Destiny's Angel
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "The Woman in the Fountain"A fantasy novel set in modern day Baltimore
11 total reviews
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Partner. I am so sorry that I don't have a six left. This is one of your chapters that has a major WOW factor. Beautifully written with exception dialogue and perfectly vivid imagery. I absolutely enjoyed this and it was worth waiting for. Well played mate....
SPAG ALERT...
"You give us false hope, but his(this) woman offers so much more."
"I'll give her to you, too. I'll have my brothers bring here(her) here and she can leave with Leo,"
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2015
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G'day Partner. I am so sorry that I don't have a six left. This is one of your chapters that has a major WOW factor. Beautifully written with exception dialogue and perfectly vivid imagery. I absolutely enjoyed this and it was worth waiting for. Well played mate....
SPAG ALERT...
"You give us false hope, but his(this) woman offers so much more."
"I'll give her to you, too. I'll have my brothers bring here(her) here and she can leave with Leo,"
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 02-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2015
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Thank you, Fez for the glowing review and Spaghetti alert. It's amazing how much you miss when reviewing your own work!
Comment from royowen
A good episode Rhonda, the plot was absorbing, captivating and very well done, the goddess Eris was realistic, with a believable vanity that a satanic creature would have, and as you realise, it is their Achilles heel! So well done, the intervention by the small unkempt man was an great distraction, which broke the hypnotic spell, good scribing, and beautifully presented and written, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2015
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A good episode Rhonda, the plot was absorbing, captivating and very well done, the goddess Eris was realistic, with a believable vanity that a satanic creature would have, and as you realise, it is their Achilles heel! So well done, the intervention by the small unkempt man was an great distraction, which broke the hypnotic spell, good scribing, and beautifully presented and written, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2015
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Thank you, Roy, for the wonderful and much appreciated review. The 6 stars was a beautiful gift! The unkempt man will work his way into being a very pivotal character. Thanks for keeping up and pointing out the religious aspects,
Rhonda
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Well earned Rhonda
Comment from Chrissy710
Another riveting read of this series, and I find myself wondering how you think up this material. I like your story line it is interesting and different and look forward to next instalment. I won't need a hard copy book with this to keep me going ha ha. Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Another riveting read of this series, and I find myself wondering how you think up this material. I like your story line it is interesting and different and look forward to next instalment. I won't need a hard copy book with this to keep me going ha ha. Cheers Christine
Comment Written 30-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Christine, that is so sweet! My mother used to be my editor, but she's gotten to where she can't anymore. Her health is too bad, and she used to ask me the same question about where I got the ideas from. My only answer, beyond I haven't got a clue, is my late father who was a writer. In one of my books (I have 6 published), I fell asleep writing and wrote a complete chapter I never remember writing. Long answer, but thanks for the review and question,
Rhonda
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Keep writing Ronda enjoy your thinking
Comment from Nan Beeson
So glad I read the author's notes first. What an enormous amount of time and effort you must have spent to explain so much. That in itself is worth the six stars.
The very first sentence captured my interest, so I kept on reading. It reminds me of the story of Dorian Gray and also of my post about Incubus doing the same thing to me. No wonder I kept on reading. I love and identified about the "ageless face" also. { I witched "Lost Horizon" decades ago and never forgot this happening to Margo. I do not know why it hit me so hard, and that I identified with it also.
The visual descriptions are superb and really a big help and aid in reading further. I love Cadence's line, "Leave us! You are not welcome here," What strong dialogue to help bring the story to life. I especially love the part about the Goddess of the Underworld.
The entire story is gripping to the end and I enjoyed it so very much. It showed me how much I have to learn n order to be able to write with such prowess. Hope I have a SIX since it is certainly worthy of it. Great story. I would love to see it with illustrations.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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So glad I read the author's notes first. What an enormous amount of time and effort you must have spent to explain so much. That in itself is worth the six stars.
The very first sentence captured my interest, so I kept on reading. It reminds me of the story of Dorian Gray and also of my post about Incubus doing the same thing to me. No wonder I kept on reading. I love and identified about the "ageless face" also. { I witched "Lost Horizon" decades ago and never forgot this happening to Margo. I do not know why it hit me so hard, and that I identified with it also.
The visual descriptions are superb and really a big help and aid in reading further. I love Cadence's line, "Leave us! You are not welcome here," What strong dialogue to help bring the story to life. I especially love the part about the Goddess of the Underworld.
The entire story is gripping to the end and I enjoyed it so very much. It showed me how much I have to learn n order to be able to write with such prowess. Hope I have a SIX since it is certainly worthy of it. Great story. I would love to see it with illustrations.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Nan, what a sweet and very comprehensive review. You were specific about what you liked and even tied it into prior events and movies. That is very helpful and encouraging. I know this chapter was long, too, but there was no real breaking point in the story to stop. Thanks so much,
Rhonda
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So haply you were pleased with my review. I read all of your posts but do not feel vilified to review them.
