Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Dean...

_ I like this coming from the little girl's pov and age appropriate verbiage.
_ Bobby should have listened to Jenny though.
_ I mean, you know, you can tell a man/boy something, but that doesn't mean they'll pay a lady/girl any never-you-mind! LOL!

Suggestion...
>>> You might want to consider 'wiv' for 'wive.' The 'e' at the end made me pronounce the 'long i.'
- monster man wive down there

_ As always, a great read.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2015

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

Ozzy himself is a weird bird, and for me, just listening to his music doesn't need a cellar or stairs to the monster beneath to give me the willies. But I must add, that together, it makes for a strange place. Great job. :-)

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015

Ha-ha, he's just a burned-out old rocker is all, Ric. I for one really like his music. But of course, I would, right?
Much obliged for the review, buddy. :)
~Dean

reply by Ric Myworld on 18-Jun-2015

I liked Ozzy in the early days, too. I watched him twice at Tampa Stadium, right after Alice Copper littered the place with blood and thousands of baby body parts, and the band, Led Zeppelin, set the newest stadium attendance record, beating out the Beatles at Shea Stadium. People lined the road ten and twelve wide for two weeks before the concert. Then the stoned idiots tried to climb the Tampa-Stadium walls on Dale Mabry Highway (Since demolished), by making human ladders. They collapsed with many injuries. Shh, but please, don't tell anyone that I spent good money to watch bat eating, baby slaughtering, and heads-rolling-from-guillotines rockers, and wore headbands, zodiac belt buckles, with braided hair below my shoulder blades. They were really fun times, at least the ones I can remember. :-)

Comment from Patrick G Cox

Excellent

Hi Dean,

Very creepy and rather nasty tale of horror. Spotted a couple of corrections for you -
man wive down - wives (as in lives)?

the ciminally insane. - criminally

Patrick

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015

Yeah, the "wives" is on purpose, Patrick, for "lives". Jenny's four-years-old, and says all of her L's like W's. "Cewar Stares", remember, lol?

I tried to make it sound like a little child without being too distracting. I'd hoped her saying, "Him's name is Cewar Stares..." would clue readers into that.

Anyhow, thanks a bunch for the review I appreciate it. :}
~Dean

reply by Patrick G Cox on 18-Jun-2015

I rather enjoyed the little girl's 'w' for 'L' and I got the drift with Cewar Stares. She'd obviously met the killer when he went down there ...

Patrick

reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015

Or, perhaps young Jenny went down there to play (you know how kids are), and he confronted her. You know, one 'a those "S-h-h-h-h-h-h...tell anyone I'm here, and I'll get you." kind of things?

Thanks again, Patrick. :}

Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This is yet another excellent and chilling story that the author has created with this piece of work. I just love these grisly tales and the music at the end was a treat. Well done yet again.

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 Comment Written 18-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015

Thanks, Tomes, and me, along with all of the other great authors who've gotten involved with this book, certainly appreciate your continued interest and support.
Thanks again...~Dean

reply by Tomes Johnston on 18-Jun-2015

Another great read. Well done.

Comment from justafan

Excellent

Maybe then, Bobby would have heard him...coffin. Ohhh you got jokes...lmao. Short and scary, well done Dean. I know who to call on if I ever need to go into a basement. :)

Always your fan,
Missy

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 Comment Written 18-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015

Hee-hee, yep, just call on me, Missy, but never call on Bobby. Besides, I heard Bobby went all to pieces over the whole situation anyhow.
Thanks so much for your review, as always. :}
~Dean

reply by justafan on 18-Jun-2015

Bwahahahaha