Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

This is something quite different for you Steve, but I like it just as much. Course picking the name is of critical importance and Isabella works beautifully.

Your poem is naturally to perfect meter and rhyme and it does indeed tell a story.

Best wishes to you in the contest. The competition is stiff -- pun intended.

Gloria

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2015

Thank you.

Could have been Arabella, of course, but she seemed a little too posh!

Steve

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem. Good rhythm and even flow. Excellent word choice to enhance the theme. Nicely done and I thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from Walu Feral

Excellent

LOL. G'day Steve, that is a great little piece, the content may be a sad one but the poem itself is a beauty. I reckon you'll go well again in this comp and I wish you luck in it. Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015

Thanks, Fez - I am quite fond of this little piece - it's a bit different from my usual. I have my doubts about success in the contest - I don't know if the judges will go for this style...

Steve

reply by Walu Feral on 14-Jun-2015

It bloody hard to call what those buggers will do mate huh.

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

Though the tone seems a bit humorous, this little story is also sad because it seems to be so often true. It may be a short tale, but it tells a complex story. Well penned. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015

Oh, yes - the humour masks the tragedy going on here...

Thanks for reviewing.

Steve

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

OH my this is excellent.
I laughed and the last part really put the end to the story.
Very well done and a great contest entry.
Loved the rhyme and the different words used to lighten it

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015

Thanks, Barb - glad you got a laugh out of this rather atypical piece of my mind.

Steve

Comment from Dawny53

Excellent

Well, Isabella did rush things a bit, didn't she.. I really enjoyed this poem.. it was fun, it's funny, and just an all around well written poem.. glad I stopped to take a look!

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015

Thank you - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

ha, quite a little story poem. I loved your fun style - almost limerick like. Good luck to you in the contest.
~~Teresa~~

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015

Thanks, Teresa.

Steve

Comment from visionary1234

Excellent

OMG Steve - your wicked sense of humor always slays me. Must admit, I was expecting more verbal gymnastics and here you are, refreshingly simple and unvarnished. A fun piece! :)Sharyn

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015

Yes, a bit different from my last melodramatic story poem (that one was a winner - I suspect this won't be)

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from Adri7enne

Excellent

Yes, it's nice and short but pretty true to life. Lots of Isabellas out there, with bigger bellies and no fathers anywhere on the horizon.
Great rhyming, Steve. Always a pleasure to read you.
Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015

Thanks for the kind ords.

Steve

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

Yes, I appreciate your shorthand style! It is simple, playful, and fun. You also effectively tell a poem story about Isabella and the cad she married. Your poem had the sound of a jump rope rhyming song girls would sing. You take a playful form of poetry and tell a story that is all too familiar.

Thank you for sharing. I wish you success in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015

Thank you - interesting comment about the jump rope song - I see the similarity...

Steve