In dappled shadows...
Understanding depression.96 total reviews
Comment from jennahall733
The imagery in the beginning of this piece is beautiful. I love the change in tone between almost desperation to hopefulness and faith. Very nicely written poem!
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The imagery in the beginning of this piece is beautiful. I love the change in tone between almost desperation to hopefulness and faith. Very nicely written poem!
Comment Written 04-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2015
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Thanks so much for a most encouraging and positive review and comments, blessings, Roy.
Comment from rjuselius
this is a brilliant social commentary and philosophical sentiment dear roy! i love the way you handle depression, you certainly hit the hammer on this one. when hope is gone, nothing stays.
thank you for sharing this delicate poem!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2015
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this is a brilliant social commentary and philosophical sentiment dear roy! i love the way you handle depression, you certainly hit the hammer on this one. when hope is gone, nothing stays.
thank you for sharing this delicate poem!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 04-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2015
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Wonderful review dear Rebekka, very encouraging, and fills me with joy that it so moved you, thanks again, blessings, Roy.
Comment from evilynne
There is certainly a great deal of depression in this world of complex lives. Your poem is well written, and its ending speaks of hope.
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There is certainly a great deal of depression in this world of complex lives. Your poem is well written, and its ending speaks of hope.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2015
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Thanks so much Evilynne, for a most encouraging and positive review and comments, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I saw your message clearly, Roy. 'though I walk through the valley of the shadow of death, I will fear no evil, for thou art with me.' There are many times I have used those lines to restore my confidence and faith. That's what I see in the lines of your poem and I feel the message is strong, well done. what stunning artwork! Giddy
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I saw your message clearly, Roy. 'though I walk through the valley of the shadow of death, I will fear no evil, for thou art with me.' There are many times I have used those lines to restore my confidence and faith. That's what I see in the lines of your poem and I feel the message is strong, well done. what stunning artwork! Giddy
Comment Written 03-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2015
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Thanks Giddy your approval and first class comments, plus exceptional rating, move me deeply,
Comment from c_lucas
A writer/poet should never apologize for his muse, or his pen. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery and descriptive scheme.
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A writer/poet should never apologize for his muse, or his pen. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2015
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Thanks so much Charlie, for a most encouraging and positive review and comments, blessings, Roy.
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You're welcome, Roy. Charlie
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Roy
As a sufferer of Major Depressive Disorder for most of my life, I do understand your words and love the attempt of a non-sufferer to understand. I've always managed to mask this part of my persona, and have been grateful for God helping me to over come and at least learn to live with it. Of course back in the day, it was essential to keep it a hidden trauma as so few who didn't suffer could understand or even have compassion.
Excellent rhyme and rhythm, personification and understanding of this horrible disease. Always great to bring awareness with hope. Well done. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
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Hi Roy
As a sufferer of Major Depressive Disorder for most of my life, I do understand your words and love the attempt of a non-sufferer to understand. I've always managed to mask this part of my persona, and have been grateful for God helping me to over come and at least learn to live with it. Of course back in the day, it was essential to keep it a hidden trauma as so few who didn't suffer could understand or even have compassion.
Excellent rhyme and rhythm, personification and understanding of this horrible disease. Always great to bring awareness with hope. Well done. Hugs - Lovi xoxo
Comment Written 03-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2015
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Thanks Lovi, it was something that touched me years ago, but there have been a lot of writing dedicated to depression, and I asked God for perception, and according to the responses, seem to touched it a little, the responses have been amazing, people like yourself for instance, how can we doubt that God loves us with that response. Blessing my friend, thank you for sharing your heart! Blessings, to you and your boys, and all they relate to, Roy & Elaine, XX PS. In Germany at the moment, 35 deg. Here.
Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Evening, Roy,
I enjoyed reading your well written quatrains about depression. I'm familiar with it--both of my parents had it. Oh, what a terrible disease it is. I appreciated your metaphor of 'edit swamp' for it. That is truly what it is.
While you do a great job of discussing the issues of depression and describing it in most vivid, emotive terms, you also turn the poem to one of faith. I admire that greatly. Thus, the closing couplet is sublime.
Your iambic meter is strong and effective, thus allowing for a smooth read aloud and flow of thought from line to line. This is enhanced by your excellent use of enjambment.
