Seeking for Truth
A Fusion Sonnet17 total reviews
Comment from prettybluebirds
Very interesting poem. Your style is very different and may be hard for some ( me ) to totally understand. I did understand the meaning of the poem just not the technique you used. It is an excellent piece of work and I enjoyed reading it. Very good.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Very interesting poem. Your style is very different and may be hard for some ( me ) to totally understand. I did understand the meaning of the poem just not the technique you used. It is an excellent piece of work and I enjoyed reading it. Very good.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thanks, prettybluebirds. It is a complicated verse form - and this was my first attempt at it. Maybe later efforts will become clearer! Tony
Comment from Mary H-W
I read your description on the writing structure before i read the poem. At first it sounded complex and all over the place. But your piece pulled it all together for me. I feel the poem has deep meaning and attitude (in a good way).
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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I read your description on the writing structure before i read the poem. At first it sounded complex and all over the place. But your piece pulled it all together for me. I feel the poem has deep meaning and attitude (in a good way).
Comment Written 28-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thanks very much, Mary. I must say this sounded much more complicated than it actually turned out to be! Quite daunting when I first read the requirements of the form. Tony
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, tfawcus, great imagery presented about the lives that are lived and lost on the sea. as I was reading the notes about how the sonnet is written, my brain melted and won't let me understand a word of it, lol.
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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this is an excellent write, tfawcus, great imagery presented about the lives that are lived and lost on the sea. as I was reading the notes about how the sonnet is written, my brain melted and won't let me understand a word of it, lol.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thanks, sweetwoodjax. The instructions were pretty complicated!
Comment from krys123
Tony;
-thank you for your author's notes and after reading them I had to read your palm again. I usually do this to get the feel of the palm and then find out what the structure is. Very interesting structure it is after reading your author's notes again I found out that you followed the structure quite immediately.
-Each of your lining words were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the reading and rhythm flow smoothly this is also due to the fact that your writing was neither forced nor labored.
-Your analytical, hypothetical and annotated, emblematic structure of your concept
was very exquisitely, vividly expressive.
-Seeking for truth is men have dealt with in the past to help them for future understanding is only about a moment in man's history. In the lies that followed were very metaphorical statements that were enriched with visions and imagery.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Tony.
Alex
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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Tony;
-thank you for your author's notes and after reading them I had to read your palm again. I usually do this to get the feel of the palm and then find out what the structure is. Very interesting structure it is after reading your author's notes again I found out that you followed the structure quite immediately.
-Each of your lining words were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the reading and rhythm flow smoothly this is also due to the fact that your writing was neither forced nor labored.
-Your analytical, hypothetical and annotated, emblematic structure of your concept
was very exquisitely, vividly expressive.
-Seeking for truth is men have dealt with in the past to help them for future understanding is only about a moment in man's history. In the lies that followed were very metaphorical statements that were enriched with visions and imagery.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Tony.
Alex
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Comment Written 28-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thanks, Alex. The instructions for this one were pretty daunting, but it turned out easier than I had expected. Tony
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You are so sincerely welcome Tony and have a nice day
Comment from TAB_that's me
You do these different sonnets forms so well Tony. I especially like the 10 lines. You have great concrete imagery (gnawing their bones) (false priests poise their knives) and more.
good enjambment with rhyme.
Teresa
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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You do these different sonnets forms so well Tony. I especially like the 10 lines. You have great concrete imagery (gnawing their bones) (false priests poise their knives) and more.
good enjambment with rhyme.
Teresa
Comment Written 28-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thanks, Teresa. I've been introduced to several other sonnet forms recently, so may give them a go sometime. There s quite a field of choice! Tony
Comment from Glasstruth
Very rhythmic, flows smoothly, and your rhymes are as natural the breezes that fill the sails. My favorite is the first verse. I played around with your poem, but couldn't find the right way to end it. I thought that these two lines would be great for an ending, but not sure how to do it.
""How long must this last?
How long?" good men ask."
Wonderfully written. Les
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reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Very rhythmic, flows smoothly, and your rhymes are as natural the breezes that fill the sails. My favorite is the first verse. I played around with your poem, but couldn't find the right way to end it. I thought that these two lines would be great for an ending, but not sure how to do it.
""How long must this last?
How long?" good men ask."
Wonderfully written. Les
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Comment Written 28-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Thanks, Les. The form required the rhetorical question to be placed at the end of the first section. I agree - it would also make an effective ending.
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Morning, Tony,
This is most impressive, and you have taught me something new today with this poetic form. I've not heard of it before. It's a most interesting form and one I'm going to study.
From what I can tell, you have fully complied with the rules of this form as outlined in the author notes. I am particularly impressed with how you used A1 in the repeat, in the coda. Also, this final part of the poem is simply sublime, wonderfully philosophical and inspiring.
Well done, my friend.
Ray
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Good Morning, Tony,
This is most impressive, and you have taught me something new today with this poetic form. I've not heard of it before. It's a most interesting form and one I'm going to study.
From what I can tell, you have fully complied with the rules of this form as outlined in the author notes. I am particularly impressed with how you used A1 in the repeat, in the coda. Also, this final part of the poem is simply sublime, wonderfully philosophical and inspiring.
Well done, my friend.
Ray
Comment Written 28-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2015
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Good to hear from you again, Ray. Thanks very much for your positive review and six stars. I have just downloaded the Kindle version of Sonnet Mondal's book: "Twenty One Lines Fusion Sonnets of Twenty First Century" http://www.sonnetmondal.com/books--reviews.html. There are quite a number of examples of the form there, if you are interested in exploring it further. Best wishes, Tony
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You're welcome, Tony. And thanks for the link.
Ray
