Oh to capture.
Moonlight's beams109 total reviews
Comment from vapros
This is an entertaining and rhythmic conjecture on the possible powers you dream of and how you would use them. Your devotion is obvious here, and I envy you your great faith.
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This is an entertaining and rhythmic conjecture on the possible powers you dream of and how you would use them. Your devotion is obvious here, and I envy you your great faith.
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Comment Written 02-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you V, for your great encouragement, lovely words and generosity, my gratitude, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Chunger
I love everything about this poem! The rhythm and pacing is evident from the first stanza. It is easy to read, but very deep in images. I can completely picture doing all the things the speaker wants to do in this poem. Amazing job, with some tweaking, these images would make for a wonderful children's book.
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I love everything about this poem! The rhythm and pacing is evident from the first stanza. It is easy to read, but very deep in images. I can completely picture doing all the things the speaker wants to do in this poem. Amazing job, with some tweaking, these images would make for a wonderful children's book.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you, for your great encouragement, lovely words and generous stars, my gratitude, blessings, Roy.
Comment from ravenblack
There are those moments when it does feel like we do capture those moon beams. But if we did, would they remain beautiful? Probably not. Gems come in the digging, the reaching, the beams beautiful because we do not have a perfect reach. But creation does. Excellent poem!
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There are those moments when it does feel like we do capture those moon beams. But if we did, would they remain beautiful? Probably not. Gems come in the digging, the reaching, the beams beautiful because we do not have a perfect reach. But creation does. Excellent poem!
Comment Written 02-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you, for your great encouragement, lovely words and generosity, my gratitude, blessings, Roy.
Comment from artemis53
Absolutely magical as it flows down to the final step of divinity and our paltry comparison. How very beautiful in words and sentiment.
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Absolutely magical as it flows down to the final step of divinity and our paltry comparison. How very beautiful in words and sentiment.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you, for your great encouragement, lovely words and generosity, my gratitude, blessings, Roy.
Comment from kittykatnoel
Beautifully rendered poem. This is my favorite one that you have written and that I have read for a long time. I love the rhyme and rhythm. I will be bookcasing this one. Thank you for sharing.
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Beautifully rendered poem. This is my favorite one that you have written and that I have read for a long time. I love the rhyme and rhythm. I will be bookcasing this one. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you So much for this most encouraging review, outstanding comments and exceptional rating, blessings, Roy.
Comment from AvL
royowen's meter and scansion are flawless; this poet knows how to control the format of his material. The theme of his poem is wishful thinking that ultimately is shown to be idle -- idol? -- speculation; for only God is capable of this catalog of miracles. My problem is with phrases like " ... moonlight beams/paved with gold that catch love's dreams." How can lunar beams be paved? Mixed metaphors should be used sparingly, and judiciously. Or: "if I could sew those worthwhile dreams/on golden looms ..." Again, we see badly mixed images/metaphors: Cloth is woven on looms; it is not sewn. I speak as an ex-textile-worker on this point.
In any case: royowen's poetry flows off the tongue, and many of his images are lovely and delightful to the imagination. Four stars.
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royowen's meter and scansion are flawless; this poet knows how to control the format of his material. The theme of his poem is wishful thinking that ultimately is shown to be idle -- idol? -- speculation; for only God is capable of this catalog of miracles. My problem is with phrases like " ... moonlight beams/paved with gold that catch love's dreams." How can lunar beams be paved? Mixed metaphors should be used sparingly, and judiciously. Or: "if I could sew those worthwhile dreams/on golden looms ..." Again, we see badly mixed images/metaphors: Cloth is woven on looms; it is not sewn. I speak as an ex-textile-worker on this point.
In any case: royowen's poetry flows off the tongue, and many of his images are lovely and delightful to the imagination. Four stars.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2015
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Always critical, blessings, Roy.
Comment from alexisleech
Another perfectly written poem full of love for your creator, Roy.
If I, a scribe, wrote words like gems
I'd capture light with silver stems.
Yes, I think you just did!
Alexis xxx
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Another perfectly written poem full of love for your creator, Roy.
If I, a scribe, wrote words like gems
I'd capture light with silver stems.
Yes, I think you just did!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 02-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you Alexis, for your great encouragement, lovely words and generosity, my gratitude, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Rubylou
What a beautiful picture you create with the feel and imagery of your words. I am inspired when I read your work yet this one touched me in a special way. Hope in things that seem impossible- not always easy.
"...worthwhile dreams," really took grip of my heart. Sometimes we just need to differentiate what is, "worthwhile."
Rubylou
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What a beautiful picture you create with the feel and imagery of your words. I am inspired when I read your work yet this one touched me in a special way. Hope in things that seem impossible- not always easy.
"...worthwhile dreams," really took grip of my heart. Sometimes we just need to differentiate what is, "worthwhile."
Rubylou
Comment Written 02-Aug-2015
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Thank you RubyLou, for your great encouragement, lovely words and exceptional stars, my gratitude, blessings, Roy.n
Comment from DALLAS01
What beautiful images are contained in this highly polished verse. I tried to choose a favorite stanza, but each deserved special recognition. The first one simpy makes the reader hungry for more.
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What beautiful images are contained in this highly polished verse. I tried to choose a favorite stanza, but each deserved special recognition. The first one simpy makes the reader hungry for more.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thanks so much for your most encouraging review, delightful comments and exceptional rating, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Spiritual Echo
That's very lovely. You have added so many visuals to your words that it is almost like watching a picture show. The soft tone seems full of wonder and your art choice encapsulates the dreamy quality of your words.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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That's very lovely. You have added so many visuals to your words that it is almost like watching a picture show. The soft tone seems full of wonder and your art choice encapsulates the dreamy quality of your words.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2015
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Thank you, for your great encouragement, lovely words and generosity, my gratitude, blessings, Roy.
