Get Well, Brooke!
Viewing comments for Chapter 10001 "So damn Beautiful"Writing for Brooke
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Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Morning, Michael,
Brooke will be so pleased with your poem for her. Hopefully, she will be able to rejoin us sooner than later. The sentiment of your poem is solid and shines through.
The only thing I want to comment about things needing correction are the following two SPAG issues:
Peter Pan['s] integrity
Sleeping Beauties [Beauty's] trust in
beauties = more than one person
beauty's = singular possessive for trust
I hope you're well.
-Ray
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Good Morning, Michael,
Brooke will be so pleased with your poem for her. Hopefully, she will be able to rejoin us sooner than later. The sentiment of your poem is solid and shines through.
The only thing I want to comment about things needing correction are the following two SPAG issues:
Peter Pan['s] integrity
Sleeping Beauties [Beauty's] trust in
beauties = more than one person
beauty's = singular possessive for trust
I hope you're well.
-Ray
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Hey Ray....-smile-...yes, her daughter says she's comfortable, well cared for...so I look forward to her penmanship. sorry I broke down the other night...when you carry around this much nucular energy...Chernoble happens....ahh haha....anyway, thanks I'll go clean up...-wink-....love michael
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Michael,
'So Damn Beautiful' you're a magician with you words and combination placements... you speak and construct from a very special heart space, that can do nothing but when read, soak into the very fibre of its intent.
Man I though... hey? i'll just choose my favorite passage and compliment that... but i read and re-read... and the more i read the deeper i delved into you magical metaphorical genius and the less i was able to pick a single verse to wrap up in accolade... yeah, Brooke will read this and feel the same love.
with our thoughts we create,
illusion between weed and flower,
James.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015
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Hi Michael,
'So Damn Beautiful' you're a magician with you words and combination placements... you speak and construct from a very special heart space, that can do nothing but when read, soak into the very fibre of its intent.
Man I though... hey? i'll just choose my favorite passage and compliment that... but i read and re-read... and the more i read the deeper i delved into you magical metaphorical genius and the less i was able to pick a single verse to wrap up in accolade... yeah, Brooke will read this and feel the same love.
with our thoughts we create,
illusion between weed and flower,
James.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015
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Hey J...sorry I'm running late bro....thank you man...I hope she smiles.....and gets back here quick...-smile- love Michael
Comment from Joan E.
I immediately knew from the picture that this poem was a tribute to Brooke. She taught us to appreciate these plants as flowers, not weeds. I enjoyed your tercets and use of alliteration plus the circularity. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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I immediately knew from the picture that this poem was a tribute to Brooke. She taught us to appreciate these plants as flowers, not weeds. I enjoyed your tercets and use of alliteration plus the circularity. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 04-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
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J.....obviously you made a terrible mistake upon pushing the good button ....therefor I shall quite the quickening of my heart rate and steady the twitching jaw line of misunderstanding ......I'm sure it's just jet lag.....please get some rest dear.....love bug
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EEEK! Yes, it must have been caused by jet lag. Please forgive the blunder, which I'm off to fix. : ( -joan
Comment from w.j.debi
Such a lot of fantasy and fairy fluff, including the wonderful dandelion and the magic it performs. To quote a line from Peter Pan, "I do believe I fairies" and their magic dust, and I hope this helps perform magic for Brooke as well. It is a beautiful get well message, expertly done.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Such a lot of fantasy and fairy fluff, including the wonderful dandelion and the magic it performs. To quote a line from Peter Pan, "I do believe I fairies" and their magic dust, and I hope this helps perform magic for Brooke as well. It is a beautiful get well message, expertly done.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
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Well thank you very much....-smile-...yes I believe in what seems like magic...people at their very best...Jesus. Well I hope she smiles...-smile- Thanks again....love Michael
Comment from IndianaIrish
Weeds ... spreeds, right? Dandelions are as much of a flower as roses are. It's all in the eye of the heart. Your poem for Brooke is wonderful, Michael, and I know she'll love it when she feels better enough to read this wonderful collection from her friends.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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Weeds ... spreeds, right? Dandelions are as much of a flower as roses are. It's all in the eye of the heart. Your poem for Brooke is wonderful, Michael, and I know she'll love it when she feels better enough to read this wonderful collection from her friends.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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Hey.........-handsonhip-....-headtilt-....you don't read me anymore because you were hit in a head-on collision and cant see anymore right...? ...once upon found us fairly close Karyn....has time and head injury taken your memory too...?....ahhh lol....-smile-...thank you sweetie.....love Michael
Comment from Glasstruth
Brooke wrote about dandelions not long ago, and saw them as something beautiful, and I always thought they added color to things. Your imagery is on that special dandelion level. Just simply beautiful. A great poem for her. Well done. Les
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Brooke wrote about dandelions not long ago, and saw them as something beautiful, and I always thought they added color to things. Your imagery is on that special dandelion level. Just simply beautiful. A great poem for her. Well done. Les
Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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thank you Les...always a pleasure to hear from you Sir....love bug-
Comment from c_lucas
If the Dandelion gets an upgrading from weed to flower, Brooke has done her share. This is very well written for a poetic that needs our love and blessing.
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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If the Dandelion gets an upgrading from weed to flower, Brooke has done her share. This is very well written for a poetic that needs our love and blessing.
Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Hey Charlie....-smile- thank you Sir....yes indeed she's certainly deserving of all our support and concern. appreciate you .....love bug-
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You're welcome.
Comment from His Grayness
Wishing for a sixth star for this amazing mind trip and generous gift of thought to our beloved Brooke. Reaching into one's mind for celebration of another is an effort alone worthy of endless praise but delivering 'thought stretching" images and words such as these is truly a rare gift! Blessings and congratulations! Vance
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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Wishing for a sixth star for this amazing mind trip and generous gift of thought to our beloved Brooke. Reaching into one's mind for celebration of another is an effort alone worthy of endless praise but delivering 'thought stretching" images and words such as these is truly a rare gift! Blessings and congratulations! Vance
Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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why thank you Vance for this most gracious review. I hope this hour and tomorrow find you in health prosperous....-Vulcan V-....be. -wink- love michael
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A lovely poem featuring a flower that Brooke wrote about frequently. Like you mention in this verse she found them beautiful. Fine dedication to Brooke with aded music. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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A lovely poem featuring a flower that Brooke wrote about frequently. Like you mention in this verse she found them beautiful. Fine dedication to Brooke with aded music. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Hi Dorothy....-smile- thank you very much...happy you enjoyed it. love Bug-
Comment from amahra
Really loved the poem and liked all of the references to my favorite childhood fairy tales. Great job.
dandelion green
yellow never seen
so damn beautiful [very nice repeating stanza]
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Really loved the poem and liked all of the references to my favorite childhood fairy tales. Great job.
dandelion green
yellow never seen
so damn beautiful [very nice repeating stanza]
Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015
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Hi Amahra...-smile- thank you very much.....I was going to write another but read Jimi's....now I'm scared.....lol......ahh thanks. love Bug-
