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Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "For His Name's Sake"poems inspired by Psalm 23
26 total reviews
Comment from jmdg1954
is there a difference you can make
to soothe a grief, or calm a fear,
to lend a hand, or just be near?
All things to make us a better person... As God would want is to do and be.
I liked the choices and the word phrasing.
Nicely done, Debbie.
John
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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is there a difference you can make
to soothe a grief, or calm a fear,
to lend a hand, or just be near?
All things to make us a better person... As God would want is to do and be.
I liked the choices and the word phrasing.
Nicely done, Debbie.
John
Comment Written 21-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Hi John,
Thank you so much for the encouraging review. I appreciate your insights about these things making us better people. I am pleased you liked it.
Debi
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day mate. What a refreshing and very pleasing little piece this one you have penned is. I really enjoy the form, which you are so very clever to be able to work with. A very well done job. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
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G'day mate. What a refreshing and very pleasing little piece this one you have penned is. I really enjoy the form, which you are so very clever to be able to work with. A very well done job. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 21-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the gracious review and kind remarks about the writing. I appreciate it. Debi
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The author's words are creative, heart felt and thought provoking. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is perfects and compliments the theme of this poem.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Excellent Poem! The author's words are creative, heart felt and thought provoking. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is perfects and compliments the theme of this poem.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the kind words. I especially appreciate the comment "creative, heart felt and thought provoking." Debi
Comment from TAB_that's me
I think Rondelet poems are beautiful and even more so when it is a faith poem that is written. Nice repeating lines.
Teresa
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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I think Rondelet poems are beautiful and even more so when it is a faith poem that is written. Nice repeating lines.
Teresa
Comment Written 20-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Hi Teresa,
Thank you for your positive comments and encouragement. I am pleased you like the repeating lines.
Debi
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a pleasant form that, like many of the French forms could easily become either boring or trite with the repeating lines. There are many ways of coping with repetition and your solution, to turn it into a kind of prayer, is very effective because it is part of standard practice in that style. It therefore does not jar in any way and the whole flows together extremely well.
Thanks for the details in the authors' notes. There are so many forms, it is good to be reminded of them and helps the reader make sense of the whole.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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This is a pleasant form that, like many of the French forms could easily become either boring or trite with the repeating lines. There are many ways of coping with repetition and your solution, to turn it into a kind of prayer, is very effective because it is part of standard practice in that style. It therefore does not jar in any way and the whole flows together extremely well.
Thanks for the details in the authors' notes. There are so many forms, it is good to be reminded of them and helps the reader make sense of the whole.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the positive comments, especially that the repetition was effective and that it flowed well. I appreciate the encouragement.
If the truth be told, I am trying out so many forms that I put the details in the author notes so I can remember what I did a month from now. There are so many and they hard to keep track of. If it helps others, that is good too.
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That's a good idea and an excellent use of the notes.
Comment from meggie13
The second Golden Rule, says to love everyone as yourself. We should obey His word and help the less fortunate, whether their need is spiritual , mental or physical. He is. there for us when we call His name, do the same for others. Well written with a good message. Do it all in the name of Jesus. Good rhyme, flow and picture used.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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The second Golden Rule, says to love everyone as yourself. We should obey His word and help the less fortunate, whether their need is spiritual , mental or physical. He is. there for us when we call His name, do the same for others. Well written with a good message. Do it all in the name of Jesus. Good rhyme, flow and picture used.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the wonderful six stars! You made my day! Thank you also for sharing your insights about the message and your faith. Debi
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You are very welcome, Debi. I love anything that praises the Lord. Blessings! meggie
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You are very welcome, Debi. I love anything that praises the Lord. Blessings! meggie
Comment from Spitfire
I admire anyone who can work with such a controlled structure. This not only fits the form, but has something worthwhile to say. The repetitive phrase at the beginning of the question makes it twice as powerful.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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I admire anyone who can work with such a controlled structure. This not only fits the form, but has something worthwhile to say. The repetitive phrase at the beginning of the question makes it twice as powerful.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Thank you, Shari. I am playing with new forms for a while. Just a phase I am going through. Pretty soon I'll get up the courage to start posting some prose. I feel my prose is too wordy so these forms are making me be more concise.
Comment from EricBrady
Beautiful, profound words. Wonderful flow. His love provided salvation, healed the sick and raised the dead. His love should flow through us and shared as we help meet the needs of others.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Beautiful, profound words. Wonderful flow. His love provided salvation, healed the sick and raised the dead. His love should flow through us and shared as we help meet the needs of others.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Thank you the engaging review. You insights on the theme are most welcome. God bless.
Comment from mvbrooks
When I read the requirements for the poem format, I thought "how challenging" and expected the poem may sound stilted for the sake of meeting these requirements.
In this case, the poem has a positive flow, and a strong, effective message.
The repetition of the first line is very effective.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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When I read the requirements for the poem format, I thought "how challenging" and expected the poem may sound stilted for the sake of meeting these requirements.
In this case, the poem has a positive flow, and a strong, effective message.
The repetition of the first line is very effective.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the gracious comments and excellent rating. I appreciate you saying that it flowed well with a strong, effective message. I'm glad the repetition worked for you. It was a challenging format and the first rondelet I have attempted so your positive response is very welcome.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello w.j.debi, I enjoyed reading your rondelet-For His Name's Sake.
I like the meaning or the question you ask in this poem. If there was more kindness in the world it would be much better for all of us. Good job!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
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Hello w.j.debi, I enjoyed reading your rondelet-For His Name's Sake.
I like the meaning or the question you ask in this poem. If there was more kindness in the world it would be much better for all of us. Good job!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the thoughtful comments. I agree with you that the world would better with mor kindness. Thank you for the great review.
