A Labour of Love
motherhood9 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this essay about the mother that strives no matter what comes against her. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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this is an excellent write, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this essay about the mother that strives no matter what comes against her. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-May-2015
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Thank you very much.
Comment from jpduck
I suspect this speaks for many thousands of mothers. I also suspect that many have said what you have said, but, surely, few have said it so beautifully. Very best of luck with the contest.
Adrian
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I suspect this speaks for many thousands of mothers. I also suspect that many have said what you have said, but, surely, few have said it so beautifully. Very best of luck with the contest.
Adrian
Comment Written 29-May-2015
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Greatly appreciate your comments. Thanks.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This was a different kind of take on the prompt, but I found it hard to fully engage with. I am not sure why. Maybe because I am not a mother, nor indeed female.
There is no doubt that Parents are indeed heroic, not juts mothers, so a good choice for the prompt.
GMG
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Hi there,
This was a different kind of take on the prompt, but I found it hard to fully engage with. I am not sure why. Maybe because I am not a mother, nor indeed female.
There is no doubt that Parents are indeed heroic, not juts mothers, so a good choice for the prompt.
GMG
Comment Written 29-May-2015
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I appreciate your comments. Thanks.
Comment from w.j.debi
Mothers are true heroes and for the most part to unheralded for their dedication and efforts. This is a wonderful essay giving a tribute to mothers for all they do. You have a consistent POV and a good narrative voice.
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Mothers are true heroes and for the most part to unheralded for their dedication and efforts. This is a wonderful essay giving a tribute to mothers for all they do. You have a consistent POV and a good narrative voice.
Comment Written 28-May-2015
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Thanks so much.
Comment from Stacia Ann
Thanks for sharing this, very powerful, sad.
The visual is compelling--it's hard to say what it is, thistles in water? Something that will perhaps catch and pull the mother under. It also looks rather like a peacock. Interesting.
The mother figure is very interesting as well--"posing for pictures," suggesting she might make her living as a model or something more tawdry and risky. She has no "assets" left, labors on, gives love which is returned with a "surly attitude"--sounds like motherhood!
Again, a strong piece.
The only concern I have is this seems more like poetry/free verse, really, than fiction. Fiction is a story with a clear beginning, inciting event, complications that build, and then some falling action to resolution. This seems less story but rather a poem with strong images and word choices.
Thanks for sharing this. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Thanks for sharing this, very powerful, sad.
The visual is compelling--it's hard to say what it is, thistles in water? Something that will perhaps catch and pull the mother under. It also looks rather like a peacock. Interesting.
The mother figure is very interesting as well--"posing for pictures," suggesting she might make her living as a model or something more tawdry and risky. She has no "assets" left, labors on, gives love which is returned with a "surly attitude"--sounds like motherhood!
Again, a strong piece.
The only concern I have is this seems more like poetry/free verse, really, than fiction. Fiction is a story with a clear beginning, inciting event, complications that build, and then some falling action to resolution. This seems less story but rather a poem with strong images and word choices.
Thanks for sharing this. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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This genre, known as haibun, is a combo of prose and poetry. It accepts, even encourages fragmented sentences to create sharp visuals and does have many of the elements of poetry in the prose section. As it has yet to be defined as either poetry or prose, and the compliance committee did not disqualify the post, I'm certain they don't have a definitive answer either.
The picture is of a dandelion gone to seed against the mirror image. Thanks.
Comment from petalangela
Motherhood is exactly as you have described it a thankless job that culminates in everything being your fault then sudden the phase s over and you just now it was a a labour of pure love that is now returned
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Motherhood is exactly as you have described it a thankless job that culminates in everything being your fault then sudden the phase s over and you just now it was a a labour of pure love that is now returned
Comment Written 28-May-2015
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Parents who take their jobs seriously and raise socially educated, responsible adults are most definitely heroes in my book. Thanks.
Comment from Kyam
Beautiful about the girl. It made you feel a lot about her. It made you think deeply about her. I enjoyed it immensely. I think this is an exceptional writer. Blessings, Faith
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Beautiful about the girl. It made you feel a lot about her. It made you think deeply about her. I enjoyed it immensely. I think this is an exceptional writer. Blessings, Faith
Comment Written 28-May-2015
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Thanks so much.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely. Yours is a subtle expression of heroism and one that many can relate to. It is well executed and thoroughly engaging AND I especially like the haiku ending. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.
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This meets the contest requirements nicely. Yours is a subtle expression of heroism and one that many can relate to. It is well executed and thoroughly engaging AND I especially like the haiku ending. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 28-May-2015
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Thanks so much.
Comment from Bill Schott
This one strikes me as deep. Its display in this haibun style delivers further meaning as a child surveys the impact her 'being' has on her mother. Hints of not making it easy for her by being a snot seem to be here as well.
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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This one strikes me as deep. Its display in this haibun style delivers further meaning as a child surveys the impact her 'being' has on her mother. Hints of not making it easy for her by being a snot seem to be here as well.
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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My snot is forty years old and holds a standard to he children he doesn't uphold. I tried,,,damn it! Thanks for indulging me.
