In dappled shadows...
Understanding depression.96 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I know in darkness God can see,
and always He remains with me,
I'll close my eyes so I perceive,
He'll not desert me, never leave.
Having some understanding of depression, (since I've been there myself through be left with 3 little lads to bring up alone with no financial help at the time, but part-time jobs I managed in between looking after my baby and two toddlers) - I feel it's worse when you don't have a reason to be depressed, as how to tackle it? In my case, I had my faith which brought me through, altho I faltered often, but I ended up a stronger woman.
A rather lovely spiritual verse, which will hopefully help someone who needs to look to the future with hope, Ray.
Margaret
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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I know in darkness God can see,
and always He remains with me,
I'll close my eyes so I perceive,
He'll not desert me, never leave.
Having some understanding of depression, (since I've been there myself through be left with 3 little lads to bring up alone with no financial help at the time, but part-time jobs I managed in between looking after my baby and two toddlers) - I feel it's worse when you don't have a reason to be depressed, as how to tackle it? In my case, I had my faith which brought me through, altho I faltered often, but I ended up a stronger woman.
A rather lovely spiritual verse, which will hopefully help someone who needs to look to the future with hope, Ray.
Margaret
Comment Written 02-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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Thank you Margaret, mine was caused by a broken relationship and a dear friend committing suicide! Thanks for this lovely review, and the empathetic comments, thank you so much, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Dean Kuch
No offense taken, Roy. Your heartfelt sentiments are beautifully expressed here in this well composed poem.
Being a diagnosed manic depressive myself, many do not understand what a struggle it is just to get out of bed sometimes. Without God's love, understanding and guidance in my life, I can tell you unequivocally I would heave been dead a long, long time ago.
Well done, my talented friend, and God bless...
~Dean
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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No offense taken, Roy. Your heartfelt sentiments are beautifully expressed here in this well composed poem.
Being a diagnosed manic depressive myself, many do not understand what a struggle it is just to get out of bed sometimes. Without God's love, understanding and guidance in my life, I can tell you unequivocally I would heave been dead a long, long time ago.
Well done, my talented friend, and God bless...
~Dean
Comment Written 02-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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Thank you Dean, for this lovely review, and the empathetic comments, thank you so much, blessings, Roy.
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My pleasure, Roy, as always.
~Dean :)
Comment from Eigle Rull
I love the picture, showing the rays of sunlight and hope through skies of dwindling clouds.
Wow! This is so beautiful and realistic in it's words. Perhaps if some of today's youth would put more trust in our Lord, there would be less suicide. This was excellent, my friend. The rhyming and flow was next to perfect. The idea behind the poem was right on the money too. I really enjoyed reading this. Best wishes, my friend.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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I love the picture, showing the rays of sunlight and hope through skies of dwindling clouds.
Wow! This is so beautiful and realistic in it's words. Perhaps if some of today's youth would put more trust in our Lord, there would be less suicide. This was excellent, my friend. The rhyming and flow was next to perfect. The idea behind the poem was right on the money too. I really enjoyed reading this. Best wishes, my friend.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 02-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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Thank you Eigle for this wonderful review, most encouraging comments and exceptional rating, I am most grateful, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Janet7053
Roy, appreciate and relish your candor in why you wrote these ideas in the first place. You say your depression was circumstantial. I find that refreshing and amazing because so many want to stay in a place they find themselves. I am at a loss as to how to help others with depression. They say applying scripture doesn't help. I have always applied scripture to my deepest needs since I was saved. Until He fails me, I will continue to cling to His unchanging hand.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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Roy, appreciate and relish your candor in why you wrote these ideas in the first place. You say your depression was circumstantial. I find that refreshing and amazing because so many want to stay in a place they find themselves. I am at a loss as to how to help others with depression. They say applying scripture doesn't help. I have always applied scripture to my deepest needs since I was saved. Until He fails me, I will continue to cling to His unchanging hand.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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Thank you Janet, for this lovely review, and the empathetic comments, thank you so much, blessings, Roy.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
my faith has eyes to clear my sight. Shouldn't this state...
