A New Beginning
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "A Home For Igor"The girls leave their chat line days behind.
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Comment from rwilliam
ooooooo are there or aren't there ghosts1?! VERY good chapter!
I liked how you handled the whole getting high debacle! Too funny and very believable. Great writing.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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ooooooo are there or aren't there ghosts1?! VERY good chapter!
I liked how you handled the whole getting high debacle! Too funny and very believable. Great writing.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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I'm glad you enjoyed it. I thought I better give poor Laura her dignity back! It seemed like too much angst over two puffs of her first and last joint! Alexis xxx
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Alexis, great work mate. Crikey ghosts! You can have those buggers on your own. I am still laughing that she thinks his mouse is his girlfriend, I'm waiting for her reaction when she finds out LOL. Good stuff.
SPAG ALERT....Yay.....
"'Do you know why the back bedroom on the second floor is used as a store room?'(storeroom)"
"As Laura approached the store room(storeroom)"
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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G'day Alexis, great work mate. Crikey ghosts! You can have those buggers on your own. I am still laughing that she thinks his mouse is his girlfriend, I'm waiting for her reaction when she finds out LOL. Good stuff.
SPAG ALERT....Yay.....
"'Do you know why the back bedroom on the second floor is used as a store room?'(storeroom)"
"As Laura approached the store room(storeroom)"
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 03-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
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Well spotted, Fez! You're the first to catch that. It's enabled me to correct it in the following chapter too. Thank you! Alexis xxx
Comment from Spitfire
Goody, goody, I love stories about hauntings of any kind.
So Igor looks like a woman's idea of hunky. That sight didn't tarnish Lauren's image.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Goody, goody, I love stories about hauntings of any kind.
So Igor looks like a woman's idea of hunky. That sight didn't tarnish Lauren's image.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Well, I thought I'd give the poor woman back her dignity somehow! Alexis x
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Oh, I'm so pleased that Igor (my
favourite character) will have
a comfortable place to stay at last...
but what's this --- don't tell me
there's a ghost in the bathroom,
or perhaps it's just an electrical
fault.....
Margaret
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Oh, I'm so pleased that Igor (my
favourite character) will have
a comfortable place to stay at last...
but what's this --- don't tell me
there's a ghost in the bathroom,
or perhaps it's just an electrical
fault.....
Margaret
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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If it's anything like the ghosts at the hotel my husband and I ran, it will be a little bit of both! They were so cheeky, they would do all sorts of things with the electrics if they didn't like you. On the other hand, I had one who would switch on the kettle as I passed it at 6.30 in the morning, so I'd get my first cup of tea quicker. I kid you not! Alexis x
Comment from Ulla
Well, I agree Igor does need new accommodation.. Very well written, Couldn't find any faults.. So now you've got yourself into ghosts! I like that. I have been exposed to that and I believe in it! Looking forward to reading on and what you make of it. Ulla
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Well, I agree Igor does need new accommodation.. Very well written, Couldn't find any faults.. So now you've got yourself into ghosts! I like that. I have been exposed to that and I believe in it! Looking forward to reading on and what you make of it. Ulla
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Me too, Ulla. There were several at the hotel I ran (it was an old Scottish castle) It the end we learnt to live with each other though! Alexis x
Comment from scongrove
Great chapter! :) So Igor is looking pretty hot now? Hmmm... Interesting. :)
Sounds like Laura impressed Carl. :) At least he will tell all his friends about the Hotel & bring in more guests.
I'm also glad she is looking out for Igor. I was hoping from the last chapter, things wouldn't go bad with him carrying her away from her pot incident. She actually wants to do a favor for him & fix up a room he can use. Just hope it's not 'really' haunted. But that could be fun to read if it turns out haunted. :)
Shana :)
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Great chapter! :) So Igor is looking pretty hot now? Hmmm... Interesting. :)
Sounds like Laura impressed Carl. :) At least he will tell all his friends about the Hotel & bring in more guests.
I'm also glad she is looking out for Igor. I was hoping from the last chapter, things wouldn't go bad with him carrying her away from her pot incident. She actually wants to do a favor for him & fix up a room he can use. Just hope it's not 'really' haunted. But that could be fun to read if it turns out haunted. :)
Shana :)
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Well, he's got muscles now, which is better than being weedy and having a pot belly! Re the 'ghost' I have a few ideas up my sleeve, but none of them too scary. I have some experience of ghosts in the hotel my husband and I ran, and they can be highly amusing!
My thanks again for the six, Shana. I really appreciate it. Alexis xxx
Comment from jpduck
I thought this was a wonderful example of smooth, free-flowing prose. Also the story-line is compelling. I find myself becoming very attached to your characters. It all feels very professional.
A propos the italics/font size issue, It has occurred to me before, when setting up a new piece in edit mode, that italics did look a fraction larger than normal type-face. So I have just done some tests with it. It is putting italics in the correct font size. The apparent slight increase in size of italics would seem to be an optical illusion, due, no doubt, to the more 'spread out' nature of italics.
Adrian
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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I thought this was a wonderful example of smooth, free-flowing prose. Also the story-line is compelling. I find myself becoming very attached to your characters. It all feels very professional.
A propos the italics/font size issue, It has occurred to me before, when setting up a new piece in edit mode, that italics did look a fraction larger than normal type-face. So I have just done some tests with it. It is putting italics in the correct font size. The apparent slight increase in size of italics would seem to be an optical illusion, due, no doubt, to the more 'spread out' nature of italics.
Adrian
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for the six, Adrian, and the great advice. I see what you mean, so I returned it to italics with the advanced editor. I've never noticed that before! Alexis x
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Lucky Igor gets a haunted room. Should be fun. Seems that a ghost has already turned on the fan. :)
If italics are causing a problem, use the Advanced posting choice.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Lucky Igor gets a haunted room. Should be fun. Seems that a ghost has already turned on the fan. :)
If italics are causing a problem, use the Advanced posting choice.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Thanks for the advice, Phyllis. Now sorted! Alexis x
Comment from Annette Gulliver
Maybe the word will get around about the so called hook up between Laura and Igor, but it's better than being known as a pothead. Carl and his mates sound like very generous customers, she better keep them on side. It sounds as if the ghost is still active in the back room. Nadzia and her babies might scare it away when she moves into Igor's new accommodation. Once, again, I enjoyed reading this story.
Annette
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Maybe the word will get around about the so called hook up between Laura and Igor, but it's better than being known as a pothead. Carl and his mates sound like very generous customers, she better keep them on side. It sounds as if the ghost is still active in the back room. Nadzia and her babies might scare it away when she moves into Igor's new accommodation. Once, again, I enjoyed reading this story.
Annette
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Now there's a thought. A ghost who's scared of mice! I can see some mileage in that one. Talking about Nazdia's babies, they must be due soon, so I'd better get a move on and get them out of the dry store. Alexis x
Comment from Jay Squires
Another good chapter, Alexis. Sorry it took me so long to get to it.
Just a few things:
a lover who was years younger than her. [... younger than SHE {"was" implied}]
'This if perfect,' Laura said out loud [Of course you have fixed this by now, but change "if" to "is" >> It's been about 6 hours since I downloaded this. I'm sorry.]
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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Another good chapter, Alexis. Sorry it took me so long to get to it.
Just a few things:
a lover who was years younger than her. [... younger than SHE {"was" implied}]
'This if perfect,' Laura said out loud [Of course you have fixed this by now, but change "if" to "is" >> It's been about 6 hours since I downloaded this. I'm sorry.]
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2015
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No need to apologise, Jay, I appreciate your reviews whenever they arrive! Alexis x
