sorts of tests on him. Kuruk agrees to a blood test only as he has a rash and has flu like symptoms with Soni's boyfriend Jim's backup and as they head off the security agent, Middleton, who wants to place both of the under arrest tries to stop them. Jim makes a quick call which prevents Middleton's interference and leaves Son I and the others wondering who he really is to have such powerful connections. Son I wants Jim to leave when he won't explain himself but he refuses saying Soni and Kuruk are in danger and proceeds to bring Kuruk for his bloodtest. Well written and very intriguing!
Comment Written 06-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from bhogg
Barbara - you are so gifted. You make your writing look easy. Pace is always excellent and I'm always jealous as how you choose to drive your story. Sometime mostly dialog (like this one), and sometimes beautiful narrative. Hope you have a great time on your vacation. Hugs ..... Bill
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Barbara - you are so gifted. You make your writing look easy. Pace is always excellent and I'm always jealous as how you choose to drive your story. Sometime mostly dialog (like this one), and sometimes beautiful narrative. Hope you have a great time on your vacation. Hugs ..... Bill
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Sefiros
Oh I love this. The asshole Homeland agent, strutting around believing he's god in his own little world, gets deflated by one phone call by some insignificant (seemingly) person. Oh, this is going to be good.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Oh I love this. The asshole Homeland agent, strutting around believing he's god in his own little world, gets deflated by one phone call by some insignificant (seemingly) person. Oh, this is going to be good.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
The plot, as they say, thickens, Barbara - LOL - I just loved this chapter! It's so realistic: Jim being upset and finally reporting his suspicions, Soni being fed up that he won't answer questions, Kuruk not wanting all those medical tests. I didn't see anything that I think should change - it's great just as it is.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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The plot, as they say, thickens, Barbara - LOL - I just loved this chapter! It's so realistic: Jim being upset and finally reporting his suspicions, Soni being fed up that he won't answer questions, Kuruk not wanting all those medical tests. I didn't see anything that I think should change - it's great just as it is.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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My pleasure!
Comment from rtobaygo
Good afternoon
Like the different conflicts taking place, from confrontation between Littleton and Jim, Chief Four-Bear and the White man's medicine and again Jim versus the number of tests they want to have the Chief take.
Good, tight writing, excellent flow, pace and dialogue.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Good afternoon
Like the different conflicts taking place, from confrontation between Littleton and Jim, Chief Four-Bear and the White man's medicine and again Jim versus the number of tests they want to have the Chief take.
Good, tight writing, excellent flow, pace and dialogue.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Thank you for leaving this encouraging review.
Comment from Writingfundimension
'He's not even looking at Sanchez. I think he's on the cartel's payroll.'
Wow, I hadn't thought of that angle, Barbara. And I want to know who Jim really is as much as all the characters in this chapter LoL.
Have a really nice trip.
:) Bev
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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'He's not even looking at Sanchez. I think he's on the cartel's payroll.'
Wow, I hadn't thought of that angle, Barbara. And I want to know who Jim really is as much as all the characters in this chapter LoL.
Have a really nice trip.
:) Bev
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Thank you for this kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara! :) Bev
Comment from Serendipity!
A story tightly written. What I mean by that is that it doesn't ramble on mindlessly but is terse and to the point. I appreciate the contrast between modern hospitals and medicine and what the Chief is obviously more familiar with.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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A story tightly written. What I mean by that is that it doesn't ramble on mindlessly but is terse and to the point. I appreciate the contrast between modern hospitals and medicine and what the Chief is obviously more familiar with.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Thank you for the kind review.
