A New Beginning
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "The Next Morning"The girls leave their chat line days behind.
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Comment from Ulla
Alexis, What an enjoyable chapter. Good for Igor that he is OK thanks to Samantha. The whole issue with her is priceless. You write it so well and this chapter was a joy to read. I can't wait to learn what Samantha is up to next. Ullaxxx
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Alexis, What an enjoyable chapter. Good for Igor that he is OK thanks to Samantha. The whole issue with her is priceless. You write it so well and this chapter was a joy to read. I can't wait to learn what Samantha is up to next. Ullaxxx
Comment Written 24-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it, Ulla, and my apologies again for taking so long to reply. I'm now working on the next chapter, so should hopefully post it soon! Alexis xxx
Comment from cercie
This is a great read Alexis I love your book. I watch for your posts so I don't miss any of the chapters. I think we should each have an Igor lol on second thought we should each have our own ghost to help protect us. None of the haunting mean kind though
I am looking forward to the next chapter
Hugs
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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This is a great read Alexis I love your book. I watch for your posts so I don't miss any of the chapters. I think we should each have an Igor lol on second thought we should each have our own ghost to help protect us. None of the haunting mean kind though
I am looking forward to the next chapter
Hugs
Comment Written 23-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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My thanks again, Chris. I agree, but I think some of us do have 'someone looking over us, although I prefer to think of them as our 'angels. I've had to try my hand at scriptwriting in the last week, so poor Igor and Samantha have been neglected. Now back on the case! Alexis xxx
Comment from rwilliam
Wonderful chapter!! LOVED IT!!
When Jenny walked through the Bedford front doors, she found Laura looking wretched as she held her head in her hands at the reception desk.-Take this from telling to showing.Example: Jenny walked through the Bedford front doors. Laura leaned against the reception desk with her head in her hands. Her heart leaped into her throat. Her usually cherry friend looked like she'd been to hell and back. Her hair was plastered to her head as if she'd just got out of the shower. Not a stitch of make-up wearing leggings and a baggy sweater, certainly didn't look like the owner and receptionist of a bijoux hotel.
...a brown underwear job. .LOL Priceless!!! :-D
This was such a fun chapter! I LOVE the way you leave the chapters at the end! You're a PRO at that!!
P.S. My examples are just that. You still need to write in your voice. I just wanted to help you with the part that was telling rather than showing. :-D
Keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Wonderful chapter!! LOVED IT!!
When Jenny walked through the Bedford front doors, she found Laura looking wretched as she held her head in her hands at the reception desk.-Take this from telling to showing.Example: Jenny walked through the Bedford front doors. Laura leaned against the reception desk with her head in her hands. Her heart leaped into her throat. Her usually cherry friend looked like she'd been to hell and back. Her hair was plastered to her head as if she'd just got out of the shower. Not a stitch of make-up wearing leggings and a baggy sweater, certainly didn't look like the owner and receptionist of a bijoux hotel.
...a brown underwear job. .LOL Priceless!!! :-D
This was such a fun chapter! I LOVE the way you leave the chapters at the end! You're a PRO at that!!
P.S. My examples are just that. You still need to write in your voice. I just wanted to help you with the part that was telling rather than showing. :-D
Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2015
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Thank you for your wonderful input again. I'll certainly look at that paragraph and try to tie in your suggestions. I've had a seriously busy week trying to get my head around scriptwriting, which is so different from prose (you're not allowed to 'show' anything!) I'm way behind with the book, my reviews and reviewing. I'll hopefully catch up soon! Alexis xxx
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scriptwriting?! Awesome! Congratulations and good luck! :-)
Comment from Curly Girly
I am so glad that Igor survived. He is too ill to cook breakfast. I hope he recovers soon. And I hope he never got any frostbite.
I am left wondering what Samantha is going to do next.
Another fun read, Alexis.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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I am so glad that Igor survived. He is too ill to cook breakfast. I hope he recovers soon. And I hope he never got any frostbite.
I am left wondering what Samantha is going to do next.
Another fun read, Alexis.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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That makes two of us, Nicole. Samantha seems to have taken on a 'life' of her own, and I can hardly keep up with her! I'm having to try my hand at scriptwriting at the moment, so I'll hopefully get the next chapter posted in a day or so. It's sooooo hard! Alexis xxx
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Phew! Sam just saved a life. I hope she is rewarded with finally going on to heaven. WOnder why she's still on Earth?
She obviously needs something... but what?
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Phew! Sam just saved a life. I hope she is rewarded with finally going on to heaven. WOnder why she's still on Earth?
She obviously needs something... but what?
