When Blood Collides
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Gaining A Son-In-Law"A family's love is tested.
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Comment from Donya Quijote
Based on your initial revelations as to how you felt about Jeff I couldn't help but laugh at the irony in the last line.
I like the chnage in POV. Rather than contiue with just the minimal in terms of details you are now inserting more of your thoughts and feelings.
This had to have been some wedding, with all the costumes and the added strangeness of the pagan rites. I went to a pagan style wedding once. I was a photographer. The groom's family was very much like you regarding the pagan rites. Some did not RSVP and did not come. Those that did go commented in much the same way you did, not agreeing with the rites but noting the spiritual feeling that encompassed the day.
Another good episode...
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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Based on your initial revelations as to how you felt about Jeff I couldn't help but laugh at the irony in the last line.
I like the chnage in POV. Rather than contiue with just the minimal in terms of details you are now inserting more of your thoughts and feelings.
This had to have been some wedding, with all the costumes and the added strangeness of the pagan rites. I went to a pagan style wedding once. I was a photographer. The groom's family was very much like you regarding the pagan rites. Some did not RSVP and did not come. Those that did go commented in much the same way you did, not agreeing with the rites but noting the spiritual feeling that encompassed the day.
Another good episode...
Comment Written 05-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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I have an open mind when it comes to spirituality. It doesn't always come in well-controlled organized religious groups. The presence of God can be found in any place filled with love, joy, and peacefulness. The rites simply make it legal. :-)
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Shari. That's it! Champers is going to become a nun! LOL. This is another great chapter albeit a strange one with "Snow white and Dopey" at the alter. How interesting their ideas are. Looking forward to the vows, anything could happen LOL. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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G'day Shari. That's it! Champers is going to become a nun! LOL. This is another great chapter albeit a strange one with "Snow white and Dopey" at the alter. How interesting their ideas are. Looking forward to the vows, anything could happen LOL. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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Anything can happen and it sure does, including another oversight!
Comment from padumachitta
Hi...a gain, a gain...why do i feel like this is not going to go good.?
What a strange thing the Elephant MAn music...and the godfather...
I am still trying to figure this out...or him...and maybe you will expalin or maybe it is never explanable...
padumachitta
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Hi...a gain, a gain...why do i feel like this is not going to go good.?
What a strange thing the Elephant MAn music...and the godfather...
I am still trying to figure this out...or him...and maybe you will expalin or maybe it is never explanable...
padumachitta
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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My daughter says it all in the next chapter. Wait and see. :-)
Comment from IndianaIrish
Oh my! That comment must have busted a gut with laughter from the crowd. Very funny. The ceremony sounds pretty meaningful to the bride and groom so far. I'm glad you enjoyed it. A couple of things to look at...
Jeff had a stick(-)held mask too:
burst of eight(-)inch white feathers erupted from the open top.
Jeff had choseen (chosen)the music for her entrance too,
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Oh my! That comment must have busted a gut with laughter from the crowd. Very funny. The ceremony sounds pretty meaningful to the bride and groom so far. I'm glad you enjoyed it. A couple of things to look at...
Jeff had a stick(-)held mask too:
burst of eight(-)inch white feathers erupted from the open top.
Jeff had choseen (chosen)the music for her entrance too,
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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THanks as always for catching the nits. The wedding vows get even bigger laughs.
Comment from His Grayness
Well indeed Shari, your writing is skillful and compelling, no doubt. The restraint you exercised is commendable (while I am certain, not at all satisfactory to your soul) ah...maybe not soul...maybe eh.dark side? Ok. the guys a bozo and the situation's a bummer and you wrote it up profoundly well (and that's what it's all about) so I won't tamper with the situational emotions and just stick to the important stuff! Your a great writer!...And a "hoot" too! Loveya: Vance PS: sorry to be outa sixes also......
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Well indeed Shari, your writing is skillful and compelling, no doubt. The restraint you exercised is commendable (while I am certain, not at all satisfactory to your soul) ah...maybe not soul...maybe eh.dark side? Ok. the guys a bozo and the situation's a bummer and you wrote it up profoundly well (and that's what it's all about) so I won't tamper with the situational emotions and just stick to the important stuff! Your a great writer!...And a "hoot" too! Loveya: Vance PS: sorry to be outa sixes also......