The end rhyme pattern varies, but is still effective. I'm seeing the following rhyme patterns in the quatrains: Q1-AAAA; Q2-AAAA (I liked the slant rhyme of me/glee with seep/creep); Q3-AABB; Q4-AAAA; Q5-AABB; Couplet-AA. I was once told by an en accomplished poet on this site once a poet commits to a specific rhyme pattern, he should stay with it. Your poem has two distinct rhyme patterns as noted above. I offer this for your information and it does not reflect in my rating.
I found not SPAGS or other issues with the poem. It was a delight to read and ponder.
-Ray
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2015
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Good Evening, Roy,
I enjoyed reading your well written quatrains about depression. I'm familiar with it--both of my parents had it. Oh, what a terrible disease it is. I appreciated your metaphor of 'edit swamp' for it. That is truly what it is.
While you do a great job of discussing the issues of depression and describing it in most vivid, emotive terms, you also turn the poem to one of faith. I admire that greatly. Thus, the closing couplet is sublime.
Your iambic meter is strong and effective, thus allowing for a smooth read aloud and flow of thought from line to line. This is enhanced by your excellent use of enjambment.
The end rhyme pattern varies, but is still effective. I'm seeing the following rhyme patterns in the quatrains: Q1-AAAA; Q2-AAAA (I liked the slant rhyme of me/glee with seep/creep); Q3-AABB; Q4-AAAA; Q5-AABB; Couplet-AA. I was once told by an en accomplished poet on this site once a poet commits to a specific rhyme pattern, he should stay with it. Your poem has two distinct rhyme patterns as noted above. I offer this for your information and it does not reflect in my rating.
I found not SPAGS or other issues with the poem. It was a delight to read and ponder.
-Ray
Comment Written 03-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2015
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Thanks so much for a most encouraging and positive review and comments Ray. All due respects but if that were true about rhyme patterns, then that would defeat the sonnet idea, and why does being prominent or not mean that we should conform to whatever that person says, there's only one book I take my authority from! I generally follow whatever method causes flow, rhythm, substance and is lyrically sound, if that is wrong, I apologise! always with respect! blessings, Roy.
Comment from Autumn Splendour
Wow, an excellent tribute to God extolling his awesomeness, majesty and your faith in him.
As always I enjoy the rhythm and rhyme, the cadence and flow and the imagery conjured.
I went through depression too, over my son. Do stop by if you can, to read my poem, crippled, just posted.
This fetid swamp I call my sty,
in dappled shadows here I lie,
That filtered image steals my sight,
prevents the truth, perception's light.
Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2015
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Wow, an excellent tribute to God extolling his awesomeness, majesty and your faith in him.
As always I enjoy the rhythm and rhyme, the cadence and flow and the imagery conjured.
I went through depression too, over my son. Do stop by if you can, to read my poem, crippled, just posted.
This fetid swamp I call my sty,
in dappled shadows here I lie,
That filtered image steals my sight,
prevents the truth, perception's light.
Well done.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2015
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Thanks For your approval and first class comments, plus exceptional rating, move me deeply, I will drop by my friend, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Nosha17
Having cared for a close member of my family who suffered from clinical depression over many years, I understand fully the pain and suffering. With love and support from family and friends and maintaining faith, all can combine to alleviate the suffering. Well chosen words and rhyming to convey your message. I am still in Scotland, wowed by the scenery and superb weather. Hope your trip was good. Faye
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Having cared for a close member of my family who suffered from clinical depression over many years, I understand fully the pain and suffering. With love and support from family and friends and maintaining faith, all can combine to alleviate the suffering. Well chosen words and rhyming to convey your message. I am still in Scotland, wowed by the scenery and superb weather. Hope your trip was good. Faye
Comment Written 03-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2015
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Thanks so much Faye, great place to be, it's hot in Germany at the moment, and thanks, for a most encouraging and positive review and comments, blessings, Roy.
Comment from paperwait
Roy, this poem really touches my heart. I have struggled with depression for years, and I know what you mean about God always being there for us even in the dark. He continually gives us hope to cling to and takes care of us.
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Roy, this poem really touches my heart. I have struggled with depression for years, and I know what you mean about God always being there for us even in the dark. He continually gives us hope to cling to and takes care of us.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2015
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Thanks for your approval and first class comments, plus exceptional rating, they move me deeply, I'm so glad you related to it. I need that song you wanted for me put to music, my apologies for its lateness. My blessings, blessings, Roy.
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Hi Roy, the poem is in my portfolio. It's "My Savior, Thou Art There". It was posted last November.
