A New Beginning
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Comment from barkingdog
You have me wanting to read more. I hope little Nadzia and her babies are safe.
Igor seems like a very kind man.
Now, to wonder if Laura brought her cat and was it Karen who found the metal box was Nadzia still in the box.
So many reasons to read on.
Oh, I almost forgot. You use the word 'redundant' three times in this post. You may want a substitution for two of them.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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You have me wanting to read more. I hope little Nadzia and her babies are safe.
Igor seems like a very kind man.
Now, to wonder if Laura brought her cat and was it Karen who found the metal box was Nadzia still in the box.
So many reasons to read on.
Oh, I almost forgot. You use the word 'redundant' three times in this post. You may want a substitution for two of them.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2015
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A very good point! There is now only one redundant to be found in this chapter. Thank you for your eagle eye. I'm so glad you read on and found out how Igor solved the problem of his 'leetle' friend! Alexis x
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I shall keep reading. I love the characters.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Oh, my! Poor Nadzia. What happened to her? Or is she still safe in the box? Oh, Karen must think that's a box of pasta. Igor had better get the pasta for her quick! I really love his room. He'll be thrilled. And at least he knows not to let mice roam all over the place. Exciting chapter... on to the next...
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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Oh, my! Poor Nadzia. What happened to her? Or is she still safe in the box? Oh, Karen must think that's a box of pasta. Igor had better get the pasta for her quick! I really love his room. He'll be thrilled. And at least he knows not to let mice roam all over the place. Exciting chapter... on to the next...
Comment Written 10-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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I'm glad you enjoyed it Phyllis. These mouse loving chefs are not easy to write about! Alexis xxx
Comment from Walu Feral
Hahahahaha! BOO! G'day Alexis, that is so funny that Champers came running upstairs into my office to see what was so funny. Karen is going to have a fit and I think Laura may just do the same. You have turned this out so brilliantly mate, I just love it. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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Hahahahaha! BOO! G'day Alexis, that is so funny that Champers came running upstairs into my office to see what was so funny. Karen is going to have a fit and I think Laura may just do the same. You have turned this out so brilliantly mate, I just love it. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 10-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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You are so funny, Fez. Your reviews always create a snort of laughter, you old bugger! Loads of excitement happening at this end, so may be able to afford to eat soon! Alexis xxx
Comment from Cindy Warren
Oh-oh, I hope Karen hasn't opened that box! She may not appreciate a nest of baby mice. Check your author notes. For Karen you have a bunch of A's and question marks.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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Oh-oh, I hope Karen hasn't opened that box! She may not appreciate a nest of baby mice. Check your author notes. For Karen you have a bunch of A's and question marks.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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I don't know why that always happens when you use an apostrophe in the author's notes. Thanks for pointing it out! Part two just posted! Alexis xxx
Comment from MelB
I know one thing, if Karen opens that container with Nadzia in it, there is going to be some excitement in the kitchen. It should fix the problem if Igor can get to the room Karen prepared for him and take the mouse and babies with him. Can't wait to find out how this plays out!
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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I know one thing, if Karen opens that container with Nadzia in it, there is going to be some excitement in the kitchen. It should fix the problem if Igor can get to the room Karen prepared for him and take the mouse and babies with him. Can't wait to find out how this plays out!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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Just posted! So I won't say any more for now... Alexis xxx
Comment from scongrove
Another great chapter Alexis! :)
I'm so happy Igor will have a place to stay, but 'oh no!" Poor Nazdia & her babies! Please tell me they're not dead!
I can't believe I'm so worked up about a mouse. But Igor seems to care so much about Nazdia. Now I'll wonder til your next chapter what happened.
Shana :)
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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Another great chapter Alexis! :)
I'm so happy Igor will have a place to stay, but 'oh no!" Poor Nazdia & her babies! Please tell me they're not dead!
I can't believe I'm so worked up about a mouse. But Igor seems to care so much about Nazdia. Now I'll wonder til your next chapter what happened.
