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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I enjoyed reading your story, you did a great job developing the characters and the plot; also, I like the attractive format that enhances the story. Good job!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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I enjoyed reading your story, you did a great job developing the characters and the plot; also, I like the attractive format that enhances the story. Good job!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you so much for your review and encouragement. Alexis x
Comment from Walu Feral
Hahahaha! G'day Alexis. That is one of the best, I couldn't stop laughing at Laura's reactions, absolutly hilarious Hahahaha! I think she'd rather Nazdia LOL. Fantastic work mate, definate six material. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Hahahaha! G'day Alexis. That is one of the best, I couldn't stop laughing at Laura's reactions, absolutly hilarious Hahahaha! I think she'd rather Nazdia LOL. Fantastic work mate, definate six material. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Yippee! A six to wake up too. Thank you, pal, you've made my day yet again. Alexis xxx
Comment from Cindy Warren
If she weren't such a pig, I'd almost feel sorry for Mazeija. Being fat might not make her gross, but dressing like a hooker and coming on like a bulldozer sure does. Won't Laura be relieved when she eventually finds out she's not Igor's girlfriend. Will she have the nerve to come back after her encounter with Samantha?
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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If she weren't such a pig, I'd almost feel sorry for Mazeija. Being fat might not make her gross, but dressing like a hooker and coming on like a bulldozer sure does. Won't Laura be relieved when she eventually finds out she's not Igor's girlfriend. Will she have the nerve to come back after her encounter with Samantha?
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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You put that so well, Cindy. You've picked up on the most important part here. Being overweight isn't the real problem, it's the sluttish way Mazeija acts and dresses that's the real problem. I don't think we'll see her again, but remember Laura doesn't know that, so is on a mission! Alexis xxx
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there girlfriend
I liked this chapter. Mazeija is a pure work of crap. I like the idea of introducing a ghost. I can imagine her shrieking out of the joint like a mad woman
Bear
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Hey there girlfriend
I liked this chapter. Mazeija is a pure work of crap. I like the idea of introducing a ghost. I can imagine her shrieking out of the joint like a mad woman
Bear
Comment Written 29-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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I'm glad you enjoyed it, Bear. The ghost get's another shot in today's chapter, but Laura has ideas too! Alexis xxx
Comment from Ulla
It is certainly wrong conclusions and very amusing at that. I am enjoying reading this. Ghosts, fat vulgar woman who shouldn't be there, a mouse who probably shouldn't be there either and and lovely woman who nobody has noticed but Igor. I love it. Please write on, can't wait. Ulla
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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It is certainly wrong conclusions and very amusing at that. I am enjoying reading this. Ghosts, fat vulgar woman who shouldn't be there, a mouse who probably shouldn't be there either and and lovely woman who nobody has noticed but Igor. I love it. Please write on, can't wait. Ulla
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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I've never concentrated on humour so much before, but I must admit I'm enjoying the experience! Thank you, Ulla, for this and all your encouraging reviews. Alexis xxx
Comment from rwilliam
Ohhh, the plot thickens. Hee Hee ( rubs hands wickedly). I am looking forward to seeing how this plays out. You teach me on a regular basis how to write conflict.
Great chapter! You've been on a writing roll lately! Impressed and inspired!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Ohhh, the plot thickens. Hee Hee ( rubs hands wickedly). I am looking forward to seeing how this plays out. You teach me on a regular basis how to write conflict.
Great chapter! You've been on a writing roll lately! Impressed and inspired!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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You are so good for me! Just when I feel my writing's crap, you say something inspiring to keep me going. Thank you! Alexis xxx
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Well, that feeling is a LIE! Your writing is awesome!! You know how to tell a story very well. All that other stuff is the work. NEVER Give up girl! You have a talent!!
