When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "Nailing My Coffin "A family's love is tested.
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Comment from Eigle Rull
Wow! I've always loved that part of Flashdance, where she did her dance. It was really sexy!
This chapter was well written and excellent. It was interesting listening to you and your daughter's conversation over the phone. Sounds like she's a bit closed minded. This chapter held my attention well because of the emotions I could feel from both of you. It was very good, my friend.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Wow! I've always loved that part of Flashdance, where she did her dance. It was really sexy!
This chapter was well written and excellent. It was interesting listening to you and your daughter's conversation over the phone. Sounds like she's a bit closed minded. This chapter held my attention well because of the emotions I could feel from both of you. It was very good, my friend.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Thanks, Eigle for reading and for watching the video too. It's one of my favorites. At 31, Nichole still had much to learn about people's feelings.
Comment from His Grayness
Well of course this deserves six stars and my last one evaporated several days ago but I could not miss reading this and responding to it's brilliant author with glee and admiration beyond description! First, I'm curious if this is all an imaginary story or whether these things are REALLY happening in your life? I missed earlier versions of this so I'm a bit confused but nonetheless highly entertained. If it is real, it's a compelling situation to be sure! If it's imagined, it is brilliantly contrived (which from the mind of the one and only 'SPITFIRE" is no surprise! The dance flick was a really delivery of energy and near disbelief so, overall, this was a real TRIP which I truly enjoyed but hope it is "imagined" Vance
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Well of course this deserves six stars and my last one evaporated several days ago but I could not miss reading this and responding to it's brilliant author with glee and admiration beyond description! First, I'm curious if this is all an imaginary story or whether these things are REALLY happening in your life? I missed earlier versions of this so I'm a bit confused but nonetheless highly entertained. If it is real, it's a compelling situation to be sure! If it's imagined, it is brilliantly contrived (which from the mind of the one and only 'SPITFIRE" is no surprise! The dance flick was a really delivery of energy and near disbelief so, overall, this was a real TRIP which I truly enjoyed but hope it is "imagined" Vance
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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It's all for real, Vance. Still, it pales in comparison to something that happens soon. Fortunately, it's not connected to Nichole, but rather to my two sisters and fat Aunt.
Comment from barkingdog
I clear my throat to say... you should have listened to your mother. You needed time to cool down. You may still have said something, but maybe not.
What's done was done.
Weddings are always stressful. I think that's why many just go to Vegas.
You certainly know how to write the tension into a story. I feel the chill between you and Nichole.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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I clear my throat to say... you should have listened to your mother. You needed time to cool down. You may still have said something, but maybe not.
What's done was done.
Weddings are always stressful. I think that's why many just go to Vegas.
You certainly know how to write the tension into a story. I feel the chill between you and Nichole.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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What a great compliment, Ellen. I have learned since to write a letter and then tear it up. :-)
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I still tend to boil over at times, but try for a cool down period.
I don't dare write a letter since everything I write now is e-mail. Zap, I push the send button and there's no time to even catch the snail mail with a telephone apology that the letter is in the post.
Comment from boxergirl
I knew by your title..."Nailing my Coffin" that this was not going to be pretty.
Sounds like the email you sent struck a nerve with Nicole...I am not surprized that she took up for Jeff...typical for most married couples...I could feel your frustration with the whole situation. I love t
the way Frank responds to your hurt. 8-)
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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I knew by your title..."Nailing my Coffin" that this was not going to be pretty.
Sounds like the email you sent struck a nerve with Nicole...I am not surprized that she took up for Jeff...typical for most married couples...I could feel your frustration with the whole situation. I love t
the way Frank responds to your hurt. 8-)
Comment Written 17-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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LOL, we didn't have e-mail back then, BG. Frank encourage me to write the letter. I'm sure I should thank him for that. He managed to lose four jobs because he "let it all out!"
Comment from Debbie Noland
I empathize with this "damned-if-you-do-damned-if-you-don't" situation. If you don't get your feelings out, you feel horrible. If you do get your feelings out, you feel horrible. You have no clear indication of what to do, and you waffle back and forth: "Maybe I'm overreacting; no, I'm not," etc., etc. On the one hand, "I should be sensitive to her"; on the other hand, "Who is being sensitive about ME?" Your feelings distort your objectivity. It is a depressing situation of genuine despair, and it consumes you. You skillfully command language and scene to say all this with absolute clarity.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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I empathize with this "damned-if-you-do-damned-if-you-don't" situation. If you don't get your feelings out, you feel horrible. If you do get your feelings out, you feel horrible. You have no clear indication of what to do, and you waffle back and forth: "Maybe I'm overreacting; no, I'm not," etc., etc. On the one hand, "I should be sensitive to her"; on the other hand, "Who is being sensitive about ME?" Your feelings distort your objectivity. It is a depressing situation of genuine despair, and it consumes you. You skillfully command language and scene to say all this with absolute clarity.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Debbie, for reading into my the emotions I intended.
