Brocolli, Milk, What?
A simple conversation28 total reviews
Comment from jpduck
Very nicely done. As a grandparent, I agree with you about the exhausting bit.
Typos/SPAGs:
'Their was always a, "Grammy, come," or "Grammy, play with me," (There)
'a huge request after doing its once was' (it).
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Very nicely done. As a grandparent, I agree with you about the exhausting bit.
Typos/SPAGs:
'Their was always a, "Grammy, come," or "Grammy, play with me," (There)
'a huge request after doing its once was' (it).
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Got'em... Thanks for stopping over to read. John
Comment from Jennpenn
Adorable kids! Every bit of this story works for me. Love it! Put the last few lines in the present-tense to match the rest of the writing, and you've got perfection!
Sorry, it's the editor in me....
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Adorable kids! Every bit of this story works for me. Love it! Put the last few lines in the present-tense to match the rest of the writing, and you've got perfection!
Sorry, it's the editor in me....
Comment Written 26-May-2015
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Thank you for the attention to the detail. No need to be sorry.
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Cute story, John. I was exhausted just reading about the energy level of these three kids! And, you're right--you need to be young enough to deal with that energy.
I loved your "eavesdropping". The broccoli in the milk was priceless though.
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Cute story, John. I was exhausted just reading about the energy level of these three kids! And, you're right--you need to be young enough to deal with that energy.
I loved your "eavesdropping". The broccoli in the milk was priceless though.
Comment Written 26-May-2015
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Thank you a whole bunch of broccoli for reading. Always appreciated. John
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. This was a cute read. I gotta admit I wander what kids really think. I figure they sensor stuff for adult ears:-)
I like the play between siblings and the light touch you hadve.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Hi. This was a cute read. I gotta admit I wander what kids really think. I figure they sensor stuff for adult ears:-)
I like the play between siblings and the light touch you hadve.
padumachitta
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Thank you very much. I'm glad you enjoyed this. John
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Good plot. Easy to follow story line. Plenty of smooth flowing action. Descriptive language well used throughout this story.
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Good plot. Easy to follow story line. Plenty of smooth flowing action. Descriptive language well used throughout this story.
Comment Written 26-May-2015
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BMW... Thanks for your time to read this and share. John
Comment from barkingdog
I can feel how much you love these little tikes. What a great Poppa you must be. And how exhausted. LOL
Thank you for sharing a family moment. My how they are growing. :) ellen
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I can feel how much you love these little tikes. What a great Poppa you must be. And how exhausted. LOL
Thank you for sharing a family moment. My how they are growing. :) ellen
If you want to earn some site money, I posted for a blind contest which is now over. I won. LOL
Comment Written 26-May-2015
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Congrats on winning. I'll check it out.
Thank you for reading this. I'm proud of them and my son at being a great Dad!
John
Comment from Jackarrie
I never imagined how entertaining grandchildren would be, before I had my 6, I love to listen to their little voices and conversations so innocent and amusing. I am guilty of hiding and listening in.
Your story is entertaining to say the least.
Well done, Mary
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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I never imagined how entertaining grandchildren would be, before I had my 6, I love to listen to their little voices and conversations so innocent and amusing. I am guilty of hiding and listening in.
Your story is entertaining to say the least.
Well done, Mary
Comment Written 26-May-2015
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Six.. I'm half way there. My two other kids have yet to bless me with more so I may catch up one day... John
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
this was an entertaining little piece. I have an almost four year old at home and I often wonder what goes on in her head! Her cousins were around on Sunday - nightmare - they are 2 and 7. The youngest is a bully and the eldest soft and more immature than my little one! All the screaming and so on for five hours!
To make it worse, the cousins are bi-lingual, so it was in English and Japanese!
Anyway, nice write and enjoy the solitude - I know I am.
GMG
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Hi there,
this was an entertaining little piece. I have an almost four year old at home and I often wonder what goes on in her head! Her cousins were around on Sunday - nightmare - they are 2 and 7. The youngest is a bully and the eldest soft and more immature than my little one! All the screaming and so on for five hours!
To make it worse, the cousins are bi-lingual, so it was in English and Japanese!
Anyway, nice write and enjoy the solitude - I know I am.
GMG
Comment Written 26-May-2015
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Thanks GMG. I love them with all my being, but they are exhausting. John
Comment from boxergirl
Adorable picture , John, with the kiddos all ready for bed, lined up on the couch. I totally understand the wearing you our thing...love em but totally exhausting.
Cute idea to image their conversations. 8-)
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Adorable picture , John, with the kiddos all ready for bed, lined up on the couch. I totally understand the wearing you our thing...love em but totally exhausting.
Cute idea to image their conversations. 8-)
Comment Written 26-May-2015
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Thank you very much. I'm glad you understand and enjoyed it. John
Comment from justafan
How utterly disarming this little tale is...I felt like I was in the room, eavesdropping.
Just a splendid story you have woven here my friend :). Thanks for sharing with me. :)
Always justafan,
Missy
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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How utterly disarming this little tale is...I felt like I was in the room, eavesdropping.
Just a splendid story you have woven here my friend :). Thanks for sharing with me. :)
Always justafan,
Missy
Comment Written 25-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Thank you very much Missy for reading.
Glad you enjoyed. John