My eyes have faith to clear my sight? It seems to me you have the cart before the horse in that final line.
Other than that this is a definite six star piece of poetry. What a wonderful Spiritual poem. I am putting it in my bookcase for inspiration Roy! Kudos! Nancy
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my faith has eyes to clear my sight. Shouldn't this state...
My eyes have faith to clear my sight? It seems to me you have the cart before the horse in that final line.
Other than that this is a definite six star piece of poetry. What a wonderful Spiritual poem. I am putting it in my bookcase for inspiration Roy! Kudos! Nancy
Comment Written 02-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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I based it on the scripture. Nancy, Hebrews 11:1 says, "now faith is the substance of things hoped for, the evidence of things not seen" faith has it's own eyes, it sees in realms the naked eye can't see! Thank you for the most extraordinary review, comments and exceptional rating, most grateful, blessings, Roy.
Comment from I am Cat
I know, from reading your poems, Roy, that you are a very nice guy. A man who has great faith... One who has, at this point in life, I'm sure, found that faith through what are surely his own trials and tribulations in life... We all have those... WE all have our stories, our journeys... and judging someone else... is not our place, and I truly feel that you don't do that...
That being said...
Having lived with severe clinical depression and (what doctors term as) a mood disorder (namely Bipolar I, rapid cycling... most likely caused by Hashimoto's Disease)... and having lived through childhood molestation... and more than my share of surgeries, etc... it is MY experience (having once considered myself a person of faith)... that if there ever was a 'god'... He comes nowhere near Depresssion. And if he does... We are not in any shape to see him.
Depression is an ugly thing... and when you're in it... there is no way to see any hands in the darkness... I've no idea if you even remember HOW you came out of your darkness... But as someone who just keeps getting yanked right back in... and I sometimes go years before I am.... and I'm a happy person, trust me. I am!
but then, it gets you without being aware... But yeah... after awhile of NOT being 'rescued".... I've found it really difficult to believe in anything. Medical science, deities... even humanity some days... The only thing I've found that sticks with me... is me. And I have to question that some days as well. LOL
Your poem is beautifully stated as always... because you're very good at that. I think that people who may experience sadness, will very much cling to it... especially those of faith... yet those who may be in the throes of depression right now... they have nothing to cling to... and a wisp of air (which is what the idea of faith is in the midst of despair) most likely may not bring them comfort...
If it does... I'm all for it... But it's SO hard when you're in it.
((((( I wish you peace) ))))))
for the record, I do not take offense to this at all... I merely want to give another side.
:)
Love and laughter to you Roy
Cat
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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I know, from reading your poems, Roy, that you are a very nice guy. A man who has great faith... One who has, at this point in life, I'm sure, found that faith through what are surely his own trials and tribulations in life... We all have those... WE all have our stories, our journeys... and judging someone else... is not our place, and I truly feel that you don't do that...
That being said...
Having lived with severe clinical depression and (what doctors term as) a mood disorder (namely Bipolar I, rapid cycling... most likely caused by Hashimoto's Disease)... and having lived through childhood molestation... and more than my share of surgeries, etc... it is MY experience (having once considered myself a person of faith)... that if there ever was a 'god'... He comes nowhere near Depresssion. And if he does... We are not in any shape to see him.
Depression is an ugly thing... and when you're in it... there is no way to see any hands in the darkness... I've no idea if you even remember HOW you came out of your darkness... But as someone who just keeps getting yanked right back in... and I sometimes go years before I am.... and I'm a happy person, trust me. I am!
but then, it gets you without being aware... But yeah... after awhile of NOT being 'rescued".... I've found it really difficult to believe in anything. Medical science, deities... even humanity some days... The only thing I've found that sticks with me... is me. And I have to question that some days as well. LOL
Your poem is beautifully stated as always... because you're very good at that. I think that people who may experience sadness, will very much cling to it... especially those of faith... yet those who may be in the throes of depression right now... they have nothing to cling to... and a wisp of air (which is what the idea of faith is in the midst of despair) most likely may not bring them comfort...
