Let's Talk Dirty!
Viewing comments for Chapter 80 "A New Ending"The story about three women who need to make money
18 total reviews
Comment from wordsfromsue
I like the way things are wrapping up, possibilities of happiness, feelings of utter doom for saying things before thinking them out. That's one of my worst charscter traits, so I really can empathize with Karen.
Still not sure I like Mark for letting himself act like a typical male!!!!
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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I like the way things are wrapping up, possibilities of happiness, feelings of utter doom for saying things before thinking them out. That's one of my worst charscter traits, so I really can empathize with Karen.
Still not sure I like Mark for letting himself act like a typical male!!!!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2015
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The way I see Karen is as a typical woman who has risen up from the horrible insults her husband threw at her before we walked out, and needs to throw something back before she can start to forgive him. She's only human! That's how I would feel, although my pal who I based this on never did forgive her husband for the awful thing he said to her the day he walked out, and even though he did some serious grovelling afterwards, they ended up getting divorced. Men! Alexis xxx
Comment from Cindy Warren
I don't know if I like the phone with the clock on it. It seems kind of useless. Maybe a real phone would be better. I think Mark should continue to sweat, perhaps think Karen chose him over the young doctor in the end. I can imagine what he'd think if he knew the truth, and it would be kind of pathetic. It's good she's spending the night with Laura.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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I don't know if I like the phone with the clock on it. It seems kind of useless. Maybe a real phone would be better. I think Mark should continue to sweat, perhaps think Karen chose him over the young doctor in the end. I can imagine what he'd think if he knew the truth, and it would be kind of pathetic. It's good she's spending the night with Laura.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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I have one that has a modern phone as the 'L' of 'Let's,' which I think will be my final choice. Still to decide. I posted a fun one today with my rejigged last chapter. I hope it brings a smile to your face! Alexis x
Comment from Ulla
Very good .I think you are getting the new ending right. I liked it and I reckon there is more to come before it's ending. Just to confuse you, I think the phone on the cover looks just right. Best wishes Ulla
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Very good .I think you are getting the new ending right. I liked it and I reckon there is more to come before it's ending. Just to confuse you, I think the phone on the cover looks just right. Best wishes Ulla
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Ulla. I posted a fun image today with the last chapter. The book is now officially complete! Alexis x
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Alexis. Great work mate, it sounds like you are read to get it done now. I still think think the phone should stay, but I'm a bloke so maybe designs are not my forte LOL. Good luck mate. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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G'day Alexis. Great work mate, it sounds like you are read to get it done now. I still think think the phone should stay, but I'm a bloke so maybe designs are not my forte LOL. Good luck mate. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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You should get a good laugh from the one accompanying the last rejigged chapter of LTD tomorrow, Fez. I can't resist a bit of fun!
Comment from rwilliam
Ok first, i love the improvements. I really didn't know what to suggest on the last one or that it needed any but I find this much more appealing. LOVE the clock in the phone! Great idea!!
Consoling her friend was one thing, having a guest walk in on them with Karen looking like a hysterical panda, was another.--Loved this description!
Wonderful chapter! Like the improvements and feel it's more well rounded! Great job.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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Ok first, i love the improvements. I really didn't know what to suggest on the last one or that it needed any but I find this much more appealing. LOVE the clock in the phone! Great idea!!
Consoling her friend was one thing, having a guest walk in on them with Karen looking like a hysterical panda, was another.--Loved this description!
Wonderful chapter! Like the improvements and feel it's more well rounded! Great job.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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I think so too. It's amazing how much clearer things become after you've been away from something you've written for a few weeks. Glad to say there have been some exciting developments that mean I'm holding off publishing for a little while. Fingers crossed! Alexis xxx
Comment from MelB
I like the second book cover best. Just with half the body and phone leaves a little more intrigue, more alluring. I have to admit, I almost didn't read the story in the beginning. I didn't know what direction it would go. I didn't want to read anything smutty. You kept it clean and tasteful and there were many funny moments! Great job on this. Has to feel good to have the story finished!
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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I like the second book cover best. Just with half the body and phone leaves a little more intrigue, more alluring. I have to admit, I almost didn't read the story in the beginning. I didn't know what direction it would go. I didn't want to read anything smutty. You kept it clean and tasteful and there were many funny moments! Great job on this. Has to feel good to have the story finished!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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It was probably the worst title I could have picked for Fan Story, but I wanted my copywriter to be against the right title. As you know, it was more funny than smutty, and I'd like to think pretty clean considering the subject. Just the last rewritten chapter to go! Alexis x
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It was funny, clean and very tastefully done. I was really glad I read it:)
Comment from Ric Myworld
It amazes me sometimes the negative things people will say just to lash out at someone, trying to minimize their true interest. "I've got a date with someone a lot more exciting then you," now, that is definitely all anyone would have to say for me to give up and move on. I mean, it's apparent that she has someone she likes better, so why keep wasting his time, or if she's just saying something so mean and cruel, why would he want her anyway. If he's so great, then why isn't she with him to begin with? That's not saying that his words weren't terrible too, but he didn't compare her to another lover. Great chapter, like all the rest.
