Tiny Tales of Terror
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "The Cellar Stares"Multi-authored book of flash/micro horror fiction
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Comment from barkingdog
Heard him coffin. That's a good one, Dean.
I love widdle Jenny's dialogue. When do big brother's ever listen to little sister's? Bobby should have.
Your descriptions--elongated shadows and ebony nothingness-- foreshadow the inevitable murders.
I keep learning from you in how to set apart two related scenes. The scene at the house and the report on the radio. Use different fonts.
The site should just automatically give you all sixes. I hate it when I don't have enough.
:) ellen
Oh, Oh. I almost forgot-- Have a wonderful Father's Day Weekend.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Heard him coffin. That's a good one, Dean.
I love widdle Jenny's dialogue. When do big brother's ever listen to little sister's? Bobby should have.
Your descriptions--elongated shadows and ebony nothingness-- foreshadow the inevitable murders.
I keep learning from you in how to set apart two related scenes. The scene at the house and the report on the radio. Use different fonts.
The site should just automatically give you all sixes. I hate it when I don't have enough.
:) ellen
Oh, Oh. I almost forgot-- Have a wonderful Father's Day Weekend.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Aw, thanks for the Father's Day wishes, Ellen. That was very kind.
No worries, my friend. Hardly anyone has any sixes to award anybody this late in the week. Heck, I ran out on Tuesday! They only give us six of 'em, you know? I just appreciate you taking the time to read it, and I hope you were entertainined, that's all.
Thanks again...~Dean :}
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It would be nice to have at least one for every day of the week. SEVEN
I saved one and gave it to Jay, yesterday.
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
OHOHOH
basement takes on a whole new aspect.
Very well done and a great chapter.
Love the last part of the announcement.
More please
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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OHOHOH
basement takes on a whole new aspect.
Very well done and a great chapter.
Love the last part of the announcement.
More please
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Thanks, barb. This was inspired by one of those old Tales From the Crypt, EC comics from the 50's. Only that story, a deranged killer was on the loose during Christmas wearing a Santa suit he'd murdered a Salvation Army volunteer for. I appreciate you taking the time to read it.
~Dean :)
Comment from sharonmealler
You are sick and twisted and I love it! Great reading. I saw (or think I saw) one tiny error. he escaped from the Monroe Psychiatric Institute for the ciminally insane. Should that have been criminally insane? Anyway, keep it up and I'll keep looking under my bed.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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You are sick and twisted and I love it! Great reading. I saw (or think I saw) one tiny error. he escaped from the Monroe Psychiatric Institute for the ciminally insane. Should that have been criminally insane? Anyway, keep it up and I'll keep looking under my bed.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Yes, it certainly should, Sharon. Geez Louise, you would think that with all of the editing, writing and reviewing I do, I'd be able to keep from making those stupid mistakes. Thank you for pointing that out, and I'll get on it straight away.
~Dean :}
Comment from country ranch writer
what a terrible tale you ghoul! right up your alley poor little girl who she too is no more thanks to the killer in the Cewar
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what a terrible tale you ghoul! right up your alley poor little girl who she too is no more thanks to the killer in the Cewar
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
Comment from CD Richards
Brings back memories of The People Under the Stairs - "But I want to hurt her". Well done, Dean - Ozzy was a nice touch :)
Craig
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Brings back memories of The People Under the Stairs - "But I want to hurt her". Well done, Dean - Ozzy was a nice touch :)
Craig
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
Comment from Sasha
Aside from being terrified of being buried alive, you couldn't pay me to go down into a dark basement...had one in our neighbor's house and someone was murdered there...they never caught the killer either. Made for some really scary fireside stories too. Great work with this one. Brought back a few not so fond memories too.
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Aside from being terrified of being buried alive, you couldn't pay me to go down into a dark basement...had one in our neighbor's house and someone was murdered there...they never caught the killer either. Made for some really scary fireside stories too. Great work with this one. Brought back a few not so fond memories too.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Perfect song for this spooky chapter. Yep, I love the slang you use, gives it an authentic feel... I bet you would make a damn good spider, way you capture creatures in your web. Excuse me for a minute, matey, I'm rocking to Ozzy! Wow! Did that picture just move or am I seeing things? I thought I was losing my eyesight for a minutes, eyes playing tricks on the wackster, not cool. This is short but to the point. I can even read this, moron, I am. Hehehe-- the picture rocks and your signature! A virtual six is all I got. A thief broke in and took me sixers? Spok-a-doo -- Boo!!
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Perfect song for this spooky chapter. Yep, I love the slang you use, gives it an authentic feel... I bet you would make a damn good spider, way you capture creatures in your web. Excuse me for a minute, matey, I'm rocking to Ozzy! Wow! Did that picture just move or am I seeing things? I thought I was losing my eyesight for a minutes, eyes playing tricks on the wackster, not cool. This is short but to the point. I can even read this, moron, I am. Hehehe-- the picture rocks and your signature! A virtual six is all I got. A thief broke in and took me sixers? Spok-a-doo -- Boo!!
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I have often wondered why people in scary movies go in the basement or the garage. Even I know that's not good. LOL Once again you did a stellar job of writing.
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I have often wondered why people in scary movies go in the basement or the garage. Even I know that's not good. LOL Once again you did a stellar job of writing.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
Comment from TAB_that's me
hum ... listening to to Ozzy osborne was the first scary part - lol. I guess one should listen more to the 4 year olds. Good chapter to the book.
teresa
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hum ... listening to to Ozzy osborne was the first scary part - lol. I guess one should listen more to the 4 year olds. Good chapter to the book.
teresa
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
Comment from rspoet
When those "cewar stares" stare back at you, it's time to run. Or better yet, but a house without a "cewar".
A fine creaky tale from the ebony fields of beyond nothingness
I wonder how many young people even know what a transistor radio is. I must be getting old, probably because I never went down those cellar stairs into that blackness. Nope, not for me.
Bloodbath in Paradise, by Ozzy; if you heard it jangling in an old farmhouse, don't stop, not even for a second!
Well done, like a good roast.
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When those "cewar stares" stare back at you, it's time to run. Or better yet, but a house without a "cewar".
A fine creaky tale from the ebony fields of beyond nothingness
I wonder how many young people even know what a transistor radio is. I must be getting old, probably because I never went down those cellar stairs into that blackness. Nope, not for me.
Bloodbath in Paradise, by Ozzy; if you heard it jangling in an old farmhouse, don't stop, not even for a second!
Well done, like a good roast.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
