Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 48 "Chapter Diecisiete, Part Uno"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
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Comment from Ashley McRoberts
I liked the story and characters, I want to find out what happens. I would have liked to be more emerced in what was happening, how it smelled, how dark it was, ect.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
I liked the story and characters, I want to find out what happens. I would have liked to be more emerced in what was happening, how it smelled, how dark it was, ect.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Tellis
Another very excellent chapter in this story and I was surprised to hear Miguel introduce him as Soni's boyfriend. I know he's a bad guy and I hope they figure it out before it's too late. Great work.
Tellis
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
Another very excellent chapter in this story and I was surprised to hear Miguel introduce him as Soni's boyfriend. I know he's a bad guy and I hope they figure it out before it's too late. Great work.
Tellis
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from kriver
Hi
This is an excellent chapter.
I enjoyed reading it very much.
The unique ways you are
incorporating the use of animals
makes the story all the more
interesting. It draws
the reader into the piece.
The character development
is very well done.
It seems to add
to the flow of the write
as a total work.
The descriptive scenes work
well with the story line.
Excellent use of a cliff hanger.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
Hi
This is an excellent chapter.
I enjoyed reading it very much.
The unique ways you are
incorporating the use of animals
makes the story all the more
interesting. It draws
the reader into the piece.
The character development
is very well done.
It seems to add
to the flow of the write
as a total work.
The descriptive scenes work
well with the story line.
Excellent use of a cliff hanger.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Excellent, I am enjoying reading it, and beginning to be able to follow the story in more detail, starting to realise what is going on. Well written and looking forward to reading on. Ulla
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
Excellent, I am enjoying reading it, and beginning to be able to follow the story in more detail, starting to realise what is going on. Well written and looking forward to reading on. Ulla
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from JourneyHolm
Nice cliffhanger. I am curious what a "false dawn" might be. Even though I haven't read the other parts of the book, I could tell that it is an interesting tale. I thought it was pretty informative about Shamanism and it seems you hold some of that knowledge dear to your heart. I enjoyed this. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
Nice cliffhanger. I am curious what a "false dawn" might be. Even though I haven't read the other parts of the book, I could tell that it is an interesting tale. I thought it was pretty informative about Shamanism and it seems you hold some of that knowledge dear to your heart. I enjoyed this. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the kind review. False dawn is just before the sun rises.
Comment from Sefiros
I found the part between Jim and Miguel a little lacking. You could have mentalized Jim's reaction with a little shock. Boyfriend? Since when. You could have Jim force a smile and pretend to be friendly while he's burning up inside. You could even have Jim size Miguel up: he's too short for Soni, etc. I think that would solidify Jim into a more realistic figure. Otherwise good job.
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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
I found the part between Jim and Miguel a little lacking. You could have mentalized Jim's reaction with a little shock. Boyfriend? Since when. You could have Jim force a smile and pretend to be friendly while he's burning up inside. You could even have Jim size Miguel up: he's too short for Soni, etc. I think that would solidify Jim into a more realistic figure. Otherwise good job.
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Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the kind review. Jim already suspects Miguel of wrong doings.
Comment from irishauthorme
Hi Barbara, been gone for a while but I went back and caught up.
See you have built up a great following, don't know but I would say that yours is either close to or the longest running story on FS.
Excellent dialogue, and plenty of action that kept the story moving. Also liked the bear interlude, interesting twist.
Very good narrative!
irish
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
Hi Barbara, been gone for a while but I went back and caught up.
See you have built up a great following, don't know but I would say that yours is either close to or the longest running story on FS.
Excellent dialogue, and plenty of action that kept the story moving. Also liked the bear interlude, interesting twist.
Very good narrative!
irish
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I hope you stay around a little longer.
Comment from chasennov
Chapter 48 of the book Texas Dream Catcher Kuruk, Alex, and Miguel arrive. "Chapter Diecisiete, Part Uno" What a chapter! What a writer! What a story! Absolutely an excellent chapter you have penned here, Barbara. Very well done.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
Chapter 48 of the book Texas Dream Catcher Kuruk, Alex, and Miguel arrive. "Chapter Diecisiete, Part Uno" What a chapter! What a writer! What a story! Absolutely an excellent chapter you have penned here, Barbara. Very well done.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the encouraging words. You brightened my day.
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You are most welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ah, Barbara, this is another very interesting post, especially with the tidbits of information added that most readers wouldn't know, like the herb, "forb". I also especially like the other little details you include - they add realism - for example, Alex passing around some gum.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
Ah, Barbara, this is another very interesting post, especially with the tidbits of information added that most readers wouldn't know, like the herb, "forb". I also especially like the other little details you include - they add realism - for example, Alex passing around some gum.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Barbara. Good to see you post again. As usual, your dialogue and images are spot on for the most part:
"Calming herbs for Soni or her grandfather?" After Alex smiled at Jim's question, Jim continued, "I've never seen the dogs so calm or Midnight. I guess it's working on them too. It seems like Soni told me once that Kuruk means bear. Am I right? "
Suggestion: "As they got closer they slowly swished their tails. " (I would eliminate the word "slowly" here for two reasons...one, it is not important how fast they did it and two, you always want to eliminate the dreaded "ly" words like slowly.
Good write, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
Hi, Barbara. Good to see you post again. As usual, your dialogue and images are spot on for the most part:
"Calming herbs for Soni or her grandfather?" After Alex smiled at Jim's question, Jim continued, "I've never seen the dogs so calm or Midnight. I guess it's working on them too. It seems like Soni told me once that Kuruk means bear. Am I right? "
Suggestion: "As they got closer they slowly swished their tails. " (I would eliminate the word "slowly" here for two reasons...one, it is not important how fast they did it and two, you always want to eliminate the dreaded "ly" words like slowly.
Good write, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
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I wondered about the slowly myself. Thank you for your support.