Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "One Night Stand"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
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Comment from BeasPeas
I enjoyed reading this straightforward poem. Interesting content, good occasional rhyming and good flow. True lines that point out the danger of cheating:
"The grass ain't always greener
On the wrong side of the hill"
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2015
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I enjoyed reading this straightforward poem. Interesting content, good occasional rhyming and good flow. True lines that point out the danger of cheating:
"The grass ain't always greener
On the wrong side of the hill"
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2015
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Comment from Dean Kuch
Well rhymed, good cadence, rhythm and flow. This scathing, bitter verse has every right to be bitter. It never feels good when you invest your time, your trust, and all of your hopes and dreams, into someone, only to have them sleep around on you.
My father once told me, Once a cheater, always a cheat. I feel it's best not to risk giving them a second chance to put that theory to the test.
Good poem, Brett. I enjoyed it.~Dean
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2015
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Well rhymed, good cadence, rhythm and flow. This scathing, bitter verse has every right to be bitter. It never feels good when you invest your time, your trust, and all of your hopes and dreams, into someone, only to have them sleep around on you.
My father once told me, Once a cheater, always a cheat. I feel it's best not to risk giving them a second chance to put that theory to the test.
Good poem, Brett. I enjoyed it.~Dean
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2015
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Coming from you, of all the reviews I have received on this, yours means the most to me. I wrote this several years ago, intending it to be Country lyrics, and have sat on it since debating whether it was even worth posting any where. Your review validates it for me. Really do appreciate that.
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You're welcome, Brett. It's really good stuff.
~Dean
Comment from MizKat
Hi Brett,
This is another nice poem that you've written. The picture does go well with your little poem and vise versa. I just finished another poem and want to post it but I'm also hungry so I don't know if I'll eat first.
Kat
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2015
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Hi Brett,
This is another nice poem that you've written. The picture does go well with your little poem and vise versa. I just finished another poem and want to post it but I'm also hungry so I don't know if I'll eat first.
Kat
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2015
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You're very welcome, Brett.
Comment from meggie13
A woman cheating on her husband loses self respect and makes her husband look like a loser. She will be sorry of her actions but then he doesn't want her back. Once a cheater always a cheater , she can't be trusted. Well written with a great theme , one that many will relate to. The picture matches your poem.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2015
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A woman cheating on her husband loses self respect and makes her husband look like a loser. She will be sorry of her actions but then he doesn't want her back. Once a cheater always a cheater , she can't be trusted. Well written with a great theme , one that many will relate to. The picture matches your poem.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2015
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You are very welcome , BMW . meggie :)
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You are very welcome , BMW . meggie :)
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You are very welcome , BMW . meggie :)
Comment from Nosha17
I guess, cheating people will always exist and be unfaithful for whatever reason. I guess in the end they will see that they gave up security and a good life for what? Good use of rhyming and interesting theme. Faye
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I guess, cheating people will always exist and be unfaithful for whatever reason. I guess in the end they will see that they gave up security and a good life for what? Good use of rhyming and interesting theme. Faye
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
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Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
Thank you for identifying this as free style in the notes as it saved me calling out the meter missteps. It is a lyrical piece which I think is your intent and tells a tale many will probably relate to. Nicely done and I thank you for sharing it.
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Thank you for identifying this as free style in the notes as it saved me calling out the meter missteps. It is a lyrical piece which I think is your intent and tells a tale many will probably relate to. Nicely done and I thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
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Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
OMG true and perfect to read.
Excellent free verse and the story is great from start to end.
Excellent contest entry and the picture you chose id perfect.
Nicely done
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OMG true and perfect to read.
Excellent free verse and the story is great from start to end.
Excellent contest entry and the picture you chose id perfect.
Nicely done
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job expressing the torment and loss one feels when they have been in this position.
Good job with the rhyme and flow. Yes, the picture is perfect.
I see no changes. Thanks for sharing. I know there are many "out there" who need to read this.
Good job.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2015
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You did a great job expressing the torment and loss one feels when they have been in this position.
Good job with the rhyme and flow. Yes, the picture is perfect.
I see no changes. Thanks for sharing. I know there are many "out there" who need to read this.
Good job.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
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Comment from Pantygynt
Theres many of us I am sure can relate to this tale in one role or another. You call this free style but I am not sure I can go along with that. My understanding of free style is that ithas no regular rhythm or rhyme though rhyme may crop up now and then here and there.
This has a pretty regular rhythm throughout with exception of S5 which has an exceptionally long last line and no rhyme whatsoever. The predominant rhyme scheme is abcb that runs through every stanza except S2 which is abab and S5 already mentioned.
I don't consider it acceptable to call a poem free style just because you are too lazy to work out a way of getting one stanza to follow the rhyme scheme and rhythm patterns that you have adopted for the rest of the poem. I wouldn't worry about S2 but S5 needs to conform and then you can wipe out that note that doesn't let you off the hook.
If you do decide to rewrite and conform with S 5 I weill be happy to reassess and upgrade.
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reply by the author on 30-Jul-2015
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Theres many of us I am sure can relate to this tale in one role or another. You call this free style but I am not sure I can go along with that. My understanding of free style is that ithas no regular rhythm or rhyme though rhyme may crop up now and then here and there.
This has a pretty regular rhythm throughout with exception of S5 which has an exceptionally long last line and no rhyme whatsoever. The predominant rhyme scheme is abcb that runs through every stanza except S2 which is abab and S5 already mentioned.
I don't consider it acceptable to call a poem free style just because you are too lazy to work out a way of getting one stanza to follow the rhyme scheme and rhythm patterns that you have adopted for the rest of the poem. I wouldn't worry about S2 but S5 needs to conform and then you can wipe out that note that doesn't let you off the hook.
If you do decide to rewrite and conform with S 5 I weill be happy to reassess and upgrade.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2015
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Free style poetry has no set structure, no mandatory rhyme pattern, and no specific guidelines. It is called Free Style because it is exactly that -- as the writer wants to create it. So before you call me "lazy" you may want to have a very clear idea of what you are talking about. Your comment is completely off base and unacceptable. I could care a less if you give me 1-Star, or never review anything else I ever write,. And, would prefer that you don't ever review anything else I write.
Comment from boxergirl
Once a cheater always a cheater.. no trust left and without trust you have nothing. Good job with your lyrical poem about cheating.
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Once a cheater always a cheater.. no trust left and without trust you have nothing. Good job with your lyrical poem about cheating.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2015
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