As for my comments on your book cover, it's just my humble opinion, but sometimes less is more. As a red-blooded male, I'm all for attractive women in bathing suits. The idea of the phone and clock are good ideas, and so is widening the view to show the whole suit. However, personally, less is almost always more. Letting the imagination take glimpses and fill in the blanks. You are going to look fine regardless, but for me, I would have you sitting in a chair, talking on the phone that sits on a small end table, in a terrycloth robe, showing about the same amount of cleavage, with a gaping crack in the robe that revels a darkened shadow to hide parts that shouldn't be seen and a peek at a leg. No matter how nice it looks, naked under a robe or a long-tailed shirt always trumps a bathing suit. It's all good either way.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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It amazes me sometimes the negative things people will say just to lash out at someone, trying to minimize their true interest. "I've got a date with someone a lot more exciting then you," now, that is definitely all anyone would have to say for me to give up and move on. I mean, it's apparent that she has someone she likes better, so why keep wasting his time, or if she's just saying something so mean and cruel, why would he want her anyway. If he's so great, then why isn't she with him to begin with? That's not saying that his words weren't terrible too, but he didn't compare her to another lover. Great chapter, like all the rest.
As for my comments on your book cover, it's just my humble opinion, but sometimes less is more. As a red-blooded male, I'm all for attractive women in bathing suits. The idea of the phone and clock are good ideas, and so is widening the view to show the whole suit. However, personally, less is almost always more. Letting the imagination take glimpses and fill in the blanks. You are going to look fine regardless, but for me, I would have you sitting in a chair, talking on the phone that sits on a small end table, in a terrycloth robe, showing about the same amount of cleavage, with a gaping crack in the robe that revels a darkened shadow to hide parts that shouldn't be seen and a peek at a leg. No matter how nice it looks, naked under a robe or a long-tailed shirt always trumps a bathing suit. It's all good either way.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Thank goodness it's fiction! Yes, Karen is already regretting her rash actions, but the thought that Mark had an affair, and called her a fat, alcoholic cow before he left her, has left a lot of bitterness inside her. The gloves come off in the next and final chapter of 'Let's talk Dirty!' Alls well that ends well! Alexis x
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Fiction and Fun! Yes, that's what it's all about.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
The story has to be perfect and
completed by now, alexis - I think
the phone on the cover works well...
mind, a woman holding a receiver to her ear would
also work really well. I'll be interested to see
what you finally decide on.
Margaret
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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The story has to be perfect and
completed by now, alexis - I think
the phone on the cover works well...
mind, a woman holding a receiver to her ear would
also work really well. I'll be interested to see
what you finally decide on.
Margaret
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Only one revised chapter to go with the last of the book fronts to review. It has actually been very helpful doing it this way because fresh eyes have found more mistakes (cringe!) I like the phone too, although some reviewers find it too dated. Lol, I prefer the word vintage! Alexis x
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I never get tired of reading this story, Alexis. I will wait until you finish changing the covers and then look at them all before I pass any comment. I do think you now have an idea of what you want on the cover though, and just want to test the water. I like this ending, is this is now? How many words have you written for this book? Just wondered as I am toying with the idea of writing a novella. Is a novella a shorter book than a novel? Anyway, your book is superb, my clever friend. xxxx
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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I never get tired of reading this story, Alexis. I will wait until you finish changing the covers and then look at them all before I pass any comment. I do think you now have an idea of what you want on the cover though, and just want to test the water. I like this ending, is this is now? How many words have you written for this book? Just wondered as I am toying with the idea of writing a novella. Is a novella a shorter book than a novel? Anyway, your book is superb, my clever friend. xxxx
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Me too. I think reviewers might have a laugh when I publish my last book cover suggestion (nudge, nudge, wink, wink!) Sorry, I can't help myself... Alexis xxx
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What have you done???? When will I get to see it?? You are such a tease!! LOL! xxx
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I like the cover this way. The phone is cute and gives it a whimsical, fun look. It's eyecatching too. Tells browsers there's a phone involved, and you know how people love their phones these days.
The new ending looks good, too. I think you've polished this book up nicely. It was a fun read. :)
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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I like the cover this way. The phone is cute and gives it a whimsical, fun look. It's eyecatching too. Tells browsers there's a phone involved, and you know how people love their phones these days.
The new ending looks good, too. I think you've polished this book up nicely. It was a fun read. :)
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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I'm glad you do, Phyllis, because so do I. Some reviewers say it's too old fashioned. I call it vintage! Alexis x
