Comment from gamay

Excellent

Hello Rhonda, I missed the chapter of the story but it's sounds interesting and suspense. I can't wait to the next chapter. Have a nice day. gamay

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2015

Thank you so much, gamay. I appreciate you're reading my story. Hope you are having a nice evening, morning or whatever time it is there,
Rhonda

Comment from Walu Feral

Exceptional

G'day mate. WOOHOO! This is another great chapter and also a very well written one. So we have had success at last, now to find the culprits, those dreaded serpants, I like catching serpants LOL. Great work again my friend, this is an enjoyable book, but remind me never to join a student council, that is dangerous stuff!

One suggestion...

"She took a deep breath and cried out Sarah's name so loud that the undead could have heard her." (I think you should change "undead" to "dead' because the undead can still hear but the dead can't, if that makes sense.)

Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015

Good point, that does make more sense! Thanks for keeping up with the story and helping me to revise ans edit, which is so essential to writers and never fun! Thanks, also, for the wonderful 6 stars!
Rhonda

Comment from cbat

Good

I thought i was up on your writing, but missed the chapter before it.

your writing keeps my interest and i enjoy it.

please keep writing.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015

Thank you. Did you intend to give me 4 stars? If so, that's okay, but sometimes I make a mistake and people let me know. At any rate, thanks for the review,
Rhonda

reply by cbat on 15-Jul-2015

no i intended five stars, my i pad is faster than i

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015

Mine is the same way, and I always appreciate it when people give me another chance. One guy muted me and I'm guessing that's why, because he never contacted me and let me know, thanks,
Rhonda

Comment from MelB

Excellent

Great action and suspense in this chapter, Rhonda. Clara is a real take charge kind of lady! It's getting good. Bring on the next one.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015

Thanks for the review and comments. I will try to get another one out soon,
Rhonda

Comment from boxergirl

Excellent

I like the continuation of your story line. Lots of action as Candace gets assistance from Clara when she has to shove through the mass of people in order to rescue Sarah. Cdaddy also gets some assistance when he is freed by the same gent who had helped Candace earlier . An angel perhaps?

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015

Thank you for reading and following the story! Clara is a sweetheart, although short lived as a character. I appreciate the feedback,
Rhonda

Comment from Clover77

Excellent

You wrote this so wonderfully. You truly do have a talent. Keep on writing, and never give up because you are amazing. Well done
~Julia

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015

Julia, you are so sweet!!! You have lifted me up,
Rhonda

Comment from Mike Stevens

Excellent

Another fine chapter, Rhonda, well, at least C-Daddy's maybe not the dick I thought he was. And Sarah's safe, maybe the world's turning right side up!

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015

The world won't stay up for long, but at least you are right on C-Daddy. He is an ever evolving creature. Thanks for the review!
Rhonda

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Nice storyline again Rhonda, as usual imaginative and well scribed, the last time the man that turned off the fountain when Eris was caused to vanish. Helps again. First big Clara gets Cadence through the crowd then she releases Sarah, then C-daddy is cut free from hanging, it looks like the same man that cuts C-daddy free, is the same as the fountain man, before Cadence cuts Sarah free, she tells Shanice to see how C-daddy, well done, Rhonda, blessings. Roy.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015

Thank you so much, Roy, as always keeping an eye out for me! I'm so happy that you are watching the storyline and watching for angels and demons....
Rhonda

reply by royowen on 14-Jul-2015

I always do Rhonda