Comment from Donya Quijote
If ever there was a case of miscommunication this is it. Hurt feelings, silence, misunderstanding, all there. I doubt your daughter ever stopped loving you. I do think she did pick up on the uncertain feelings both you and your husband had for her choice of a mate. I'm sure distance had a lot to do with it. It also sounds like Jeff was a bit a more perceptive than you realized at the time. He picked up on your doubts too. You really never got to know him well before the marriage, and his first impressions were pretty bad. I guess this is kind of what happens in families when someone gets married, and the new member and family don't really know each other and odd quirks are more of an annoyance than just quirks. I wouldn't be too hard on yourself for the way your felt. I am sure much of it is normal... What's next in this saga? I'm sensing we getting an emotional breather coming up...
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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If ever there was a case of miscommunication this is it. Hurt feelings, silence, misunderstanding, all there. I doubt your daughter ever stopped loving you. I do think she did pick up on the uncertain feelings both you and your husband had for her choice of a mate. I'm sure distance had a lot to do with it. It also sounds like Jeff was a bit a more perceptive than you realized at the time. He picked up on your doubts too. You really never got to know him well before the marriage, and his first impressions were pretty bad. I guess this is kind of what happens in families when someone gets married, and the new member and family don't really know each other and odd quirks are more of an annoyance than just quirks. I wouldn't be too hard on yourself for the way your felt. I am sure much of it is normal... What's next in this saga? I'm sensing we getting an emotional breather coming up...
Comment Written 17-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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I wish I could say impressions got better, but they didn't and won't. Emotional breather coming up. Thanks for your insightful review.
Comment from Sasha
I agree, putting things in writing tend to backfire, but I think I would have done the same thing. I don't fine Jeff's sense of humor amusing...but then, a lot of people say that to me too...LOL
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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I agree, putting things in writing tend to backfire, but I think I would have done the same thing. I don't fine Jeff's sense of humor amusing...but then, a lot of people say that to me too...LOL
Comment Written 17-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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Yep, I should have listened to Mama. I could have written it and then tossed it in the garbage. Too late now. I wonder if Nichole still remembers it? Trust me, I have no intentions of asking her. Thanks, sasha.
Comment from mountainwriter49
Hi Shari,
Wow! Talk about an emotion packed chapter. The tension on multiple layers was apparent throughout the read.
I enjoyed the exchange between your mom and you subsequent to the wedding. The sage advice of old age shines through as does the truism about no matter how old one's children become, a mom is still a mom when it matters most.
I found no SPAGS and nothing to recommend for improvement.
I'm looking for the next chapter!
Ray
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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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Hi Shari,
Wow! Talk about an emotion packed chapter. The tension on multiple layers was apparent throughout the read.
I enjoyed the exchange between your mom and you subsequent to the wedding. The sage advice of old age shines through as does the truism about no matter how old one's children become, a mom is still a mom when it matters most.
I found no SPAGS and nothing to recommend for improvement.
I'm looking for the next chapter!
Ray
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Comment Written 17-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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Thanks, Ray. More sunshine in the next chapter. Well, at least a ray of hope.
Comment from Curly Girly
It's a sad situation. Sometimes we want our family members to know how we think and feel. They are the only people we let into our personal space, so when you get rejected--it's tough.
One thing I've learnt: The love between a couple (unless soured) is stronger than for parents, or possibly equal. It is never a good idea for a parent to take a stand against their child's choice of partner. That is a dangerous area. The child will feel forced to make a choice.
It can be hard for parents to hold their tongues. Nobody said it would be easy. Parents instinctively prefer their own children, we are wired that way.
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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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It's a sad situation. Sometimes we want our family members to know how we think and feel. They are the only people we let into our personal space, so when you get rejected--it's tough.
One thing I've learnt: The love between a couple (unless soured) is stronger than for parents, or possibly equal. It is never a good idea for a parent to take a stand against their child's choice of partner. That is a dangerous area. The child will feel forced to make a choice.
It can be hard for parents to hold their tongues. Nobody said it would be easy. Parents instinctively prefer their own children, we are wired that way.
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Comment Written 17-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2015
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You put that so well, Curly. I think the love between a couple is stronger. After all, we chose our spouses. I've finally learned to hold my tongue!