This one intrigued me and I managed to get through it. Your gift for wring is so far beyond my comprehension, I feel honored that I even had the cowage to review it.
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That is so sweet, and you can review any you want. I'm sure you would be much kinder than some who review. But don't feel obligated to. I often read and don't review when I get behind, and there is nothing I wrong with that, either. And your writing is wonderful, don't ever think otherwise. You can hold your head up amongst any here. Just remember, all of us get mean reviews from time to time.
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So haply you were pleased with my review. I read all of your posts but do not feel vilified to review them.
This one intrigued me and I managed to get through it. Your gift for wring is so far beyond my comprehension, I feel honored that I even had the cowage to review it.
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Never feel that you can't review my work!!! It's how we both grow. I appreciate your both reading and reviewing,
Rhonda
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I enjoyed reading your story, you did a great job developing the characters and the plot; also, I like the attractive format that enhances the story. Good job!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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I enjoyed reading your story, you did a great job developing the characters and the plot; also, I like the attractive format that enhances the story. Good job!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much. As always, your reviews mean a lot to me,
Rhonda
Comment from boxergirl
Great bantering and dialogue between Eris and Cadence in this scene. I agree with Cadence's thinking that Cdaddy probably let himself be captured in order to check on Sarah. I liked how you had the unkempt man come to the rescue. Could that be Cdaddy or one of his friends? 8-)
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Great bantering and dialogue between Eris and Cadence in this scene. I agree with Cadence's thinking that Cdaddy probably let himself be captured in order to check on Sarah. I liked how you had the unkempt man come to the rescue. Could that be Cdaddy or one of his friends? 8-)
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Very smart on the surprise visitor. He's about to become a big part of the story, but you won't learn his true identity until much later. Thanks for keeping up,
Rhonda
Comment from MelB
Cadence allowed herself be taken in for just a moment, - herself to be taken
You give us false hope, but his woman offers so much more." - but this woman
be ever so slightly na�???�??�?�¯ve, but I'm not stupid." - FS gremlin strikes!
I swear, you put a good looking woman in front of a man and they lose all their senses! It seems Cadence had to be the brains for everyone here. All of the characters and what they stand for is becoming clear now.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Cadence allowed herself be taken in for just a moment, - herself to be taken
You give us false hope, but his woman offers so much more." - but this woman
be ever so slightly na�???�??�?�¯ve, but I'm not stupid." - FS gremlin strikes!
I swear, you put a good looking woman in front of a man and they lose all their senses! It seems Cadence had to be the brains for everyone here. All of the characters and what they stand for is becoming clear now.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Thanks so much for reading. I know it was quite long this time, but I couldn't find a breaking spot. Yes, Eris has quite the effect on men, but, remember, Cadence was taken in by the handsome brothers earlier. They will all meet again under less comfortable conditions! Thanks for the grammar and SPAG tips!
Rhonda
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I forgot about her being taken in by the brothers. Thanks for the reminder.
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Sure, it's been about a week or longer since I posted last. I need to post quicker so that people can keep up. Thanks.
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Hard to do this time of year. Finding it hard to write with the beautiful weather outside!
Comment from amahra
Fabulous chapter, Rhonda, love that name, btw...was going to name my first child if a girl, but it was a boy. Loved this chapter: men keep falling for the same old chic tricks. You'd think they've learned by now.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Fabulous chapter, Rhonda, love that name, btw...was going to name my first child if a girl, but it was a boy. Loved this chapter: men keep falling for the same old chic tricks. You'd think they've learned by now.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Too true, and she's a powerful woman at that! What is it about men and cold women? Thanks for reading the incredibly long chapter and reviewing!
Rhonda
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting story that the author has created with this piece of work. I have read this with interest and the story is well written. Well done.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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This is an interesting story that the author has created with this piece of work. I have read this with interest and the story is well written. Well done.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Thank you,k Tomes, for the excellent review!
Rhonda
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My pleasure
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine chapter, Rhonda, so it appears that C-Daddy caved like a lot of guys, and fell for the old, 'Hot Chick in the Mall Fountain' trick. I've seen it so many times!
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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Another fine chapter, Rhonda, so it appears that C-Daddy caved like a lot of guys, and fell for the old, 'Hot Chick in the Mall Fountain' trick. I've seen it so many times!
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Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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I know, right? And she's an old flame. Oh, well, can't win them all. Oh, and thanks for the review!
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Man up, C-Daddy!
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And quickly, too!
