Comment from Clover77

Exceptional

I absolutely loved this poem; you are truly an amazing author and I congratulate you on your hard work with this wonderful and exquisite poem.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015

Thanks so much for the high praise, wonderful review, and the delightful comments, and of course, the exceptional rating, blessings, Roy.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

What a perfect poem for the Love Poem contest, Roy. You can't go wrong loving God, to love Him is knowing what real love is all about. No cheating, no lies, just pure love. A wonderful poem, my friend. Good luck in the contest! :) Sandra.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015

Thanks so much Sandra, for the great review, comments and support, blessings, Roy.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Its very well written and it shows you have a very deep rooted faith. You describe that faith in a beautiful and peaceful way. Well done. ulla

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015

Thanks so much Ulla, for the great review, comments and support, blessings, Roy.

Comment from Michaelk

Excellent

That's what we were all born to do but sin changed that. It made everything more difficult. It makes us focus on other things rather than what we were born for.
Your poem is beautiful. It speaks simple truths with an elegance that feels peaceful as well.
Your rhyme and rhythm are good, and you engaged the senses wonderfully.
Excellent job.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015

Thanks so much for the great review, comments and support, blessings, Roy.

Comment from AvL

Good

In five couplets, royowen expresses, with simple grace and childlike simplicity, the many aspects of his connection to the Creator. His meter and rhyme-scheme are well under control, as he shares with us his "multi-sensory vision" of divine love. My one small quibble is over the phrase "heart to love be spliced:" I believe that he means that his heart has been, or should be, spliced into God's love. Not sure.

In any case, I hope to see more from this inspired poet.

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 Comment Written 08-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015

Thanks so much for the great review, comments and support, blessings, "Heart to love be spliced" God is love! 1John 4:8, check it out! Roy.

Comment from Sueswrite

Exceptional

A gentle loving message that surrendered my thoughts to feel your words in entirety! Beautiful soft visuals leading to your final notes quoting important phrases written in the Bible, truly had me stop and recap my behaviors.
Thank you for this, "Loving" poem! Best of luck in the contest!
Sue

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015

Thanks so much Sue, for the high praise, wonderful review, and the delightful comments, and of course, the exceptional rating, blessings, Roy.

Comment from mountainwriter49

Excellent

Good Morning, Roy,

I enjoyed your poem of faith this morning. It's tone is heart-felt and message sublime.

The couplets read well and the AA end rhyme pattern is effective. The rhymes are strong and true. You've used alliteration well, as evidenced by: sunlight's sparkle, gently as God's grace, sacrificed / surrender. I admire how you've applied the senses of sight, hearing and touch as a way to express the intimacy of your connection with God.

May I offer some suggestions for you to consider?

C3-L2: "...fulfilling all your need[s]."

Your use of "I was born to" surely helps to emphasize your feelings, but I wonder if is just a little too much repetition.

An excellent poem, Roy, and best of luck to you in the contest.

-Ray

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015

Thanks so much Ray, for the great review, comments and support, and taking time for constructive suggestion, blessings, Roy.

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Good use of rhyming couplets to get your point across about faith. Faith is what gets you through life and makes life worth living. It allows to you be more to yourself and others.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015

Thanks so much Joan, for the great review, comments and support, blessings, Roy.

reply by dragonpoet on 09-Jul-2015

You are so very welcome, Roy

Joan

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

This is very well written. It is inspiring and very touching. It shows your deep seated faith very well. Good job and well done. Good luck.
Take care.
Christelle.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015

Thanks so much Christelle, for the great review, comments and support, blessings, Roy.

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Roy, well composed spiritual poem that gives us plenty food for thought.

My favorite line:
I was born to hear the rhythmic beating of God's heart,
feel His loving warm embrace, let Him set me apart.

Best of luck in the contest. John

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015

Thanks so much John, for the great review, comments and support, blessings, Roy.