Comment Written 22-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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All will be revealed - eventually! Alexis xxx
Comment from Walu Feral
LOL. G'day Alexis. I reckon they should call in that gay medium or erhaps one that is anemic and only squeaks and talks in sign language Hahahaha! I love the way you finish your chapters with such a bang, excellent chapter again my friend. Well done, cheers Fez
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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LOL. G'day Alexis. I reckon they should call in that gay medium or erhaps one that is anemic and only squeaks and talks in sign language Hahahaha! I love the way you finish your chapters with such a bang, excellent chapter again my friend. Well done, cheers Fez
Comment Written 22-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2015
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Hi, Fez, and apologies for taking so long to thank you for your review. As you'll see from today's post, I have been burning the midnight oil trying to master a new craft. Not easy, but I'm getting there! Alexis xxx
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hi there sweetie
OH I liked this one very much. Especially at the end when Samantha decided to stay down stairs and keep Jenny company. What do you say to a ghost any way? This is just getting better and better
Bear
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Hi there sweetie
OH I liked this one very much. Especially at the end when Samantha decided to stay down stairs and keep Jenny company. What do you say to a ghost any way? This is just getting better and better
Bear
Comment Written 22-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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I love that you're enjoying it, Bear. This is such fun to write! Alexis xxx
Comment from Annette Gulliver
I'm glad that Jenny believes Laura's account of the ghost, or is she just humouring her friend. Maybe Samantha will stick around and watch over Igor as she likes him so much. What better place to stay than Igor's room. I hope a psychic medium does not exorcise her - she might end up down in hell.
Just one typo:
I goggled (googled) the subject of poltergeists several times
Annette
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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I'm glad that Jenny believes Laura's account of the ghost, or is she just humouring her friend. Maybe Samantha will stick around and watch over Igor as she likes him so much. What better place to stay than Igor's room. I hope a psychic medium does not exorcise her - she might end up down in hell.
Just one typo:
I goggled (googled) the subject of poltergeists several times
Annette
Comment Written 21-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Jenny is the one that told Laura about the stories relating to ghostly happenings in Igor's room before she started working there, so hopefully, she will be a big help finding out about Samantha's history. I think Samantha should hang about for a while longer - too many possibilities to throw away!
Alexis xxx
Comment from Jay Squires
Imagine my surprise that Laura's recuperating after Igor's brush with death and I didn't even know he'd gotten out of the cooler. I missed a chapter. I'll try to catch it up, but I've been having so many computer problems, I'm way behind.
I'd Goggled the subject of poltergeists several times after you told me the story about the storeroom being haunted. [I'd GOOGLED the subject.]
I might just do that, Samantha thought as she watched Laura making for the stairs... [I've said it before ... the queen of the cliffhanger.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Imagine my surprise that Laura's recuperating after Igor's brush with death and I didn't even know he'd gotten out of the cooler. I missed a chapter. I'll try to catch it up, but I've been having so many computer problems, I'm way behind.
I'd Goggled the subject of poltergeists several times after you told me the story about the storeroom being haunted. [I'd GOOGLED the subject.]
I might just do that, Samantha thought as she watched Laura making for the stairs... [I've said it before ... the queen of the cliffhanger.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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I wish you had read it because it was one of the most popular chapters yet - sigh! I had Samantha going all out to get Laura's attention and had to resort to drastic measures for her to achieve it. Now up to my eyes turning my latest into a screenplay for a presentation, so not here as much as I'd like!
Thank you for catching 'Goggle' lol, what a numpty!
Alexis xxx
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I'm just wondering why it didn't show up on my queue. I'm definitely going to read it.
Comment from wordsfromsue
I had no idea you were capable of THIS.... Yes, I knew you could write, but this book is beyond professional quality writing.
I wondered where Samantha was while all of this talk about her was going on.
Imagine what she could do with the toasters, coffee pots and microwaves while breakfast is being prepared. :-)
This ghost part of the story opens up so many future storylines, we need to have some handsome boy ghost check in with a guest... Yeah, okay, I'll leave the writing to you!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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I had no idea you were capable of THIS.... Yes, I knew you could write, but this book is beyond professional quality writing.
I wondered where Samantha was while all of this talk about her was going on.
Imagine what she could do with the toasters, coffee pots and microwaves while breakfast is being prepared. :-)
This ghost part of the story opens up so many future storylines, we need to have some handsome boy ghost check in with a guest... Yeah, okay, I'll leave the writing to you!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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What a fantastic review! As you know, these two or three chapters took ages to write. Hopefully, the rest will be easier. I now have to decide how much freedom Samantha has. Any suggestions are always gratefully received! Alexis xxx
