Pour Down
There are different kinds of healing23 total reviews
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is a dark and brooding poem from the author. The rain is a vivid image of a depressing situation. Well done.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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This is an interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is a dark and brooding poem from the author. The rain is a vivid image of a depressing situation. Well done.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for your observations and kind words. I'm glad you read it.
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My pleasure
Comment from rspoet
This is a very fine poem for the free verse poem contest
Excellent images and comparisons: the rain, soft tears, falling to pools of saving grace
Air heavy with promises - all excellent
Dust dry in the mind, and bleak, brittle bones - beautifully written in soft alliteration
also sad and ominous.
A beautiful prayer poem, good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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This is a very fine poem for the free verse poem contest
Excellent images and comparisons: the rain, soft tears, falling to pools of saving grace
Air heavy with promises - all excellent
Dust dry in the mind, and bleak, brittle bones - beautifully written in soft alliteration
also sad and ominous.
A beautiful prayer poem, good luck in the contest
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Your response made me feel really happy because you so obviously had put time and thought into your comments. Thanks so very much .
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You are most welcome.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Yes, by all means...rain down upon me--wash me, cleanse me, drown me...
This is a very raw, very spiritually powerful free verse piece of poetic expressionism, Lois.
I wish you the very best of luck in the contest with this...
~Dean
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Yes, by all means...rain down upon me--wash me, cleanse me, drown me...
This is a very raw, very spiritually powerful free verse piece of poetic expressionism, Lois.
I wish you the very best of luck in the contest with this...
~Dean
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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I am always grateful for your response to anything I write. I hope I deserve half of what you wrote. Thank you, Dean
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It was my pleasure, Lois.
Comment from Mark Valentine
"Until the Spirit is poured out upon us from on high, And the wilderness becomes a fertile field, And the fertile field is considered as a forest". Isaiah 32:15. So many of your poems read like beautiful, heartfelt prayers. I've got a collection of them on my fanstory bookshelf. They are as timeless and universal as the psalms (or in this case, as Isaiah). "The air is heavy with promise" - what a great image of the land, just before it rains - an image that lends itself so perfectly to your metaphor.
Like many of your other prayers, I will revisit this one from time to time, and it will lifr my spirit - thank you!
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"Until the Spirit is poured out upon us from on high, And the wilderness becomes a fertile field, And the fertile field is considered as a forest". Isaiah 32:15. So many of your poems read like beautiful, heartfelt prayers. I've got a collection of them on my fanstory bookshelf. They are as timeless and universal as the psalms (or in this case, as Isaiah). "The air is heavy with promise" - what a great image of the land, just before it rains - an image that lends itself so perfectly to your metaphor.
Like many of your other prayers, I will revisit this one from time to time, and it will lifr my spirit - thank you!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
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I need to thank you again for the beautiful way you responded to this one. Sometimes, as with this one, I will keep your comments. Thanks, a Mark.
Comment from Delahay
There is a lot of sorry and hope for some type of relief from one's suffering in this poem. A cry for help or perhaps just an end to pain.
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There is a lot of sorry and hope for some type of relief from one's suffering in this poem. A cry for help or perhaps just an end to pain.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
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An understanding response is a true gift. Thank you.
Comment from Janet7053
When prayer is first, it is enough. When prayer is last, it is enough. I think your first thoughts are so meaningful.
Will I hear its soft tears
falling to pools of saving grace?
So still...
the air heavy with promise.
But promises have been broken.
The image is such a compliment to the poem.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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When prayer is first, it is enough. When prayer is last, it is enough. I think your first thoughts are so meaningful.
Will I hear its soft tears
falling to pools of saving grace?
So still...
the air heavy with promise.
But promises have been broken.
The image is such a compliment to the poem.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Blessings, Janet...and thanks for such kind words.
Comment from krys123
LoannaLois;
-After reading your poem very diligently I thought it meant, metaphorically to me,
that is something related to California's water problem. But after delivering understanding your poem relates to me in the strong desire of truth in one's soul.
One can take your poem literally but metaphorically it's the feverish emotions that bring about a writing that is truly magnificent and masterful.
-"Sometimes... after all's tried... prayer is all." This being an amendment to your poem actually is a good summary of the context and concept of your writing.
"....But promises have been broken...". All of us who pray for one thing or another. Don't always get what we want or nearly close to being what we need.
-I really enjoyed reading your poem and it's very thought-provoking.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
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LoannaLois;
-After reading your poem very diligently I thought it meant, metaphorically to me,
that is something related to California's water problem. But after delivering understanding your poem relates to me in the strong desire of truth in one's soul.
One can take your poem literally but metaphorically it's the feverish emotions that bring about a writing that is truly magnificent and masterful.
-"Sometimes... after all's tried... prayer is all." This being an amendment to your poem actually is a good summary of the context and concept of your writing.
"....But promises have been broken...". All of us who pray for one thing or another. Don't always get what we want or nearly close to being what we need.
-I really enjoyed reading your poem and it's very thought-provoking.
-Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Oh Krys, sometimes I am awed by the time spent in understanding another's words. Thank you for doing just that and bringing a smile to my face.
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You are so sincerely welcome my dear friend
Comment from His Grayness
Very nice work here with deep passion and compelling words to keep the reader reaching for the final curtain of thoughts being so well laid out. The photo is a really powerful addition to gaining the reader's interest and curiosity so it makes a well done total package of interest. HIS GRAYNESS
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Very nice work here with deep passion and compelling words to keep the reader reaching for the final curtain of thoughts being so well laid out. The photo is a really powerful addition to gaining the reader's interest and curiosity so it makes a well done total package of interest. HIS GRAYNESS
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
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I love your name...;0). And I appreciate so very very much such a meaningful response.
Comment from DreamtwithClarity
This was certainly an interesting piece of writing, showing the uniqueness of you as a writer. This work showed me that almost any writing can provide entertainment as well as a real message at the same time. Thank you for composing this original piece and for doing it well. I wish you luck with your other writings.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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This was certainly an interesting piece of writing, showing the uniqueness of you as a writer. This work showed me that almost any writing can provide entertainment as well as a real message at the same time. Thank you for composing this original piece and for doing it well. I wish you luck with your other writings.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Thanks from my heart for your comments...I felt really happy to read what you shared with me.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I enjoyed reading your poem Pour Down. Good rhythm and even flow with excellent word choices and attractive format.
Nicely done!
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I enjoyed reading your poem Pour Down. Good rhythm and even flow with excellent word choices and attractive format.
Nicely done!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reading this and sending the notes!