If it does... I'm all for it... But it's SO hard when you're in it.
((((( I wish you peace) ))))))
for the record, I do not take offense to this at all... I merely want to give another side.
:)
Love and laughter to you Roy
Cat
Comment Written 02-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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Thanks cat for your candour, I was coming at it purely from a personal view, I lost a close personal friend to suicide, and then I had a dramatic relational breakdown, which triggered it off, but I came out of it, and although I have had a rough road in places, I never came close to that experience. Thanks for the great review. Blessings, Roy.
Comment from krys123
Roy;
-And unbelievably written piece of poetry that sums up depression and many ways and also tackles the old age problem that depression has on some people. I pondered your writing very much mind you talk in your authors notes about teenage suicide. And I read your poem and in doing so I found you mentioned a religious passage in your poem and I just felt that most teenagers that I know haven't gone to religious Bible studies that we use a passage like that. But on the other hand, I can see your reference to it as being supportive for your poem.
-The rhyming is totally exceptional in each rhyming word is contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the wonderful rhythm flow smoothly.
-The rhythmic meter being iambic tetrameter with the use of cadence, timing and tempo. All were helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and very easy.
-The expressive imagery is very well written and concludes the fact that this poem offers much in reference to suicide and depression.
-All throughout your writing. I saw a good use of enjambment.
-Thank you for sharing and posting this Roy and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
PS: I too had succumbed to depression when I was in high school but I had a father on a farm that would keep me too busy to think about it.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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Roy;
-And unbelievably written piece of poetry that sums up depression and many ways and also tackles the old age problem that depression has on some people. I pondered your writing very much mind you talk in your authors notes about teenage suicide. And I read your poem and in doing so I found you mentioned a religious passage in your poem and I just felt that most teenagers that I know haven't gone to religious Bible studies that we use a passage like that. But on the other hand, I can see your reference to it as being supportive for your poem.
-The rhyming is totally exceptional in each rhyming word is contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore making the wonderful rhythm flow smoothly.
-The rhythmic meter being iambic tetrameter with the use of cadence, timing and tempo. All were helpful in making the reading clear, fluid and very easy.
-The expressive imagery is very well written and concludes the fact that this poem offers much in reference to suicide and depression.
-All throughout your writing. I saw a good use of enjambment.
-Thank you for sharing and posting this Roy and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
PS: I too had succumbed to depression when I was in high school but I had a father on a farm that would keep me too busy to think about it.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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I didn't use a scriptural Alex, not wanting to appear judgemental, I was only trying to be understanding. But a wonderful review and great rating, my friend, it's a touchy subject, dear friend, thank you, blessings, Roy.
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You are so welcome Roy. I should've just said, paraphrasing , or I think that's what I should've said. I'm getting too old for this. It was a very good poem anyway.
Alex
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You're a good writer Alex, don't let anyone tell you otherwise bro, our hearts lie to us, and so do people, you've always been there for me, great stuff, your friend, Roy.
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Thank you again Roy.
Alex
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a lovely poem of your strong faith in God, Roy. If only those who suffer from depression could somehow see what you have seen. Faith in God, the belief that He is there sharing your load can help so much to bring you some understanding of what you are going through and that with His help you can come through it. You have expressed this so well my friend. Excellent and it is always the way with me, when a really outstanding poem comes for me to read, I am out of 6s. I am sorry, this is a 6 star poem in every sense of the word. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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What a lovely poem of your strong faith in God, Roy. If only those who suffer from depression could somehow see what you have seen. Faith in God, the belief that He is there sharing your load can help so much to bring you some understanding of what you are going through and that with His help you can come through it. You have expressed this so well my friend. Excellent and it is always the way with me, when a really outstanding poem comes for me to read, I am out of 6s. I am sorry, this is a 6 star poem in every sense of the word. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 02-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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Thank you Sandra, your encouragement is enough. And thanks for the kind words and for this lovely review, and the empathetic comments, thank you so much, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Just2Write
Nice quatrains of AABB rhyming verse in tetrameter. An excellent testimony to the speaker's faith and introspection.
