A New Beginning
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I enjoyed reading your story, you did a great job developing the characters and the plot; also, I like the attractive format that enhanced the story. Good job!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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I enjoyed reading your story, you did a great job developing the characters and the plot; also, I like the attractive format that enhanced the story. Good job!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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I'm delighted that you enjoyed it, thank you! Alexis x
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Alexis. Hahaha! Cikey! I see what you mean about that image, yuck! What a brilliant chapter this is mate. This is just so funny, some of the images of the giant fat thing are a bit rough on my old heart but I loved it.
"The arrival of a woman who resembled a female Shrek was a different matter," Hahaha! That's hilarious, great line.
Great work my friend, no spag. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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G'day Alexis. Hahaha! Cikey! I see what you mean about that image, yuck! What a brilliant chapter this is mate. This is just so funny, some of the images of the giant fat thing are a bit rough on my old heart but I loved it.
"The arrival of a woman who resembled a female Shrek was a different matter," Hahaha! That's hilarious, great line.
Great work my friend, no spag. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Lol, I chickened out and replaced it with another image! Thank you for the wonderful sixer, Fez. You made my day! Alexis xxx
Comment from Annette Gulliver
My goodness, Mazeija is one big girl!! Love the photo ... That was a funny chapter, Alexis. Samantha is having a great time scaring Igor's visitor away. Igor will get a shock when he sees his step cousin heading for him in the bar. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Annette
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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My goodness, Mazeija is one big girl!! Love the photo ... That was a funny chapter, Alexis. Samantha is having a great time scaring Igor's visitor away. Igor will get a shock when he sees his step cousin heading for him in the bar. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Annette
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Lol, I changed it yesterday because, although it represented the character Mazeija perfectly, it was a bit gross! Thank you for your continued support. Alexis xxx
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! That photo is perfect! I love that she ran down the hall BEFORE getting her dress on. Catriona sounds like the answer to Igor's loneliness. Perhaps he won't need mice now and the restaurant will be safe! :)
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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LOL! That photo is perfect! I love that she ran down the hall BEFORE getting her dress on. Catriona sounds like the answer to Igor's loneliness. Perhaps he won't need mice now and the restaurant will be safe! :)
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Yes, it represented the image I had of Mazeija in my mind's eye perfectly. I thought it was about time Igor got a 'real' woman, so his friendship with the mouse could take a backburner! Alexis xxx
Comment from rwilliam
WHOA! That picture. You sure have me interested in this chapter. Off to read.
Her turquoise dress only reached half way down her corpulent thighs, and clung to Mazeija's ample frame like a sausage skin about to explode.--EXCELLENT descriptive sentence!! Great writing.:-)
Everyone who was walking through to the bar from the dining room, after they'd finished their meal, started to snigger when they caught sight of her.--Just a thought but I don't think you need the part ' after they'd finished their meal', that's implied with them going from the dining room to the bar. :)
BRAVO! Another amazing and FUNNY chapter. You are doing a great job! ( round of applause) :-D
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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WHOA! That picture. You sure have me interested in this chapter. Off to read.
Her turquoise dress only reached half way down her corpulent thighs, and clung to Mazeija's ample frame like a sausage skin about to explode.--EXCELLENT descriptive sentence!! Great writing.:-)
Everyone who was walking through to the bar from the dining room, after they'd finished their meal, started to snigger when they caught sight of her.--Just a thought but I don't think you need the part ' after they'd finished their meal', that's implied with them going from the dining room to the bar. :)
BRAVO! Another amazing and FUNNY chapter. You are doing a great job! ( round of applause) :-D
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Lol, it represented the image I had of Mazeija in my mind's eye perfectly. I've taken out the 'after they finished their meal' bit. Thank you for pointing it out. Sooooo glad you enjoyed it, and you felt it worthy of a six! Alexis xxx
Comment from MelB
I'm glad Nadzia was not a problem in the room. I had a feeling the next guest would not be welcome. Unfortunately, I was able to see more of Mazejia in my mind than I would have liked. I'm glad Igor didn't see her, as I think he would have been embarrassed. Can't wait to see what happens next!
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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I'm glad Nadzia was not a problem in the room. I had a feeling the next guest would not be welcome. Unfortunately, I was able to see more of Mazejia in my mind than I would have liked. I'm glad Igor didn't see her, as I think he would have been embarrassed. Can't wait to see what happens next!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Yes, the image was a bit gross, but it managed to show readers exactly what I imagined in my mind's eye. Not a pretty sight! Alexis xxx
Comment from Cindy Warren
Well, I'd say Samantha did him a favor. Finding her in his bed in nothing but a g-string would be much scarier than a ghost! As long as he doesn't bring Catronia to his room, he should be OK.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Well, I'd say Samantha did him a favor. Finding her in his bed in nothing but a g-string would be much scarier than a ghost! As long as he doesn't bring Catronia to his room, he should be OK.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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So true! I needed to get Mazeija out of the picture, so Samantha came in handy! As to bringing Catriona back to his room, that could be complicated for lots of reasons. Alexis xxx
Comment from G.B. Smith
Two seconds later, Mazeija jumped from the bed, grabbed her discarded dress, and shot out the door. She then ran down the passageway screaming, her pendulous breasts almost wrapped around her neck.
OH MY HECK, I damn near fell of my chair. The artwork is horrid and the thoughts of her tits flapping in the wind just did me in. Great story
Bear
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Two seconds later, Mazeija jumped from the bed, grabbed her discarded dress, and shot out the door. She then ran down the passageway screaming, her pendulous breasts almost wrapped around her neck.
OH MY HECK, I damn near fell of my chair. The artwork is horrid and the thoughts of her tits flapping in the wind just did me in. Great story
Bear
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Yes, the image is a bit gross, but it certainly describes Mazeija to a tee. I'm so glad it gave you a laugh, Bear. That's the best praise you could give me because writing comedy is one of the things I love doing. Alexis xxx
Comment from Curly Girly
This is such and enjoyable, fun chapter to read. I am sorry that my special star bucket has run dry. Poor Igor. This was not a good night for his step-sister to turn up. Fantastic dress description!
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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This is such and enjoyable, fun chapter to read. I am sorry that my special star bucket has run dry. Poor Igor. This was not a good night for his step-sister to turn up. Fantastic dress description!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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No matter about the stars, Nicole. Your praise is the thing I crave most. I'm so glad you enjoyed this bit of silliness. It was certainly fun to write, especially after I found that picture! Alexis xxx
Comment from Spitfire
What a fun read. Hopefully, the woman who posed for the photo is heavily padded. Love the ghost's successful attempt to get her out of the room. (They do love to play with electricity!) Picturing Maze on the bed--not pretty!
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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What a fun read. Hopefully, the woman who posed for the photo is heavily padded. Love the ghost's successful attempt to get her out of the room. (They do love to play with electricity!) Picturing Maze on the bed--not pretty!
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Sadly, I don't think there's any padding involved. This lady is big, bold, and believes she's just as sexy as a skinny bird. As they say 'each to their own!' Alexis x