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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I can read between the line, handsome man. Indeed, I am writing this for my own enlightenment. Trust me, I'm now listening to my soul which has grown tremendously the last twenty years.
Spiritual journeys take a while. :-)
Shari xx
Comment from w.j.debi
Oh, you had me smiling in this chapter as much as you had me fuming in the last one. It was certainly a beautiful wedding ceremony, quite a production, but full of the right sentiments.
You are so wise and thoughtful when it comes to taking care of your daughter.
I do love the pizza in Jeff's face statement and the closing sentence just puts the icing on the cake!
LOVED IT
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Oh, you had me smiling in this chapter as much as you had me fuming in the last one. It was certainly a beautiful wedding ceremony, quite a production, but full of the right sentiments.
You are so wise and thoughtful when it comes to taking care of your daughter.
I do love the pizza in Jeff's face statement and the closing sentence just puts the icing on the cake!
LOVED IT
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Thank you, debi, for such a warm and delightful review. Sure do appreciate that sixer. This story is opening my eyes to a lot of things. Called my daughter at work today just to tell her I love her. It caught her by surprise but it delighted her. Now I feel all warm and fuzzy inside.
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Ah, that is so sweet.
Comment from Deniz22
"Jeff--Jeff--where was he? From the corner of my eye I saw him walking toward our table. His ape-length arms plopped into my vision, his meaty fingers splayed on the table. I looked up to see his buffalo head swivel to take in the 'grown-ups'. "How is the boring table doing?"
You've made him so attractive...how could anyone dislike this guy? :)
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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"Jeff--Jeff--where was he? From the corner of my eye I saw him walking toward our table. His ape-length arms plopped into my vision, his meaty fingers splayed on the table. I looked up to see his buffalo head swivel to take in the 'grown-ups'. "How is the boring table doing?"
You've made him so attractive...how could anyone dislike this guy? :)
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Well, I sure wouldn't put my high heels under his bed. LOL
Thanks for dropping by and the exceptional rating.
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Comment from walbc
omg haha....your ending is .... surprising to say the least. It leaves the reader champing at the bit for the next installment.
Story continues to flow smoothly, holding the reader's attention. You certainly do have the gift of the story teller, Shari. Well done, as usual.
warm regards, wendy.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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omg haha....your ending is .... surprising to say the least. It leaves the reader champing at the bit for the next installment.
Story continues to flow smoothly, holding the reader's attention. You certainly do have the gift of the story teller, Shari. Well done, as usual.
warm regards, wendy.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thanks, Wendy. That's exactly what happened.
Comment from Leen1
The last sentence got me again and I almost fell off my chair with laughter. Who would of thought Jeff would show such emotion during the ceremony. It just goes to prove, one never knows does one. Ha!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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The last sentence got me again and I almost fell off my chair with laughter. Who would of thought Jeff would show such emotion during the ceremony. It just goes to prove, one never knows does one. Ha!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Love your reaction. Jeff shows more emotion before it's all over. He all but fell apart!
Comment from livelylinda
Spitfire: of course you already know that you can spell, use commas in the right place, have a great grasp of the English language and how to use it properly when writing.
I see that several incidents angered you and I see why. I think the last two lines of this story is brilliant (and quite funny!). It leaves the reader dangling and wanting, needing to know what happened next . . . Snow White and Dopey! Hysterical! This is six-star-worthy, of course, but I have only virtual today. Totally enjoyable read. livelylinda
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Spitfire: of course you already know that you can spell, use commas in the right place, have a great grasp of the English language and how to use it properly when writing.
I see that several incidents angered you and I see why. I think the last two lines of this story is brilliant (and quite funny!). It leaves the reader dangling and wanting, needing to know what happened next . . . Snow White and Dopey! Hysterical! This is six-star-worthy, of course, but I have only virtual today. Totally enjoyable read. livelylinda
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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THanks for choosing a chapter to read. I have a tape of the wedding and that's word for word what he said. Next will be the personal wedding vows that each one made. A lot of humor in each one.
