A Child's Reality
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Comment from Linda Kay
Very unique format to change the words into matching equations. This did a great job of supporting your theme of being childlike! I agree that everyone should strive to keep that part of themselves alive.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Very unique format to change the words into matching equations. This did a great job of supporting your theme of being childlike! I agree that everyone should strive to keep that part of themselves alive.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Thank you, I try to keep child-like, in my old age.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello amada,
what an interesting formula you have going right to the end of your unique poem, about the real fellings of a child growing up.
Gert
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Hello amada,
what an interesting formula you have going right to the end of your unique poem, about the real fellings of a child growing up.
Gert
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Gert.
Comment from Lynne
Smile... I enjoy reading free verse but find that sometimes the flow is jagged, not true with this piece. Excellent imagery and well done!!
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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Smile... I enjoy reading free verse but find that sometimes the flow is jagged, not true with this piece. Excellent imagery and well done!!
D
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the inspiring review.
Comment from Joan E.
I am glad to see your posting regularly again. I liked your playfulness with the formulas, proving that you are in touch with your inner child. Thank you for reminding us about how to be a child--your sun as a "ball of fire" is a perfect example. Well done! -Joan
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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I am glad to see your posting regularly again. I liked your playfulness with the formulas, proving that you are in touch with your inner child. Thank you for reminding us about how to be a child--your sun as a "ball of fire" is a perfect example. Well done! -Joan
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Joan.
Comment from Alan K Pease
You really do capture the spirit of Stephen Hawkins, Chief Scientist/ Humanist of "The Theory of Everything. Your equations fit though one makes me a little uncomfortable too.
Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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You really do capture the spirit of Stephen Hawkins, Chief Scientist/ Humanist of "The Theory of Everything. Your equations fit though one makes me a little uncomfortable too.
Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Wow! Thank you.
Comment from Loyd C. Taylor, Sr
Hello Amada
This was a very interesting poem
I enjoyed the challenge and the creativity.
Nice artwork as well.
My best to you...
Loyd
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Hello Amada
This was a very interesting poem
I enjoyed the challenge and the creativity.
Nice artwork as well.
My best to you...
Loyd
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reading my work.
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It was my pleasure, Loyd
PS Please visit my work here on Fanstory when you have some extra time. :-)
Comment from lalajovanoski
Great free verse contest entry
You are such an amazing poet! I truly enjoyed reading this as you are so very talented! Thank you so very much for sharing this as I truly enjoyed reading
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Great free verse contest entry
You are such an amazing poet! I truly enjoyed reading this as you are so very talented! Thank you so very much for sharing this as I truly enjoyed reading
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reading my work and for liking it.
Comment from wholechild
Amada,
You are so talented. The message of this poem has been on my mind so much lately. I am a young-five teacher in the U.S. We constantly fight for our students rights to play and question and imagine while being told that direct instruction is what leads to "successful students". I feel so fortunate to spend my days with these amazing people who we can learn so much from! One question/suggestion: do you mean "swallowed" instead of swallow in the last stanza?
Wholechild
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Amada,
You are so talented. The message of this poem has been on my mind so much lately. I am a young-five teacher in the U.S. We constantly fight for our students rights to play and question and imagine while being told that direct instruction is what leads to "successful students". I feel so fortunate to spend my days with these amazing people who we can learn so much from! One question/suggestion: do you mean "swallowed" instead of swallow in the last stanza?
Wholechild
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reading my work.
Comment from inside echo
You are so right. It isn't about the answers, it is about the questions, and the life being lived that provokes them. To go back and live as a child again. But you can still play, still find wonder and magic, dreams and joy. It is still ok to laugh, to make believe and wish on stars. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in your contest.
tgc
echo
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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You are so right. It isn't about the answers, it is about the questions, and the life being lived that provokes them. To go back and live as a child again. But you can still play, still find wonder and magic, dreams and joy. It is still ok to laugh, to make believe and wish on stars. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in your contest.
tgc
echo
Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Echo, thank you so much. Yes, magic, to be a child again. Thank you!
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You are welcome.
Comment from Dawny53
Awesome! I really, really like this.. and I don't say that lightly, believe me! Free verse at it's finest.. magical yet sensible.. a delight to read.. one of my favorites, and I wish you luck for this contest.. sure do..
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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Awesome! I really, really like this.. and I don't say that lightly, believe me! Free verse at it's finest.. magical yet sensible.. a delight to read.. one of my favorites, and I wish you luck for this contest.. sure do..
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Comment Written 15-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your lovely comments.