Comment from royowen
I love this one, the fact that you've introduced a ghost who really likes Igor, is an unexpected variable to your great series that should bring a few laughs, I Wonder if Samantha will scare Catriona when she sees her! I'm enjoying this inspired new twist in the road, Alexis, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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I love this one, the fact that you've introduced a ghost who really likes Igor, is an unexpected variable to your great series that should bring a few laughs, I Wonder if Samantha will scare Catriona when she sees her! I'm enjoying this inspired new twist in the road, Alexis, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Once I realised everyone wouldn't think I was a nutter because I have some experience of mischievous ghosts, it was easier to write. I hope the holiday has been fab, and you come back totally revived and raring to go. Alexis xxx
Comment from jpduck
I have just realised what your writing sometimes reminds me of -- Brian Rix. You're far too young even to have heard of him, but, in his day he was the master of theatrical farce.
'That vision was nearly as hideous as the thought of them making out in his bedroom upstairs' (A purely personal foible, but I do wish you could use an alterantive to that ghastly American expression, 'making out'. The best thing for you to do would be to ignore me. (!!)
A bit late to mention it perhaps, but it seems strange for a Polish lass to be called Catriona, which is an Irish name. The Polish equivalent is Catarina -- see behindthename.com).
*the phrase 'hell or high water' is not normally preceded with 'by'. I would suggest 'come hell or high water').
One SPAG:
' 'No, she didn't, but Laura decided to think of a way' (Delete opening quote mark).
Adrian
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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I have just realised what your writing sometimes reminds me of -- Brian Rix. You're far too young even to have heard of him, but, in his day he was the master of theatrical farce.
'That vision was nearly as hideous as the thought of them making out in his bedroom upstairs' (A purely personal foible, but I do wish you could use an alterantive to that ghastly American expression, 'making out'. The best thing for you to do would be to ignore me. (!!)
A bit late to mention it perhaps, but it seems strange for a Polish lass to be called Catriona, which is an Irish name. The Polish equivalent is Catarina -- see behindthename.com).
*the phrase 'hell or high water' is not normally preceded with 'by'. I would suggest 'come hell or high water').
One SPAG:
' 'No, she didn't, but Laura decided to think of a way' (Delete opening quote mark).
Adrian
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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I remember Brian Rix! He was one of my dad's favourites too, so we used to watch him together.
All great suggestions as usual, Adrian. I meant to do my usual and check out the Polish derivative, but didn't get round it it. She is now called Catarina! I will try to think of a better phrase than 'making out', but I fear the only alternative is 'having it off' What do you think?
Thank you again for your help and eagle eye.
Alexis xxx
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I just feel anything is preferable to 'making out' -- it is so mealy-mouthed and euphamistic. By all means 'having it off' -- or screwing, shagging, banging, bonking ... Oh dear, is my mis-spent youth showing?
Adrian
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Lol, all terminologies I've used myself in the past. Having it off, it is!
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! This is the stuff of sitcoms like the old Three's Company, where a misunderstanding leads to all sorts of mischief. What fun! Glad I have a six left for this chapter. :)
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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LOL! This is the stuff of sitcoms like the old Three's Company, where a misunderstanding leads to all sorts of mischief. What fun! Glad I have a six left for this chapter. :)
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Phyllis. I'm delighted that you enjoyed it enough to give it a six. I'm in a 'fun' writing mode at the moment, so enjoyed putting this one together. Alexis xxx
Comment from barkingdog
And the plot thickens. LOL
You have a grand comedy going here with Laura thinking Igor is smitten with his cousin.
It should be interesting when she attempts haunting Mazeija. Maybe Samantha will help since she likes Igor and surely can want horrid Maseija around.
:) e
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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And the plot thickens. LOL
You have a grand comedy going here with Laura thinking Igor is smitten with his cousin.
It should be interesting when she attempts haunting Mazeija. Maybe Samantha will help since she likes Igor and surely can want horrid Maseija around.
:) e
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Yes, I think a real ghost will do a much better job, as the previous chapter proves! Thank you so much for your review. Alexis xxx
