As I Dance
Seeing the newness of color in me41 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
The colors can be stirred up if one energy is aroused. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
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The colors can be stirred up if one energy is aroused. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015
Comment from tfawcus
Hope out of despair, so aptly put in your lines:
"Will the rainbow become my window
into my tomorrow?"
There is a positive upbeat feel to this poem, as of one determined to make the best of life.
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Hope out of despair, so aptly put in your lines:
"Will the rainbow become my window
into my tomorrow?"
There is a positive upbeat feel to this poem, as of one determined to make the best of life.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I enjoyed reading your poem. Good free verse and even flow. Excellent word choice to enhance the theme. Nicely done and I thank you for sharing it.
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I enjoyed reading your poem. Good free verse and even flow. Excellent word choice to enhance the theme. Nicely done and I thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015
Comment from Eric1
Hi Loanna, you have created a beautiful poem with a wonderful metaphor using the ribbons during you dance, the comparison from black and white to the colours of the rainbow was inspirational, Good luck in this contest my friend, I won it last year!
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Hi Loanna, you have created a beautiful poem with a wonderful metaphor using the ribbons during you dance, the comparison from black and white to the colours of the rainbow was inspirational, Good luck in this contest my friend, I won it last year!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015
Comment from Mr. Suffering
Whatever song you are listening to, I want to listen too. You nicely pulled together several subjects (Music, rainbows, various colors), which normally could make a poem too busy. Your effort though, had very good flow. Good work!
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Whatever song you are listening to, I want to listen too. You nicely pulled together several subjects (Music, rainbows, various colors), which normally could make a poem too busy. Your effort though, had very good flow. Good work!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015
Comment from barkingdog
This is a wonderful tribute to faith. Before there was light there was darkness.
I love the last line, it's like one enjoyable hug: 'I thank Him now for my life of color-
and I pull the ribbons around me
as I dance'
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This is a wonderful tribute to faith. Before there was light there was darkness.
I love the last line, it's like one enjoyable hug: 'I thank Him now for my life of color-
and I pull the ribbons around me
as I dance'
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015
Comment from Janet Foor
This is a lovely Rainbow poem. You made it so personal as you vividly describe your dance. Very creative and clever to incorporate life's characteristics with the rainbow colors. Well done.
Blessings
Janet
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This is a lovely Rainbow poem. You made it so personal as you vividly describe your dance. Very creative and clever to incorporate life's characteristics with the rainbow colors. Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015
Comment from Amy Greta
This is an excellent poem for the rainbow contest! I really enjoyed it and I love your comparisons of color to a world of grey and blackness. It's very inspirational and uplifting, hopeful. The dancing with ribbons creates a vivid image. Very well done.
~Amy
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This is an excellent poem for the rainbow contest! I really enjoyed it and I love your comparisons of color to a world of grey and blackness. It's very inspirational and uplifting, hopeful. The dancing with ribbons creates a vivid image. Very well done.
~Amy
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015
Comment from kiwisteveh
Interesting take on this prompt with some untold back story about your previous colourless life being succeeded by swirling rainbow colours toda - and the dance of course - great metaphor for a major and wonderful change in your life.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
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Interesting take on this prompt with some untold back story about your previous colourless life being succeeded by swirling rainbow colours toda - and the dance of course - great metaphor for a major and wonderful change in your life.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
Comment Written 12-Jun-2015
Comment from patcelaw
My life was like a puzzle before He brought me unto Himself and I am thankful He never gave up on me and He forgave me for the mess I had made with the pieces He gave me, Patricia
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My life was like a puzzle before He brought me unto Himself and I am thankful He never gave up on me and He forgave me for the mess I had made with the pieces He gave me, Patricia
Comment Written 12-Jun-2015