I spotted a couple of small things that need attention:
in fears (fear's) illusions [add an apostrophe for the possessive]
God my lion roared(,)[.] [drop the comma - add a period or a dash]
Rose
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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Nice quatrains of AABB rhyming verse in tetrameter. An excellent testimony to the speaker's faith and introspection.
I spotted a couple of small things that need attention:
in fears (fear's) illusions [add an apostrophe for the possessive]
God my lion roared(,)[.] [drop the comma - add a period or a dash]
Rose
Comment Written 02-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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Thank you Rose, for the tip, and it's great your here today, I prayed for you, and thanks, for this lovely review, and the empathetic comments, thank you so much, blessings, Roy.
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Roy, you have no idea how comforting it was for me to know that prayers were being offered in my name. Especially when things were looking a little hopeless. I am much better than I was, and I now do have hope once more. Thank you, my friend.
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My utmost pleasure
Comment from Nan Beeson
Title is great and made me want to see and read your "In dappled shadows
I think the opening stanza is great, and preview of what is yet to come. The rhymes are perfect. The word "fate" certainly seems to be the appropriate word for all (most) in today's society of depressed people.
Re the line "it mocks and taunts, it jeers with glee" sends shivers down my spine. How well I know Satan's deceitful tactics to arouse that feeling in those who are wise to him.
Your descriptive words in the third stanza "whirlpool, "murky gloom, and "doom" visually show in addition to the feeling.:I love the last line where you do not give in. I.E. ." I'll listen not to whispered doom."
Your next stanza stands on its own...I love it!
"I know in darkness God can see,
and always He remains with me,
I'll close my eyes so I perceive,
He'll not desert me, never leave."
The same feeling goes for the rest of this magnificent poem :
"Until I know my faith's restored,
I know in God my lion roared,
Lion of Judah stands with me,
my pain is eased until I see.
"So I'll not fear within this night,
my faith has eyes to clear my sight".
Perfect last line defying and negating the failing sight in the fist stanza. Your author's notes are great and no need to apologize for anything you said. It is all true and not pointing a finger at any one person. Very tactful, I think
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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Title is great and made me want to see and read your "In dappled shadows
I think the opening stanza is great, and preview of what is yet to come. The rhymes are perfect. The word "fate" certainly seems to be the appropriate word for all (most) in today's society of depressed people.
Re the line "it mocks and taunts, it jeers with glee" sends shivers down my spine. How well I know Satan's deceitful tactics to arouse that feeling in those who are wise to him.
Your descriptive words in the third stanza "whirlpool, "murky gloom, and "doom" visually show in addition to the feeling.:I love the last line where you do not give in. I.E. ." I'll listen not to whispered doom."
Your next stanza stands on its own...I love it!
"I know in darkness God can see,
and always He remains with me,
I'll close my eyes so I perceive,
He'll not desert me, never leave."
The same feeling goes for the rest of this magnificent poem :
"Until I know my faith's restored,
I know in God my lion roared,
Lion of Judah stands with me,
my pain is eased until I see.
"So I'll not fear within this night,
my faith has eyes to clear my sight".
Perfect last line defying and negating the failing sight in the fist stanza. Your author's notes are great and no need to apologize for anything you said. It is all true and not pointing a finger at any one person. Very tactful, I think
Comment Written 02-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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Thanks Nan, for not only your continued support but for this really great review, and supportive comments, blessings, Roy.
