Comment from poetadeu

Excellent

PERFECT!

Since I am not a scientist , physicist or astrologer I
can not say for sure, but I have heard that every
sound made here on earth remains somewhere
forever. I wonder. That is a lots of noise. I suppose
the universe is big enough to hold it all. Just a
thought. You made me think so this has power.

First line-six syllables.
[enery-energy]

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 Comment Written 28-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015

You are so right! I've been messing with it so much I lost track of my syllable count. Thank you for your honest review, and I just changed "matter" to "mass" So the count is right now.

reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015

I also fixed my my spelling. LOL

reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015

You didn't have to change your review, but I do appreciate it.

reply by poetadeu on 28-Jul-2015

Oh, a promise is a promise...
That was just so stand out
for a contest entry. I can not
count the times I have been saved
the embarrassment of a careless
error. It happens as Forrest Gump
would say.::}Joyce

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Great haiku. Good imagery. Good interconnected lines. I'm not sure about the satori - a bit cliche perhaps? Good luck in the contest.

Teresa

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 Comment Written 28-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015

I think your right about the satori. Thanks for the review and your honesty.