Comment from Jacob Collins

Excellent

I thought that there was an excellent use of imagery in your writing, visionary. Your writing flowed well and was cleverly constructed. I particularly liked the last night: I'll fiercely love the sunlight...and I'll dance...An excellent piece, good luck in the contest...Jacob

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thank you Jacob! :)Sharyn

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This meets the contest requirements beautifully as the rhyme scheme, meter, and syllable count are well done. Your turn in the third stanza is excellent and turns the reader's thoughts to the capricious nature of fate. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you for sharing it.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thank you very much Angel! :)Sharyn

Comment from rjuselius

Exceptional

This is a truly beautiful tribute to Brooke who has been a beacon in our lives. Your poem is exquisite and I applaud your delicate touch.
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thank you so much for your lovely reading/ appreciation, Rebekka, and for your gift of stars. Brooke has indeed been a beacon in all our lives.
:)Sharyn

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

A sonnet with iambic pentameter and volta and all that, and a chilling thought in it's message. An excellent contest entry and contribution to the get well book.

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

But also a timely reminder, LJ, yes? Thank you :)Sharyn

Comment from sibhus

Excellent

What a beautifully written poem. Chance so easily turns our world to shade. But let us hope that Brooke has many more days to dance in the sunshine, and to rain sunshine upon as all with her verse. Here's to hoping a speedy recovery for Brooke.

 Comment Written 31-May-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

I so hope so sibhus! :)Sharyn

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Sharyn...

_ Super dedication to Brooke.
_ This is just a great ending to your sonnet...

and time of shadow's end are ruled by chance,
I'll fiercely love the sunlight ... and I'll dance ...

_ Well composed and presented.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 31-May-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Bless you Jax! :)Sharyn

Comment from Lulube

Exceptional

Great contest entry with this one. Brooke will definitely appreciate you writing this one. You're so inspirational, enthusiastic and soluble.I love the art you choose for this one and all the other great poems I've read of yours.
well penned

lulube

 Comment Written 31-May-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

THERE you are Lu - thank you so much for your six stars. Brooke is such a special inspiration on this site.
Big hugs,
Sharyn

Comment from inside echo

Excellent

A beautifully written poem and dedication for your friend. So very well written, It is enjoyable to read. I hope she gets well soon. I love your choice of art. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 31-May-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thx so much echo! :)Sharyn

reply by inside echo on 01-Jun-2015

You are welcome.

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-A very colorful photo and presentation to go with your poem.
-The sonnet is written well and follows all the guidelines required.
-I like the following lines because they come from the heart:
"a future comfortably warm; divine
with poetry of dandelions, prayer"
-The final quatrain expresses so well "caprice of fate"
-A very nice tribute to Brooke.

 Comment Written 31-May-2015

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reply by the author on 31-May-2015

Thank you so much respa :)Sharyn

reply by Pam (respa) on 01-Jun-2015

You are very welcome.

Comment from Antoine Charlemaine

Exceptional

The slow, insidious, inexorable march of time towards...the end. You grasp this truth saliently, Sharyn. I don't quite share your view that 'knowing date and time of shadow's end are ruled by chance', however, there is no questioning that our days are numbered and that we should make the most of every opportunity...'make hay while the sun shines'.

Very nicely and eloquently expressed.

Anthony

 Comment Written 31-May-2015

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reply by the author on 31-May-2015

Aaah there you are my dear - thank you for your lovely sixer! So ... who or what rules YOUR number of days?? Or shouldn't I ask??? Thank you so much for your lovely six :)Sharyn

reply by Antoine Charlemaine on 31-May-2015

Of course you should ask! It is simply my faith in God - that higher power who holds life and death in his hands. I am on this planet for as long as he wants me to be here - not a day less or more. "Our times are in his hands", the psalmist wrote. It is rather comforting, I reckon. :)

reply by the author on 31-May-2015

I reckon it would be Antoine - I just have hard coming to terms with the 'bad things happen to good people' thing ...