Get Well, Brooke!
Viewing comments for Chapter 10016 "Bring back the sun."Writing for Brooke
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Comment from Dean Kuch
Amen, I couldn't have said it any better, DALLAS. Brooke's positive outlook and disposition, coupled with her uplifting and outstanding poetry, always manage to provide a much needed lift, even on the darkest of days. Her presence of light-spirited unselfishness is sorely missed here by so many, and justifiably so.
This is a beautifully written ode to FanStory's own Poet Laureate. I think you aptly echo the sentiments of everyone here who's benefited from her expertise and positive influences.
She'll love this, and bring back the Sunshine indeed!
~Dean
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Amen, I couldn't have said it any better, DALLAS. Brooke's positive outlook and disposition, coupled with her uplifting and outstanding poetry, always manage to provide a much needed lift, even on the darkest of days. Her presence of light-spirited unselfishness is sorely missed here by so many, and justifiably so.
This is a beautifully written ode to FanStory's own Poet Laureate. I think you aptly echo the sentiments of everyone here who's benefited from her expertise and positive influences.
She'll love this, and bring back the Sunshine indeed!
~Dean
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thanks, Dean, for he kind words. When I think of her positive outlook and philosophy, I think of that song "You, light up my life."
Comment from Annette Gulliver
A beautiful poem for such a beautiful lady. Bright yellow colour scheme and artwork, so catching to the eye. Brooke needs a little sunshine in her life right now.
Annette
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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A beautiful poem for such a beautiful lady. Bright yellow colour scheme and artwork, so catching to the eye. Brooke needs a little sunshine in her life right now.
Annette
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from His Grayness
Oh, dear one, that I might have the deserved sixth star for this marvelous, deeply felt and moving work of beautiful words, and compassion! Your emotions of love and respect are so warmly delivered with power and energy that I hope and believe will race the cells of Brooke's continuation to again spray brilliant beams of inspiration, love, and compassion to all of us here at FS and kiss you with thanks for your generous and powerful mind! Blessings for your wonderful work! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Oh, dear one, that I might have the deserved sixth star for this marvelous, deeply felt and moving work of beautiful words, and compassion! Your emotions of love and respect are so warmly delivered with power and energy that I hope and believe will race the cells of Brooke's continuation to again spray brilliant beams of inspiration, love, and compassion to all of us here at FS and kiss you with thanks for your generous and powerful mind! Blessings for your wonderful work! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for the awesome review. Hope she doesn't leave us in the dark too long.
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Indeed: I pray that her light shall continue to shine in so many ways! Vance
Comment from RuralFrights
Wonderful expressions!
Deep spiritual meaning in "posting prayers" to be carried by the element of air (breeze) in an envelop of her poems.
Many who do spiritual work via elements perform a version of what you have described for a desired blessing (wish) from a desirable source (Creator, or whatever their reference might be). In your case, sunshine (literal and figurative).
I like the cursive font. You might consider a similar but bolder one to make the words stand out for an easier read.
I was uncertain about the randomness of the stanza lengths (4/5/11/1). After rereading, however, I see a logical sequence as each stanza describes the different actions and observations being taken. You might, however, consider breaking them up some, to enable each act and idea to stand out.
I would suggest the final one be two lines
Hurry Back Brooke
I need some sunshine.
Doing so clarifies the two important (yet related) desires
Enjoyed immensely. Thank you...!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Wonderful expressions!
Deep spiritual meaning in "posting prayers" to be carried by the element of air (breeze) in an envelop of her poems.
Many who do spiritual work via elements perform a version of what you have described for a desired blessing (wish) from a desirable source (Creator, or whatever their reference might be). In your case, sunshine (literal and figurative).
I like the cursive font. You might consider a similar but bolder one to make the words stand out for an easier read.
I was uncertain about the randomness of the stanza lengths (4/5/11/1). After rereading, however, I see a logical sequence as each stanza describes the different actions and observations being taken. You might, however, consider breaking them up some, to enable each act and idea to stand out.
I would suggest the final one be two lines
Hurry Back Brooke
I need some sunshine.
Doing so clarifies the two important (yet related) desires
Enjoyed immensely. Thank you...!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the great review and the suggestions.
Comment from l.raven
HI Dallas, what a wonderful poem to Brooke...love every word...and you are so right...we need some sunshine...and she does brighten up FanStory...I know she will love this...God Bless Luff Lindaxxoo
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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HI Dallas, what a wonderful poem to Brooke...love every word...and you are so right...we need some sunshine...and she does brighten up FanStory...I know she will love this...God Bless Luff Lindaxxoo
Comment Written 31-May-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thanks, Linda.
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you are so welcome Dallas...xxoo luff
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Dallas...
_ Nice dedication.
_ She's such a lovely person.
_ I hope she's back with us soon.
_ Indeed, she is a ray of sunshine, for sure.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Hi, Dallas...
_ Nice dedication.
_ She's such a lovely person.
_ I hope she's back with us soon.
_ Indeed, she is a ray of sunshine, for sure.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 31-May-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from petalangela
A gorgeous page of happy yellow sunshine. . Yet another brilliantly penned tribute to a lovely lady
I hope someone is reading these poems or at least going to put them into a booklet for her to enjoy at leisure
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reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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A gorgeous page of happy yellow sunshine. . Yet another brilliantly penned tribute to a lovely lady
I hope someone is reading these poems or at least going to put them into a booklet for her to enjoy at leisure
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Comment Written 31-May-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from lalajovanoski
Very nicely written well composed piece.I found this to be very deep and emotional. You are a very talented writer.Thank you very much for sharing this. I really enjoyed reading
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reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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Very nicely written well composed piece.I found this to be very deep and emotional. You are a very talented writer.Thank you very much for sharing this. I really enjoyed reading
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Comment Written 31-May-2015
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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Thanks for the kind review.
