haiku (jagged snowflakes slip)
haiku19 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Nice haiku about winter and water. Your haiku has two interconnected lines and a satori line about winter, the kigo. Good job and good luck with your entry.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Nice haiku about winter and water. Your haiku has two interconnected lines and a satori line about winter, the kigo. Good job and good luck with your entry.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Thanks so very much! Gypsy Blue Rose, love it :)
Comment from Treischel
This is an outstanding Haiku, done in classic Japanese 5-7-5 format. But it's the imagery of tapestry and loom weaved by God's hands that are so inspirational. Knowing the complexity of snowflake patterns, you juxtaposed it in perfect metaphor. Well done!
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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This is an outstanding Haiku, done in classic Japanese 5-7-5 format. But it's the imagery of tapestry and loom weaved by God's hands that are so inspirational. Knowing the complexity of snowflake patterns, you juxtaposed it in perfect metaphor. Well done!
Comment Written 07-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2015
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Wow. What a Great way to start the day! Thank you so much! I'm honored and grateful. I'm really glad the "jagged" worked! Thank you so very much for this six. Huge confidence booster! Yay
Comment from IndianaIrish
Beautiful imagery in your haiku, Greg. I like the thought of the flakes just slipping into the scene, and your aha is an interesting abstract line that brings together a loom and the winter tapestry. Best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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Beautiful imagery in your haiku, Greg. I like the thought of the flakes just slipping into the scene, and your aha is an interesting abstract line that brings together a loom and the winter tapestry. Best wishes in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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Thanks so much Karyn! I love your reviews of my short forms. You're the master ;)
Truly thank you
Comment from l.raven
HI Gregory, I lived in Illinois over 40 years...I think it is beautiful the shapes of Winter...but can be dangerous...love your poem..and the picture ...perfect...Luff Ya Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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HI Gregory, I lived in Illinois over 40 years...I think it is beautiful the shapes of Winter...but can be dangerous...love your poem..and the picture ...perfect...Luff Ya Linda xxoo
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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thank you Linda! Illinois? Freezing!
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it does get cold....burrrrrr....you are so welcome sweetie...luff xxoo
Comment from Nosha17
Interesting imagery, I am not fond of winter or snow, but it is definitely very pretty to look at! Well chosen words and lovely illustration. Good luck in the contest. faye
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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Interesting imagery, I am not fond of winter or snow, but it is definitely very pretty to look at! Well chosen words and lovely illustration. Good luck in the contest. faye
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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Thanks so very much!
Comment from robina1978
Excellent and beautiful photo that complements your little poem perfectly. It is a true Haiku, dot on syllable count. One tip: I'd suggest centring it as that is usually done for better layout. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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Excellent and beautiful photo that complements your little poem perfectly. It is a true Haiku, dot on syllable count. One tip: I'd suggest centring it as that is usually done for better layout. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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Thank you Robina! Love to hear from you!!
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Hi again! I centered it. So much better! Thank you!
Comment from MissMerri
This is a strong haiku, filled with vivid imagery (jagged snowflakes catching in the arbor's tapestry) and the final line which is beautiful... to think of God's giant loom weaving the winter scenes which I truly love and enjoy... I'd have to say this is a delightful and memorable haiku. I wish you well in this contest. MM
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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This is a strong haiku, filled with vivid imagery (jagged snowflakes catching in the arbor's tapestry) and the final line which is beautiful... to think of God's giant loom weaving the winter scenes which I truly love and enjoy... I'd have to say this is a delightful and memorable haiku. I wish you well in this contest. MM
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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Thank you Merri! That is a fabulous review. I'm very honored that it comes from you. Truly thank you
Comment from Mastery
Looks like a winner to me, Greg. I can fell and see the landscape as you describe it so well. It's amazing when we consider that no two snowflakes are alike. The wonder of nature, eh? Good job, my friend. I hope you win the contest. Bob
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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Looks like a winner to me, Greg. I can fell and see the landscape as you describe it so well. It's amazing when we consider that no two snowflakes are alike. The wonder of nature, eh? Good job, my friend. I hope you win the contest. Bob
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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Hey Bob! I literally was just looking at your message. Whew, I've been so busy. I just try to jot a quick thing down and then hop off. But I'm on tonight my friend so your page is first. Thank you for this vote of confidence too Bob.
Comment from Emily George
Delightful use of word imagery in this Haiku poem. Very succinct use of words. I really loved " in arbour's chilled tapestry"
The artwork is perfect for your work.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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Delightful use of word imagery in this Haiku poem. Very succinct use of words. I really loved " in arbour's chilled tapestry"
The artwork is perfect for your work.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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Thanks so very much Emily!
Comment from dmt1967
The words and the picture paint a picturesque picture of a winters tale and the icicles hanging on the porches roof like Christmas decorations. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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The words and the picture paint a picturesque picture of a winters tale and the icicles hanging on the porches roof like Christmas decorations. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2015
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Thanks so very much!
