Living your Faith
A young man inspires classmates.13 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I enjoyed reading your story, you did a great job developing the characters and the plot; also, I like the attractive format that enhanced the story. Good job!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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I enjoyed reading your story, you did a great job developing the characters and the plot; also, I like the attractive format that enhanced the story. Good job!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Thanks for the comments.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is a beautiful story, danpald, a wonderful message of your brother's faithfulness. how amazing that his rosary is left to share his faith with others. I would love to hear his story in a poem.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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this is a beautiful story, danpald, a wonderful message of your brother's faithfulness. how amazing that his rosary is left to share his faith with others. I would love to hear his story in a poem.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Thanks for the comments. I should have done it in a poem since that is more my style.
Comment from Dean Kuch
That's quite a story, Anonymous Author, made even more tragic in many ways because it is a true one. But sometimes, truth is stranger than fiction and faith is much stronger than death. Your brother's story is proof of that fact.
1 Corinthians 15:55--O death, where is thy sting? O grave, where is thy victory?
Great story. Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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That's quite a story, Anonymous Author, made even more tragic in many ways because it is a true one. But sometimes, truth is stranger than fiction and faith is much stronger than death. Your brother's story is proof of that fact.
1 Corinthians 15:55--O death, where is thy sting? O grave, where is thy victory?
Great story. Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Thanks for the comments.
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Anytime, Dan.
Comment from Ben Colder
One thing about God. He honors faith no matter how it may be channeled. Sad thing losing this young man to stupidity. I shall vote for this piece.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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One thing about God. He honors faith no matter how it may be channeled. Sad thing losing this young man to stupidity. I shall vote for this piece.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Thanks for the comments and the vote.
Comment from flylikeaneagle
What a a great story of faith for students to witness. In the schools, God is pushed out. I'm a mom who walks dogs and prays for the youth. Look at the MomsInPrayers web site for prayers. Very good witness to others about Jesus and his life. The Catholics are great church goers and shining lights for others. I teach youth about Jesus. Great entry! God bless! flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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What a a great story of faith for students to witness. In the schools, God is pushed out. I'm a mom who walks dogs and prays for the youth. Look at the MomsInPrayers web site for prayers. Very good witness to others about Jesus and his life. The Catholics are great church goers and shining lights for others. I teach youth about Jesus. Great entry! God bless! flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the comments.
Comment from dmt1967
This is a sad story. I respect his faith, but sometimes think it is very unfair. A young man who is pure of heart gets into an accident with a drunk driver. The drunk walks away, the boy dies. There is something wrong with this picture. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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This is a sad story. I respect his faith, but sometimes think it is very unfair. A young man who is pure of heart gets into an accident with a drunk driver. The drunk walks away, the boy dies. There is something wrong with this picture. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Thanks for the comment. Yes it is a sad picture but also gives comfort in knowing one lives ready to die. Most of us live but are not so ready and that creates fear in place of peace.
Comment from Jean Lutz
Great are the mysteries of faith. One of the mysteries is the love of God. The young man was ready to meet his maker -- the drunk driver probably was not and his life was spared, giving another chance. Beautiful story. Thank you for sharing it. Best to you with the entry.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Great are the mysteries of faith. One of the mysteries is the love of God. The young man was ready to meet his maker -- the drunk driver probably was not and his life was spared, giving another chance. Beautiful story. Thank you for sharing it. Best to you with the entry.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the comments.
Comment from TPAC
First sadden by loss, I feel the writer in this work captures the reader attention well in this story giving them a smooth course pathway they can fully enjoy writer conveyed thoughts Good expression
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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First sadden by loss, I feel the writer in this work captures the reader attention well in this story giving them a smooth course pathway they can fully enjoy writer conveyed thoughts Good expression
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Thanks for the comments.
Comment from Eric1
Hi Mystery author, this is an excellent entry for this particular competition.
You need to do a bit of editing on this paragraph though -
The friends come out and look at the accident many crying. Among the car there are things found is clear but the rosary is nowhere to be seen. The classmates cannot understand and begin to search around. Then open in a telephone pole the Rosary was found. It was open like on display for all too see. It is clear that this young man was praying when the truck hit him and the Rosary flew impacted into the pole. The testimony of Faith again given to his classmates made so bold.
If you read it carefully it doesn't make sense, otherwise this story is brilliant!
I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Hi Mystery author, this is an excellent entry for this particular competition.
You need to do a bit of editing on this paragraph though -
The friends come out and look at the accident many crying. Among the car there are things found is clear but the rosary is nowhere to be seen. The classmates cannot understand and begin to search around. Then open in a telephone pole the Rosary was found. It was open like on display for all too see. It is clear that this young man was praying when the truck hit him and the Rosary flew impacted into the pole. The testimony of Faith again given to his classmates made so bold.
If you read it carefully it doesn't make sense, otherwise this story is brilliant!
I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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I wanted to correct this but the contest voting started and it is too late. I am more a poet and the lines came out with that reality instead of prose.
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Oh I see, don't worry too much about it though my friend.
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I did some corrections on this paragraph because I do see the problems when i re-read it. Thank you.
Comment from royowen
I love this testimony that you've brought to the table in this contest, faith that shines even after death can be be an extremely powerful testimony. I think the syntax is a little rocky in places and needs a little reworking, but otherwise a most enjoyable read! well done, Good luck in the contest. blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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I love this testimony that you've brought to the table in this contest, faith that shines even after death can be be an extremely powerful testimony. I think the syntax is a little rocky in places and needs a little reworking, but otherwise a most enjoyable read! well done, Good luck in the contest. blessings, Roy
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Thanks for the comments. I mostly write poems and that comes across in places.
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Well done
