When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "A Forgotten Memory?"A family's love is tested.
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Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Shari. Great work once again mate. This is very emotional stuff and the strength you need to find under the circumstances is very hard to find, I remember it well with Uncle Ronny and Mum. You have me hooked and I am waiting to read the next one but it is getting harder emotionally. I'm a softy. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
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G'day Shari. Great work once again mate. This is very emotional stuff and the strength you need to find under the circumstances is very hard to find, I remember it well with Uncle Ronny and Mum. You have me hooked and I am waiting to read the next one but it is getting harder emotionally. I'm a softy. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 22-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
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Thanks, Fez, for the compassion you brought to this reading.
I'm always pleased when a story makes readers feel the way you do.
Hugs,
Shari
hugs
Comment from Curly Girly
The daughter still needs the mother's solace, and the mother feels needed. It is sad when family members disagree at such awkward times. I wonder what the doctor is about to say? Perhaps it is bad news.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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The daughter still needs the mother's solace, and the mother feels needed. It is sad when family members disagree at such awkward times. I wonder what the doctor is about to say? Perhaps it is bad news.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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Thanks for reading and commenting, Curly.
Comment from Muffins
Without the noise of your sister and Aunt, life is peaceful and pleasant. The interacting between Frank and your Mom transcends any material object somebody promise to somebody else. The quietness of the chapter is a breather from the previous chapters that were filled with fire.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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Without the noise of your sister and Aunt, life is peaceful and pleasant. The interacting between Frank and your Mom transcends any material object somebody promise to somebody else. The quietness of the chapter is a breather from the previous chapters that were filled with fire.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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Nice to hear that, Muffins. Thanks so much.
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Shari,
This is such an emotional chapter which reveals just how much stress those conflicts affected you. The scene with you crying out your hurt is very touching.
If only everyone realized that anger is just sadness. I think there would be a lot less strife in the world.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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Hi Shari,
This is such an emotional chapter which reveals just how much stress those conflicts affected you. The scene with you crying out your hurt is very touching.
If only everyone realized that anger is just sadness. I think there would be a lot less strife in the world.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 20-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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Anger = sadness. You may have something there. I'm glad you found this a touching scene. I must be doing something write. (pun intended.)
Comment from barkingdog
It was very nice of the minister to come right away. I'm sure that was a comfort to your mother.
I felt that some of the fragile ties that had been almost broken were mended when Frank visited and you told your mother about the fight with Dee.
:) ellen
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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It was very nice of the minister to come right away. I'm sure that was a comfort to your mother.
I felt that some of the fragile ties that had been almost broken were mended when Frank visited and you told your mother about the fight with Dee.
:) ellen
Comment Written 20-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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Mom was so vulnerable due to the meds. I still can't believe Dee tried to turn Mom against him.
Comment from IndianaIrish
Some lovely treasured moments you shared with your mom, Shari. The Tennyson poem is wonderful and I enjoyed the video, too. Your chapter is strong and very emotional. I'm afraid what the doctor has to say isn't going to be good news.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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Some lovely treasured moments you shared with your mom, Shari. The Tennyson poem is wonderful and I enjoyed the video, too. Your chapter is strong and very emotional. I'm afraid what the doctor has to say isn't going to be good news.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 20-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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Thanks, Karyn, for feeling the tone of this. The news isn't bad but it isn't good either.
Comment from Jay Squires
I enjoyed this chapter, Shari. Enjoyed the reestablishment of affection between your mom and Frank, and your final release of personal grief with your mom over your aunt and sister.
I had learned from Frank that sometimes you have exaggerate to get results. [...you have TO exaggerate to get results.]
"I gave her Communion." [Just a random suggestion, but wouldn't this be better following his slipping the prayer book inside a silk purple pouch?]
An emotional chapter, Shari. Yet controlled, not sappy.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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I enjoyed this chapter, Shari. Enjoyed the reestablishment of affection between your mom and Frank, and your final release of personal grief with your mom over your aunt and sister.
I had learned from Frank that sometimes you have exaggerate to get results. [...you have TO exaggerate to get results.]
"I gave her Communion." [Just a random suggestion, but wouldn't this be better following his slipping the prayer book inside a silk purple pouch?]
An emotional chapter, Shari. Yet controlled, not sappy.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Whew! Someone commented on my missing a word but didn't say where to look! Your suggestion is good. I felt that didn't read well either. Thank goodness, it didn't come off sappy! :-)
Comment from Deniz22
Shari, this has beauty in it. I see a whole new dimension of your personality and I am reminded all people are far more complex than our brief encounters will ever allow us to become acquainted with or explore. So glad you and your mother had these moments. I also see more of Frank (in a good way) than I had before.
This chapter lifts the whole story above a mere tell-all, get-even, self justifying memoir. It shows the difficulties inherent in family ties, yet, in this chapter, one sees the hope of possibly achieving harmony. Great job!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Shari, this has beauty in it. I see a whole new dimension of your personality and I am reminded all people are far more complex than our brief encounters will ever allow us to become acquainted with or explore. So glad you and your mother had these moments. I also see more of Frank (in a good way) than I had before.
This chapter lifts the whole story above a mere tell-all, get-even, self justifying memoir. It shows the difficulties inherent in family ties, yet, in this chapter, one sees the hope of possibly achieving harmony. Great job!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Aha! I'm not a hedonist after all. Our writings do reveal the many facets to our personalities. I appreciate that my theme seems to be coming out. We're all on a spiritual journey and boy, the speed bumps can change your course if not careful. Thanks ever so much for the six, my dear friend.
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Comment from Eigle Rull
This was so good! It was an emotional post that was so well written and extremely interesting. Sounds like your mom is wiser than she lets on to be. My hat is off to her - she knows the score. I enjoyed listening to this beautiful song too it was so nice and comforting. This chapter held my attention well, my friend. I worry about what the doctor has to say. Reading your story makes me feel like I'm part of the story. Excellent dialog and descriptions too. Best wishes, my friend.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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This was so good! It was an emotional post that was so well written and extremely interesting. Sounds like your mom is wiser than she lets on to be. My hat is off to her - she knows the score. I enjoyed listening to this beautiful song too it was so nice and comforting. This chapter held my attention well, my friend. I worry about what the doctor has to say. Reading your story makes me feel like I'm part of the story. Excellent dialog and descriptions too. Best wishes, my friend.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Eigle, I love that you're getting so involved. The best compliment for any writer.
Comment from w.j.debi
Emergencies do have a way of bringing out the beet n people. Looks like it got your spiritual leader there to comfort your mother. You have a bit of heart warming and bonding going on. It is very touching.
That last sentence has me wondering though. Will the doctor be telling you that or something else's entirely?
Excellent interaction between your characters for maximum emotional impact. The drama is heartfelt.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Emergencies do have a way of bringing out the beet n people. Looks like it got your spiritual leader there to comfort your mother. You have a bit of heart warming and bonding going on. It is very touching.
That last sentence has me wondering though. Will the doctor be telling you that or something else's entirely?
Excellent interaction between your characters for maximum emotional impact. The drama is heartfelt.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Thank you, w.j. for the exceptional. You gave me the reaction I was looking for.
