My Daddy Said...
Cindy is told about her mummy.39 total reviews
Comment from Dean Kuch
I know the feeling, Sandra. About those "senior Moments, I mean.
Too bad this lovely touching verse couldn't have found it's way into a contest somewhere, such as the Faith Poetry Contest...unless you've already entered on in it. It speaks of a great form of faith, as seen through the eyes of one little tiny girl, who has lost her mother to the cold cruel clutches of death. It's wonderfully composed, presented in smoothly flowing and even metered quatrains, and portrays a beautiful and uplifting spiritual message.
Excellent work, Sandra...~Dean
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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I know the feeling, Sandra. About those "senior Moments, I mean.
Too bad this lovely touching verse couldn't have found it's way into a contest somewhere, such as the Faith Poetry Contest...unless you've already entered on in it. It speaks of a great form of faith, as seen through the eyes of one little tiny girl, who has lost her mother to the cold cruel clutches of death. It's wonderfully composed, presented in smoothly flowing and even metered quatrains, and portrays a beautiful and uplifting spiritual message.
Excellent work, Sandra...~Dean
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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LOL, I am getting them so often these days, Dean. One reviewer told me to drink plenty of high protein drinks and walk more. So I'll give it a try. I'll let you know how it goes. :) Thank you for your lovely review, my friend, I have entered one in the contest, I didn't think of this one for it. I wrote this one remembering how I had to sit down with my two young sons and explain their daddy was in too much pain and would be taken by an angel to heaven. It is the hardest thing to do. They are dads themselves now, and their father would have been so proud of them. Thanks again, my friend. xsx sandra
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You're more than welcome, Sandra. I cant imagine how difficult that must have been for you, but you managed to encapsulate those feelings quite well in your lovely poem.
Have a wonderful upcoming week, my friend, and God bless. :]
~Dean
Comment from Chrissy710
What a lovely poem Sandra, you have created a really nice way to tell a child of her mothers death, I could feel the sadness in the Father at the end when his daughter told him she would look after him. A lovely image and colour scheme, this rhymed well and I though it flowed nicely. Thanks for sharing. cheers Christine
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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What a lovely poem Sandra, you have created a really nice way to tell a child of her mothers death, I could feel the sadness in the Father at the end when his daughter told him she would look after him. A lovely image and colour scheme, this rhymed well and I though it flowed nicely. Thanks for sharing. cheers Christine
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much, Christine, for your really lovely review. :) sandra
Comment from tfawcus
A remarkably poignant explanation of death for a small child. It fits so well within the framework of a child's thinking. I have read many children's picture books dealing with the subject, but few with the balance of your poem. I would not be at all surprised if it were publishable. The final stanza and closing couplet are most empowering. I'm glad to have read it early in the week while I still have a swag of stars!
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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A remarkably poignant explanation of death for a small child. It fits so well within the framework of a child's thinking. I have read many children's picture books dealing with the subject, but few with the balance of your poem. I would not be at all surprised if it were publishable. The final stanza and closing couplet are most empowering. I'm glad to have read it early in the week while I still have a swag of stars!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Thank you so very much, Tony. Your review is really lovely and I'd give you a big hug for the 6 shiny stars if you were standing next to me!! :) Sandra xsx
Comment from Antoine Charlemaine
Well, I'm glad you decided to post it anyway (under a different guise). This is so beautiful, Sandra. It brought tears to my eyes. A little girl and her daddy... I'm a bit sentimental that way. I have three very precious little girls and four beautiful granddaughters...
Many delightful sentiments in this..too many to list, but I think this is my favourite: 'But until then down here we must remain,
There's lots for me to learn that I don't know.'
Thanks, Sandra.
Anthony
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Well, I'm glad you decided to post it anyway (under a different guise). This is so beautiful, Sandra. It brought tears to my eyes. A little girl and her daddy... I'm a bit sentimental that way. I have three very precious little girls and four beautiful granddaughters...
