Old Roads
Old roads remind me of my self. A very freestyle poem.8 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
What a lovely metaphor. Country roads have are more character than a highway. My favorite is the bit about clogged arteries. This is a great entry. Hope you win.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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What a lovely metaphor. Country roads have are more character than a highway. My favorite is the bit about clogged arteries. This is a great entry. Hope you win.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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Thanks for reading and reviewing my contest entry. I truly appreciate your encouragement.
Comment from aroundthebend
Absolutely wonderful. The poem expresses a true love of life and living, of experiencing and growing, of knowing that while your body may leave the road, your spirit will live on forever. Beautiful!
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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Absolutely wonderful. The poem expresses a true love of life and living, of experiencing and growing, of knowing that while your body may leave the road, your spirit will live on forever. Beautiful!
Comment Written 05-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Comment from rspoet
You've written a very good free verse poem for the body prompt.
The road is a good metaphor to use, all those twists and turns, pot holes too.
The grey curly moss like grey hair is a nice image.
This road has character, that comes with age.
Roads lead on to other roads, sometimes it's the journey, sometimes the destination.
Well done, get rid of that junk food.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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You've written a very good free verse poem for the body prompt.
The road is a good metaphor to use, all those twists and turns, pot holes too.
The grey curly moss like grey hair is a nice image.
This road has character, that comes with age.
Roads lead on to other roads, sometimes it's the journey, sometimes the destination.
Well done, get rid of that junk food.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2015
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Thank you spoet for your kind review of my contest entry.
Comment from emkoutny
I like the extended metaphor of the road and the body. There are wonderful images like the part where you write "Some parts are too narrow and others too wide," and at the end where you write that when that "I will go on forever" I took it to mean the soul.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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I like the extended metaphor of the road and the body. There are wonderful images like the part where you write "Some parts are too narrow and others too wide," and at the end where you write that when that "I will go on forever" I took it to mean the soul.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Thank you emkoutny for your kind review. Yes, I did mean the soul goes on forever.
Comment from Curly Girly
Your poem tells of a life journey which is still in progress. There is much wisdom in your final words:
The who I am... is not my body
I will go on forever
No, you are not your body. I like that!
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Your poem tells of a life journey which is still in progress. There is much wisdom in your final words:
The who I am... is not my body
I will go on forever
No, you are not your body. I like that!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Thank you Curly Girly for reading and commenting on my poem.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Nice free verse poem!! The action flows smoothly and you used very descriptive language. I think the format is good and picture too but the font is too small for my taste. Your poem held my interest all the way to the end.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Nice free verse poem!! The action flows smoothly and you used very descriptive language. I think the format is good and picture too but the font is too small for my taste. Your poem held my interest all the way to the end.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Thank you Gypsy Blue Rose for your comments on my poem. Yes, the font is pretty small. Didn't think to change it from a 12.
Comment from meggie13
I like the comparison of the road with your body. It actually applies to most of us. It's very original and has good imagery. The picture used was a good choice for your poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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I like the comparison of the road with your body. It actually applies to most of us. It's very original and has good imagery. The picture used was a good choice for your poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Thank yo meggie for commenting on my poem and your well wishes for the contest.
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You are welcome.
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You are welcome.
Comment from ~Dovey
It was very clever to equate your body to the old road. The picture was reminiscent of a 'road less travelled' famous work, giving you the choices of life before you. I was pleasantly surprised to find you had taken another tact. Great job, I hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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It was very clever to equate your body to the old road. The picture was reminiscent of a 'road less travelled' famous work, giving you the choices of life before you. I was pleasantly surprised to find you had taken another tact. Great job, I hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Thank you Dovey for your kind review and well wishes.
