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Comment from pbomar1115
That sound like a lost crazy world where nutty things go on like double-crossing someone over something that makes a person crazy. Also, there is no hopeful out come other the imaginative way your poem showed. I love the creative way your poem was written and the story that crisped to the point. I could imagine whatever else included. You gave me plenty to use here. Great poem.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
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That sound like a lost crazy world where nutty things go on like double-crossing someone over something that makes a person crazy. Also, there is no hopeful out come other the imaginative way your poem showed. I love the creative way your poem was written and the story that crisped to the point. I could imagine whatever else included. You gave me plenty to use here. Great poem.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
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Thank you, p, for the excellent review. Bill
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You're welcome.
Comment from Domino 2
I hope they're NOT in my supermarket meat pie. ;-)
Very off the wall and dark humour, which I like, fun and original write, Bill.
Clever and different rhyme scheme which works a treat.
Very entertaining - except for the victims. ;-)
Happy New Year, Ray.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
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I hope they're NOT in my supermarket meat pie. ;-)
Very off the wall and dark humour, which I like, fun and original write, Bill.
Clever and different rhyme scheme which works a treat.
Very entertaining - except for the victims. ;-)
Happy New Year, Ray.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2015
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2015
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Thank you, Ray, for giving this a look. Happy New Year to you as well. Bill
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, Bill I get the biggest charge out of this poem. It's your usual excellent meter, with an uproarious story, Needle the Narc is hilarious as are all the names.
I'm still chuckling at the naughty tone. *wink*
Gloria
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Ha, Bill I get the biggest charge out of this poem. It's your usual excellent meter, with an uproarious story, Needle the Narc is hilarious as are all the names.
I'm still chuckling at the naughty tone. *wink*
Gloria
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Gloria, for the terrific review. Bill
Comment from petalangela
Oh wow. What a thought provoking way to look at murder
I future I will only give my pets meat that I have bought for human consumption
This is a vivid poem that that leaves the reader wondering if just maybe.......
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Oh wow. What a thought provoking way to look at murder
I future I will only give my pets meat that I have bought for human consumption
This is a vivid poem that that leaves the reader wondering if just maybe.......
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Petal, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from dmt1967
Is this poem based on Bonnie and Clyde? It sounds a bit like them robbing banks or something like that. This poem was very well written and I liked the poem very much. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Is this poem based on Bonnie and Clyde? It sounds a bit like them robbing banks or something like that. This poem was very well written and I liked the poem very much. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Hit men looking for a drug informant. Prostitute is collateral damage. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Ginnygray
Very descriptive writing about the murder of two people, a prostitute and a john. Sin D and the punk ended up as dog food. Very vivid story of the underworld.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Very descriptive writing about the murder of two people, a prostitute and a john. Sin D and the punk ended up as dog food. Very vivid story of the underworld.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Ginny, for the excellent review. Bill
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:) have a great week and 4th
Comment from robina1978
Good photo that complements your poem perfectly. I liked the story: two guys go for the same girl. John got shot. I lost count of how many got killed and made into horse meat.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Good photo that complements your poem perfectly. I liked the story: two guys go for the same girl. John got shot. I lost count of how many got killed and made into horse meat.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Ine, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from inside echo
ummm, lol, ew gross.. The last line mixed with the picture of dog food slams home what happened to these men. Their death.. they were heading for anyway, but to end up in a can of dog food.... You have quite the imagination there Bill.
Well done, lol, I think... Thank you for sharing.
tgc
echo
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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ummm, lol, ew gross.. The last line mixed with the picture of dog food slams home what happened to these men. Their death.. they were heading for anyway, but to end up in a can of dog food.... You have quite the imagination there Bill.
Well done, lol, I think... Thank you for sharing.
tgc
echo
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Thank you for giving this a look. Bill
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I will anything creative. This showed the incredible imagination you have. I am glad you wrote it.
echo
Comment from Curly Girly
This poem reads like a tale of horror. It would have been best saved for a contest entry. One has to wonder if things like this ever happened in the past. It's not likely these days, as they do random testing.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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This poem reads like a tale of horror. It would have been best saved for a contest entry. One has to wonder if things like this ever happened in the past. It's not likely these days, as they do random testing.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Thank you.
Comment from Linda Kay
I really like the contrast in this poem of the light simple rhyme and alliteration mixed with rougher language and subject matter. Very entertaining to read.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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I really like the contrast in this poem of the light simple rhyme and alliteration mixed with rougher language and subject matter. Very entertaining to read.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Linda, for the excellent review. Bill