Many delightful sentiments in this..too many to list, but I think this is my favourite: 'But until then down here we must remain,
There's lots for me to learn that I don't know.'
Thanks, Sandra.
Anthony
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Thank you so very much, my friend, for your wonderful review and shiny 6 stars. I was a 'Daddy's girl' and even though I am an old granny now, I still miss both my mum and dad. Nothing wrong in being a sentimentalist, Antony, I am one too! :) Sandra
Comment from petalangela
The description and explanation of death is really brilliant in this poem. If I had been a child and had it explaoned like this I would have been very settled in my mother's whereabouts
Every parent should handle death on lines of this poem
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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The description and explanation of death is really brilliant in this poem. If I had been a child and had it explaoned like this I would have been very settled in my mother's whereabouts
Every parent should handle death on lines of this poem
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much, my friend. It isn't an easy thing to have to do. I had to explain it to my sons when they were small when their father was dying. Very hard. Thanks again, Petalangela. :) Sandra. xsx
Comment from Janelle
beautifully executed, poignant and moving poem. Such a hard thing for a father to do; telling a young child she no longer has her mother. This is a clear sighted view of such a conversation with a positive outlook. Well done, regards, Jan
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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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beautifully executed, poignant and moving poem. Such a hard thing for a father to do; telling a young child she no longer has her mother. This is a clear sighted view of such a conversation with a positive outlook. Well done, regards, Jan
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Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much, Jan, for your lovely review! xsx Sandra
Comment from inside echo
oh Sandra, this made me cry. It is so gently and powerfully written. It is beautiful. It is written in the perfect words a child would use. Omgoodness, it is lovely. Your rhyme and flow are perfect. The art you chose is perfect. Sandra, this is so touching. Exceptional writing... So very well done. Thank you so very much for sharing.
tgc
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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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oh Sandra, this made me cry. It is so gently and powerfully written. It is beautiful. It is written in the perfect words a child would use. Omgoodness, it is lovely. Your rhyme and flow are perfect. The art you chose is perfect. Sandra, this is so touching. Exceptional writing... So very well done. Thank you so very much for sharing.
tgc
echo
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much, my dear friend! What a lovely review, and then you put the icing on the cake with one of your precious 6 stars! Thank you, thank you!! :) Sandra. xsx
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So very deserved Sandra. Beautiful.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Very sweet and touching. Daddy handled her mother's death in the best way for her.
"My daddy said my mummy couldn't stay << Needs full stop or semi-colon here
My daddy said that God had been so sad, << Beginning quote missing. Actually, since only one person is speaking, you don't need any quotation marks at all. I'd remove them.
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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Very sweet and touching. Daddy handled her mother's death in the best way for her.
"My daddy said my mummy couldn't stay << Needs full stop or semi-colon here
My daddy said that God had been so sad, << Beginning quote missing. Actually, since only one person is speaking, you don't need any quotation marks at all. I'd remove them.
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Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Phyllis. You know me and my SPAGS, you wouldn't believe I have your lesson pinned to my board with the do's and don'ts in front of me. I must take some neck exercises so my head can turn and read them! LOL. Thanks my dear friend!! :) xxxx
Comment from Curly Girly
What a sad little poem about a child losing its mother. I enjoyed the story it told.
One typo:
"My daddy said her home is very high,
but Jesus said my kisses she can send. /the mother can send the child's kisses?
Suggest:
"My daddy said her home is very high,
but Jesus said my kisses [I] can send.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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What a sad little poem about a child losing its mother. I enjoyed the story it told.
One typo:
"My daddy said her home is very high,
but Jesus said my kisses she can send. /the mother can send the child's kisses?
Suggest:
"My daddy said her home is very high,
but Jesus said my kisses [I] can send.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Wow, my lovely friend! A big hug for pointing that error out to me, I made a big bloomer there, didn't I? I've now changed it :)
Thank you so much, Nicole, my first review for this and you have given it one of your precious 6 stars. I am sending you an even bigger hug! :) xsx Sandra