Shana :)
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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Lol, either can I! I just thought it would be a cute twist to the story when I first introduced Nazdia to the equation, but everyone seems to love the concept of a mouse loving chef, even Feral, who sent me a delicious recipe for mouse stew! Next bit of the chapter now posted. I hope you enjoy it!
Alexis xxx
Comment from jpduck
You really do have a crystal-clear writing style, Alexis. I hardly ever have to stop and look back to clarify something -- quite a rarity. Can't wait for the next instalment; if Karen opens Nadzia's tin for her pasta, there will be quite a scene.
Adrian
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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You really do have a crystal-clear writing style, Alexis. I hardly ever have to stop and look back to clarify something -- quite a rarity. Can't wait for the next instalment; if Karen opens Nadzia's tin for her pasta, there will be quite a scene.
Adrian
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Adrian. I'm just glad to be back at the Bedford where all my characters are waiting. They're an impatient lot, and are all hustling for air time! Alexis x
Comment from Annette Gulliver
Oh no! How could you do that to us, Alexis. Poor Igor, is he going to get the tin box away from Karen before she opens it? And what on earth will happen if he doesn't??? An entertaining chapter which I enjoyed reading. And a great hook at the end to keep us hanging.
Annette
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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Oh no! How could you do that to us, Alexis. Poor Igor, is he going to get the tin box away from Karen before she opens it? And what on earth will happen if he doesn't??? An entertaining chapter which I enjoyed reading. And a great hook at the end to keep us hanging.
Annette
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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I'm working on that chapter now. Not easy, I can tell you! Serves me right for creating a mouse loving chef. I must be nuts! Alexis x
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lol - I'm sure Igor will find a way to save Nadzia and her babies, Alexis.
Comment from Curly Girly
This chapter read well. Igor has placed Nadzia in a tin to give birth in. (I was wondering if she would suffocate!) Now Laura is about to discover his secret. The readers are left dangling in mid-air, waiting to see what is going to happen next ...
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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This chapter read well. Igor has placed Nadzia in a tin to give birth in. (I was wondering if she would suffocate!) Now Laura is about to discover his secret. The readers are left dangling in mid-air, waiting to see what is going to happen next ...
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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Don't worry (not that you are, I'm sure!) but he made holes in the back of the tin with a kitchen skewer. Fortunately, Karen hasn't seen the holes, which will serve a purpose in the next chapter. Crazy idea having a mouse loving chef, but now I've created him, I'm stuck with it! Alexis xxx
Comment from rwilliam
Really good chapter!
That being said, unless he could think of an alternative, moving back to his uncle's might be his only alternative.--Choose where you want to use the word 'alternative' and replace the second one with another word.
A foray around the dry store on Monday night resulted in him emptying out the contents of a large, rectangular tin of dried pasta into a black plastic bag.-- This is telling rather than showing. Try something like: Monday night Igor explored the dry store. He emptied the contents of a large, rectangular tin of dried pasta into a black plastic bag.
Having tasted the stew, Igor decided to add a pinch more salt before turning around. --- Try: Igor lifted the ladle to his lips and tasted the stew. The hearty aroma filled his nostrils. "Mmmm, just a pinch more salt." he mumbled to himself before turning around.
I liked the ending you always have such fun, turn page endings. Great work! :-)
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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Really good chapter!
That being said, unless he could think of an alternative, moving back to his uncle's might be his only alternative.--Choose where you want to use the word 'alternative' and replace the second one with another word.
A foray around the dry store on Monday night resulted in him emptying out the contents of a large, rectangular tin of dried pasta into a black plastic bag.-- This is telling rather than showing. Try something like: Monday night Igor explored the dry store. He emptied the contents of a large, rectangular tin of dried pasta into a black plastic bag.
Having tasted the stew, Igor decided to add a pinch more salt before turning around. --- Try: Igor lifted the ladle to his lips and tasted the stew. The hearty aroma filled his nostrils. "Mmmm, just a pinch more salt." he mumbled to himself before turning around.
I liked the ending you always have such fun, turn page endings. Great work! :-)
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
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All great ideas, thank you! Yes, the next chapter should be fun, although hard to navigate. Working on it now. Who would think there are so many people rooting for a bally mouse! Alexis xxx
