The Change
Undelivered Father's Day card60 total reviews
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Can totally relate to this little tale of yours about not having Father and feeling different from other kids because of it. Takes a lot to overcome what your story says you did and to treat an "absent father" much better than he ever treated you.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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Can totally relate to this little tale of yours about not having Father and feeling different from other kids because of it. Takes a lot to overcome what your story says you did and to treat an "absent father" much better than he ever treated you.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Brett, for your kind review. My father was absent for much of my life, but I was present at a moment he needed me most. Thanks for your review.
Comment from mfowler
Your story is very moving because it clearly comes from the heart, a heart which has had to adjust to the reality of a father wjho wasn't there, who needed you to be there for him. You are right, you did act better than him, and in so doing became a better person, I would imagine. It's acts of love like that which seems most about the other that give the most to the giver. Well written and I'm sure a story that will be well received by anyone who's been in similar circumstances.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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Your story is very moving because it clearly comes from the heart, a heart which has had to adjust to the reality of a father wjho wasn't there, who needed you to be there for him. You are right, you did act better than him, and in so doing became a better person, I would imagine. It's acts of love like that which seems most about the other that give the most to the giver. Well written and I'm sure a story that will be well received by anyone who's been in similar circumstances.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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Yes, mfowler, my story has been well received by reviewers who have been in similar circumstances. I am moved to hear other people's Father Day stories and poems this week. Thanks for your review.
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting post that the author has created with this piece of work. I miss my father, especially in Father's Day. I miss his good humour and stories.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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This is an interesting post that the author has created with this piece of work. I miss my father, especially in Father's Day. I miss his good humour and stories.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Tomes, for your kind, six star review. I created my story a year before I found in my mother's storage unit an undelivered Father's Day card I created for him. I intuited that he never received the cards and gifts I made him. My discovery confirmed my intuition.
Yes, Father's Day can be hard because we remember the good humour and stories our fathers told. Thank you for reviewing.
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Indeed. Take care.
Comment from jmdg1954
This was written from the heart. Each and every word had meaning to your story of a son forgiving his deserted father. Not wanting to be like him, the son actually became a better person.
Very enjoyable reading... John
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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This was written from the heart. Each and every word had meaning to your story of a son forgiving his deserted father. Not wanting to be like him, the son actually became a better person.
Very enjoyable reading... John
Comment Written 21-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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Thank you, John, for your heartfelt, six star review. Yes, I became a better person.
Comment from Autumn Splendour
This is a beautiful story about a daughter's ability to forgive an absentee father who does not deserve her forgiveness. Yes, we can't change a person but we can change ourselves and attain peace when we are willing to forgive and let go. In this story you not only forgave but even change to treat your father "better than he treated (you)"
The story is told in a matter-of-fact manner which makes the father daughter relationship so captivating. Lovely, and thanks for sharing. The language works well with the image.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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This is a beautiful story about a daughter's ability to forgive an absentee father who does not deserve her forgiveness. Yes, we can't change a person but we can change ourselves and attain peace when we are willing to forgive and let go. In this story you not only forgave but even change to treat your father "better than he treated (you)"
The story is told in a matter-of-fact manner which makes the father daughter relationship so captivating. Lovely, and thanks for sharing. The language works well with the image.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Autumn Splendour, for your kind review. A year ago I created my story which I performed live from memory in front of audiences. This accounts for its matter-of-fact tone. I created my story on the hunch that my Father's Day cards and gifts were not delivered. Last month, I confirmed my suspicions when I found in my mother's storage unit an undelivered Father's Card I made when I was ten. I used this image to illustrate my story. Thanks for your review.
Comment from jpduck
Beautifully told. Thank you.
"I just wish my father was here to see me receive this award." (Insert a blank line after this to mark the new paragraph).
Adrian
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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Beautifully told. Thank you.
"I just wish my father was here to see me receive this award." (Insert a blank line after this to mark the new paragraph).
Adrian
Comment Written 21-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Adrian, for your review and suggestion. I will add the blank line.
Comment from Gunner Lil
An outstanding story. An easy read and one that makes the reader wanting
to read on. It also makes you think about the prior events to the divorce. Why
weren't those cards ever mailed?
Thank you for a great story. Happy Father's Day.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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An outstanding story. An easy read and one that makes the reader wanting
to read on. It also makes you think about the prior events to the divorce. Why
weren't those cards ever mailed?
Thank you for a great story. Happy Father's Day.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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Gunner Lil, my mother probably did not mail the Father's Day cards because she engaged my father in a custody battle over their children. He wanted the children partly to avoid paying child support. She wanted the children and child support. I do not know if this is true, but my mother denied him visitation. He, in turn, denied child support. He hired a lawyer. She could not afford one. During this period of lawyers and courts, I had an intuition that Mom did not mail Dad my cards and gifts. I wrote "The Change" in 2014 on this hunch. Last month I found in my mother's storage unit an undelivered Father's Day card I made when I was ten. I was surprised but not surprised because I already knew in my heart.
Now that both of my parents are dead, I have both of their diaries, letters, and poems detailing what happened before the divorce. I will write about that.
Thank you for your review.
Comment from kiwijenny
This is a great piece of writing...I should say peace of writing
Well penned for your heart. I enjoyed this..and appreciated it
Especially your decision to treat him better than you were treated
God bless
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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This is a great piece of writing...I should say peace of writing
Well penned for your heart. I enjoyed this..and appreciated it
Especially your decision to treat him better than you were treated
God bless
Comment Written 21-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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Yes, kiwijenny, "peace of writing." I decided to treat him better than he treated me. Thanks for your review. God bless you, too.
Comment from Eric1
Hi Sis, this was in it's own quiet wa a heart rending story, beautifully written and presented, telling of a life with a father you hardly knew.
But that momentous moment when you realised you would change your attitude toward him must have been brilliant.
The fact that you cried when told of your award just goes to show that you are a warmhearted human being.
Thanks for sharing on Fathers day my friend.
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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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Hi Sis, this was in it's own quiet wa a heart rending story, beautifully written and presented, telling of a life with a father you hardly knew.
But that momentous moment when you realised you would change your attitude toward him must have been brilliant.
The fact that you cried when told of your award just goes to show that you are a warmhearted human being.
Thanks for sharing on Fathers day my friend.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Eric1, for your kind review. My father's loss hit me when I was given the biggest award of my life and I realized he would not see me receive it. I am glad I shared our story with you on Father's Day.
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So am I Sis.
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day mate. Congraulations on the award and congratulations on this story. Two wrongs don't make a right and you have proven that. It takes a stronger person to forgive than it does to walk off angry. You are a great man. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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G'day mate. Congraulations on the award and congratulations on this story. Two wrongs don't make a right and you have proven that. It takes a stronger person to forgive than it does to walk off angry. You are a great man. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 21-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Fez, for your generous, six star review. Yes, it takes a stronger person to forgive than it does to walk off angry. Cheers.
