Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Motel Matches"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
26 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a well written poem with some abcb stanzas and some that could be with slant rhyme. The story is well told about how cheathing ends a relationship but always the love in the cheated on spouse's heart. It's good to see it from the man's side since it is most often shown with the man cheating on the woman.
Nice artwork.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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This is a well written poem with some abcb stanzas and some that could be with slant rhyme. The story is well told about how cheathing ends a relationship but always the love in the cheated on spouse's heart. It's good to see it from the man's side since it is most often shown with the man cheating on the woman.
Nice artwork.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. Appreciate them very much.
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No problem.
dragonoet
Comment from kiwijenny
Great imagery ...and metaphor of your love burned out like a match does
Well penned .great picture for this...so glad it wasn't biographical
Good job..this flame of love between us..has never burned so bright
God bless
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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Great imagery ...and metaphor of your love burned out like a match does
Well penned .great picture for this...so glad it wasn't biographical
Good job..this flame of love between us..has never burned so bright
God bless
Comment Written 23-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. Appreciate them very much indeed.,
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Wow, that was an awesome poem, could be a song. I enjoyed reading it. Eventhough it is free verse, it has a really nice rhythm and flow. I like the picture you chose.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
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Wow, that was an awesome poem, could be a song. I enjoyed reading it. Eventhough it is free verse, it has a really nice rhythm and flow. I like the picture you chose.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. Appreciate them very much.
Comment from fluffnstuff
this would be a great song...and i am simply floored with what i just read about you and what you have accomplished....wow wow wow. i haven't looked to see how many followers you have. i feel like such a "simpleton" as i just go on inspiration and words from the heart....no poetry classes etc. i joined simply to see if the male gender liked and related to my poetry and to get the feedback on if i should put my best in book form before i die. that was or should i say is my life goal. being a "rhymer" which is not that popular with poetry, i have had others tell me i should submit and write songs. I did submit my poem THE GAME to a place in Nashville. If you ever have a moment....would so appreciate your opinion on me? You are something----i'm happy for you. DiAnne
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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this would be a great song...and i am simply floored with what i just read about you and what you have accomplished....wow wow wow. i haven't looked to see how many followers you have. i feel like such a "simpleton" as i just go on inspiration and words from the heart....no poetry classes etc. i joined simply to see if the male gender liked and related to my poetry and to get the feedback on if i should put my best in book form before i die. that was or should i say is my life goal. being a "rhymer" which is not that popular with poetry, i have had others tell me i should submit and write songs. I did submit my poem THE GAME to a place in Nashville. If you ever have a moment....would so appreciate your opinion on me? You are something----i'm happy for you. DiAnne
Comment Written 19-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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Been a writer, mostly Classic Country music Lyricist for a long time. Dabble in other genres. I have accomplished some things but nothing compared to what others have. I appreciate your comments very much and say go for it with your poetry.
Comment from judiverse
A great "love 'em and leave 'em story" from the man's point of view. Why does it seem like the man is always the one cheated on in the country songs? Excellent narrative style, and the voice of the one cheated on really comes through. The "Motel Matches" references is a good one. Just one piece of evidence that she's been unfaithful. Judging from the ending, he's still hung up on her, although she's apparently found someone new. judi
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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A great "love 'em and leave 'em story" from the man's point of view. Why does it seem like the man is always the one cheated on in the country songs? Excellent narrative style, and the voice of the one cheated on really comes through. The "Motel Matches" references is a good one. Just one piece of evidence that she's been unfaithful. Judging from the ending, he's still hung up on her, although she's apparently found someone new. judi
Comment Written 19-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. Appreciate them very much.
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You're very welcome. Happy trails. judi
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a sad poem that covers one of those times in a relationship where the potential to go on is outweighed by the infidelity that is beyond the pale. Nice job.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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This is a sad poem that covers one of those times in a relationship where the potential to go on is outweighed by the infidelity that is beyond the pale. Nice job.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. Appreciate them always.
Comment from tennesseerose
Very easy to read, good flow. I only had to read this one time, which is. to me, a plus!
One question; in the last stanza, I don't understand how the "flame of love between us has never burned so bright". How can this be if they are parting for good?
I enjoyed your poem very much. but wonder if the last stanza is necessary, the one before it seems to be a good ending.
Looking forward to reading more of your stuff.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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Very easy to read, good flow. I only had to read this one time, which is. to me, a plus!
One question; in the last stanza, I don't understand how the "flame of love between us has never burned so bright". How can this be if they are parting for good?
I enjoyed your poem very much. but wonder if the last stanza is necessary, the one before it seems to be a good ending.
Looking forward to reading more of your stuff.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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Because the motel matches fully expose the truth. Thus the reference to "burning so bright". Appreciate your comments and support.
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Ohhhhh...Thanks.
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Brett. Nice work mate. The flow and rhyhming are beautifully done as is the rhythm, infact the rhythm is so good it could easily be a song and you're the man to do it. Well done Sir, cheers Fez
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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G'day Brett. Nice work mate. The flow and rhyhming are beautifully done as is the rhythm, infact the rhythm is so good it could easily be a song and you're the man to do it. Well done Sir, cheers Fez
Comment Written 19-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2015
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These are, as you can easily tell, song lyrics turned into a poem. Appreciate your comments and support.
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Crikey, I might be smart when I grow up Hahaha!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
What a sad, but too true, comment about how some throw away good marriages in the name of lust or ???
Good flow throughout and excellent rhyme. I see no changes.
[I was hoping he would use the motel matches to burn the place down, but that is another poem].
Good job.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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What a sad, but too true, comment about how some throw away good marriages in the name of lust or ???
Good flow throughout and excellent rhyme. I see no changes.
[I was hoping he would use the motel matches to burn the place down, but that is another poem].
Good job.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Maybe I should add that verse?????????? Thanks for your comments and suggestions.
Comment from Nosha17
Infidelity is very hard on the other partner who has been left in the lurch. It is hard to forgive and forget. Good use of rhyming and good story line. Faye
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Infidelity is very hard on the other partner who has been left in the lurch. It is hard to forgive and forget. Good use of rhyming and good story line. Faye
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. Appreciate them very much.
