Hot Dogs, French Fries, Lemonade!
An ode to a hot dog stand.130 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Such memories rekindled in your mind when you think of your favourite hot dog stand and food your Mother baked, I felt the passion within your words, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Such memories rekindled in your mind when you think of your favourite hot dog stand and food your Mother baked, I felt the passion within your words, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Oh, thank you, Dolly, for your review and for feeling the passion in my words.
Comment from Jay Squires
I love this poem on so many levels, Andre. The consummate poet that you are, as you sat on your red stools, three of the four of you "dined" on two levels: hotdogs and memories.
I almost pucker at the lemon tree which "fed" you siblings meringue pies and chiffon cakes ... but more importantly they were baked by your mother.
Your development of the range of colors here was marvelous, beginning with your mother's "Yeller Gal," to the color of the hot dogs you presently ate ... the same color Red as the tour buses that passed, tying you to the present moment.
And like all in life, Ice Cubes melt. Ah, but not before this poem snapshots the moment.
The greatest humor of all was your choice of genre for this poem.
Love it, Andre!
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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I love this poem on so many levels, Andre. The consummate poet that you are, as you sat on your red stools, three of the four of you "dined" on two levels: hotdogs and memories.
I almost pucker at the lemon tree which "fed" you siblings meringue pies and chiffon cakes ... but more importantly they were baked by your mother.
Your development of the range of colors here was marvelous, beginning with your mother's "Yeller Gal," to the color of the hot dogs you presently ate ... the same color Red as the tour buses that passed, tying you to the present moment.
And like all in life, Ice Cubes melt. Ah, but not before this poem snapshots the moment.
The greatest humor of all was your choice of genre for this poem.
Love it, Andre!
Comment Written 07-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Oh, thank you, Jay, for your generous, six star review of my delicious, colorful poem. You got it right--we dined on food and memories. The revive of my poem made me hungry to see it in print. I submitted it to a journal last weekend. Thank you for your glowing, detailed review and support.
Comment from Drew Delaney
Awesome poem, Sis Cat!
California I hear is pretty cool and eating at such a place must have been a real treat. Wish your mom could have been there too.
But you made lemonade out of life's lemons. Congratulations on the win.
Drew
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Awesome poem, Sis Cat!
California I hear is pretty cool and eating at such a place must have been a real treat. Wish your mom could have been there too.
But you made lemonade out of life's lemons. Congratulations on the win.
Drew
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Yes, Drew, I wish my Mom could have been there, but I made lemonade out of life's lemons. Thanks for the review and congratulations.
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
We ate our fries
one at a time
to pro-looong the moment
and we nibbled our red hot dogs
as red tour buses passed.
You go kooky with this and I LOVE that about it. I love the feeling that you bring the reader right to that spot, those hot dogs and lemonade sure sound good. A wonderful piece. Kindest regards my friend Meia x
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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We ate our fries
one at a time
to pro-looong the moment
and we nibbled our red hot dogs
as red tour buses passed.
You go kooky with this and I LOVE that about it. I love the feeling that you bring the reader right to that spot, those hot dogs and lemonade sure sound good. A wonderful piece. Kindest regards my friend Meia x
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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No, Meia, it was more than luck. It was being aware of my surroundings at the moment. I began composing my poem in my head while I ate at Skooby's. Thank you for your review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
Congratulations on your first winning poem. Isn't it a great feeling? A wonderful poem about memories which are both happy and sad. Keep on writing, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Congratulations on your first winning poem. Isn't it a great feeling? A wonderful poem about memories which are both happy and sad. Keep on writing, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Yes, Debbie, like lemonade, my poem is bitter and sweet. Thank you for your review and congratulations.
Comment from susan18
Wonderfully written poem!!
Reminded me of my teen-age years at Nathan's in New York!
Great choice of words--I could feel the tartness of the ice-cold lemonade and the saltiness of the hot dogs.
Great imagery, too. Really well done verse.
Thanks for bringing back such sweet memories.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Wonderfully written poem!!
Reminded me of my teen-age years at Nathan's in New York!
Great choice of words--I could feel the tartness of the ice-cold lemonade and the saltiness of the hot dogs.
Great imagery, too. Really well done verse.
Thanks for bringing back such sweet memories.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Oh, thank you, Susan, for your delicious review. I am glad my poem brought back sweet memories!
Comment from His Grayness
First, my sincere apologies for being out of six stars this work so very well deserves! The artwork is excellent, the script is wonderful and perfectly done, and the passion of the memories is well communicated to the reader, by this excellent work, so well done in all ways! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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First, my sincere apologies for being out of six stars this work so very well deserves! The artwork is excellent, the script is wonderful and perfectly done, and the passion of the memories is well communicated to the reader, by this excellent work, so well done in all ways! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Oh, thank you, Vance, for your delicious, virtual six star review. I am glad the passion of my memories communicated to you.
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Oh! dear sis...your passion is my delight! always!! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance
Comment from doggymad
This was a lovely trip down memory lane. So much that we did as teenagers can be evoked by just a smell or a picture.
Sadly they bring both the happy and the sad. Congratulations on your well deserved win
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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This was a lovely trip down memory lane. So much that we did as teenagers can be evoked by just a smell or a picture.
Sadly they bring both the happy and the sad. Congratulations on your well deserved win
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Yes, Freda, like lemonade, this poem is bitter and sweet. Thank you for your review and congratulations.
Comment from Northernfells
I really enjoyed this poem. Wonderful use of words and form on the page "one at a time" in a poem that flowed and created a snapshot for me too.
Very well done
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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I really enjoyed this poem. Wonderful use of words and form on the page "one at a time" in a poem that flowed and created a snapshot for me too.
Very well done
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Thank you, Northernfells, for your generous of my poem that provided you with a snapshot. Thanks.
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Andre.
Congrats on the big win, mate. What a fantastic and very clever presentation and a thoroughly deserving winner.
You've gone and made me all hungry now.
Think I'll head out and grab an "Init-iro (Hot-dog).
Great job.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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G'day Andre.
Congrats on the big win, mate. What a fantastic and very clever presentation and a thoroughly deserving winner.
You've gone and made me all hungry now.
Think I'll head out and grab an "Init-iro (Hot-dog).
Great job.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 06-Aug-2017
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2017
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Yes, Fez, this poem made me hungry to see my poem in print. I submitted it to a journal last weekend. Thank you for the generous, six star review and encouragement. Now, enjoy your Init-iro!
