Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

good job! it follows the 5/7/5 sillable count format, it is written in present tense, it is fix in a moment in time, good format and picture

 Comment Written 29-May-2015

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reply by the author on 29-May-2015

thank you for your review and the five stars. I haven't done a lot of Haiku, but it seems to be coaxing me in. 17 syllables is just enough to say something, although I like the exercise of paring down words to the absolute essentials. cheers Cass

Comment from TPAC

Excellent

Sweet. I find in poet's acclaims many true facts in this work, a snap shot of raw nature, nothing for reader to assume outside thought there, nicely presented and described by writer

Quail fight for fat worm
Elasticity must give
Backward somersaults

Backward somersaults
Quail for fat worm must fight
Elasticity held gives

 Comment Written 29-May-2015

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reply by the author on 29-May-2015

Thank you for your review and the five stars. There is more to Haiku than I first realised. I am starting to enjoy its sparseness and economy of words. cheers Cass

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements nicely with a correct line and syllable count. This is an awesome entry as you infuse humor and actually stay focused on nature which is the true essence of a traditional haiku form. I wish you the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.

 Comment Written 29-May-2015

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reply by the author on 29-May-2015

Thank you for your review and the five stars. I am starting to get right into Haiku and enjoy the challenge it offers Cheers Cass

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

this gave me a nice little chuckle. it is written in perfect form. good luck to you in the contest.
blessings
~~~teresa~~~

 Comment Written 28-May-2015

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reply by the author on 28-May-2015

thank you for your review and the five stars. this actually happened one day when I was cleaning the aviary. A tiny poem about tiny birds. Happy days cheers Cass

Comment from Gaye Hemsley

Excellent

Perfect syllable count, even with out the picture the words show a comical scene and that is what Haiku is all about. good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 28-May-2015

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reply by the author on 28-May-2015

Thank you for your review and the five stars. This happened while I was cleaning out the aviary. It was one of the most delightfully funny things I have ever seen. It was the same day I discovered the quail had been breeding and there were minute balls of fluff on legs running around in their glassed in enclosure. Happy Days cheers Cass