Shadows of Shame
pure love is of the heart...(contest entry; a rhymed poem)9 total reviews
Comment from Jewell McChesney
Oh!! One of the best poems on this subject I've read in a very long time!
As always whatever you write glides down the page like warm honey!
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Oh!! One of the best poems on this subject I've read in a very long time!
As always whatever you write glides down the page like warm honey!
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
Comment from Dean Kuch
Loved the alliterative title, Anonymous...
This is a poignant poetic piece that reaches into soul and tugs at the heartstrings. It has everything - a bit of drama, great rhythm and rhyme, and a smooth even cadence -- all lyrically composed in perfect rhyme, which tells an intriguing and quite captivating tale of shame, lust, and regret.
My favorite entry thus far. Best of luck to you!~
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Loved the alliterative title, Anonymous...
This is a poignant poetic piece that reaches into soul and tugs at the heartstrings. It has everything - a bit of drama, great rhythm and rhyme, and a smooth even cadence -- all lyrically composed in perfect rhyme, which tells an intriguing and quite captivating tale of shame, lust, and regret.
My favorite entry thus far. Best of luck to you!~
Comment Written 01-Jun-2015
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a poignant poem that reaches into the gut and shows us those pitiful feelings and emotions that take us off the bead and make us live too long in the danger zone. Getting back, not an option.
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This is a poignant poem that reaches into the gut and shows us those pitiful feelings and emotions that take us off the bead and make us live too long in the danger zone. Getting back, not an option.
Comment Written 31-May-2015
Comment from gypsymoth
Excellent job while adhering to contest rules. You made
the reader feel the shame and regret of the unfaithful lover.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsymoth
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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Excellent job while adhering to contest rules. You made
the reader feel the shame and regret of the unfaithful lover.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsymoth
Comment Written 31-May-2015
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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Thank you very much for your good luck wishes and this encouraging review.
Comment from happykat4
We as human being given free will often make mistakes in life. I wonder in love, if the one who has strayed and then asks their one true love for forgiveness understands what devastation it has caused to that person. I wonder, does trust ever really return? Forgiveness, yes, but forgotten? I think not. The poem holds a truth for all us, lust is exciting but true love a gift of oneself. Very good.
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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We as human being given free will often make mistakes in life. I wonder in love, if the one who has strayed and then asks their one true love for forgiveness understands what devastation it has caused to that person. I wonder, does trust ever really return? Forgiveness, yes, but forgotten? I think not. The poem holds a truth for all us, lust is exciting but true love a gift of oneself. Very good.
Comment Written 31-May-2015
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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Thank you very much for this encouraging review. I do believe we never forget, though we MUST forgive...for ourselves, as well as for the other, offending party.
Comment from Tatarka2
I thought this was an exceptional poem. It has everything - a dramatic message, lyrically told in perfect rhyme, and a story both told and implied. The reader feels the poet's shame as well as her regret - and her lust, which is implied and therefore so much more potent. So far, this is my favorite in this contest.
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I thought this was an exceptional poem. It has everything - a dramatic message, lyrically told in perfect rhyme, and a story both told and implied. The reader feels the poet's shame as well as her regret - and her lust, which is implied and therefore so much more potent. So far, this is my favorite in this contest.
Comment Written 31-May-2015
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, mystery writer, to be married to one while desiring another has got to be torture. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
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this is an excellent write, mystery writer, to be married to one while desiring another has got to be torture. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 31-May-2015
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully. This is an inventive way to approach the prompt and quite flashy in the delivery which really was not needed since the words alone are worthy of notice. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully. This is an inventive way to approach the prompt and quite flashy in the delivery which really was not needed since the words alone are worthy of notice. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 31-May-2015
Comment from WindPen
i enjoyed the perception that lust bounded you and your chains shame you
so you are now a creature which cannot look at love without feeling pain
though i'm a fan of free verse you deserve six stars
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i enjoyed the perception that lust bounded you and your chains shame you
so you are now a creature which cannot look at love without feeling pain
though i'm a fan of free verse you deserve six stars
Comment Written 31-May-2015
