The Forgotten Valley
A Beautiful Place39 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
What a wonderful description of a place that I'm sure each and every one of your readers are jealous not to be living in. I could practically live on roasted all mounds, which is sort of a lost art in many places, and freshly-picked cherries. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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What a wonderful description of a place that I'm sure each and every one of your readers are jealous not to be living in. I could practically live on roasted all mounds, which is sort of a lost art in many places, and freshly-picked cherries. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 27-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Thank you ever so much. Ulla
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This would be my dream - living among the cherries -- I just love them and, as you do, would eat a great many -- your home place sounds lovely. I live in a quiet, friendly village just 5mls out of a Cathedral city - and all around us is countryside, farms and country lanes - young lambs and horses, and all the colours - a little bit of heaven.
Thanks for sharing this, Ulla - good luck with the contest.
I've made a few suggestions - do ignore them if not in agreement, my friend.
It is(,) of course(,) not the real name - add two commas
We get up at first light in the morning[,] and(,) after a quick breakfast(,) the picking starts. - move the 1st comma along to after "and" and add another after "breakfast" which gives the pauses in the sentence.
Mid morning, we break for coffee, then box what we have picked [[in the morning]](,) plus - lose "in the morning" which you've already mentioned at the beginning of the sentence, and add a comma after "picked"
Margaret
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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This would be my dream - living among the cherries -- I just love them and, as you do, would eat a great many -- your home place sounds lovely. I live in a quiet, friendly village just 5mls out of a Cathedral city - and all around us is countryside, farms and country lanes - young lambs and horses, and all the colours - a little bit of heaven.
Thanks for sharing this, Ulla - good luck with the contest.
I've made a few suggestions - do ignore them if not in agreement, my friend.
It is(,) of course(,) not the real name - add two commas
We get up at first light in the morning[,] and(,) after a quick breakfast(,) the picking starts. - move the 1st comma along to after "and" and add another after "breakfast" which gives the pauses in the sentence.
Mid morning, we break for coffee, then box what we have picked [[in the morning]](,) plus - lose "in the morning" which you've already mentioned at the beginning of the sentence, and add a comma after "picked"
Margaret
Comment Written 27-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Hi Margaret, Thank you so much. I have corrected. I am glad you liked it. I used to live in England in the country side of Henley on Thames. I know just how lovely it is is. Ulla
Comment from Shirley McLain
Loved the description of your valley. It won't stay hidden long. Where are you located? :) You did a great job. I've made a couple of suggestions for you to look at. Have a blessed day. Shirley
just how hard (the) work it is
I often stop in my track(s) I think this should be plural. It sounds better and you do have two feet and both of them track :)
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Loved the description of your valley. It won't stay hidden long. Where are you located? :) You did a great job. I've made a couple of suggestions for you to look at. Have a blessed day. Shirley
just how hard (the) work it is
I often stop in my track(s) I think this should be plural. It sounds better and you do have two feet and both of them track :)
Comment Written 27-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Hi, Thank you so much and I have made corrections. We live Mid East Spain off the Med coast. Ulla
Comment from chasennov
A Beautiful Place The Forgotten Valley.' This is a very good story byou have crafted here about your Forgotten Valley. What I especially like about it, is; 'We always say that it sounds quite painful, smiling at one another.' Well done.
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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A Beautiful Place The Forgotten Valley.' This is a very good story byou have crafted here about your Forgotten Valley. What I especially like about it, is; 'We always say that it sounds quite painful, smiling at one another.' Well done.
Comment Written 27-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Thank you so much. I am glad you enjoyed it. Ulla
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You are most welcome.
Comment from petalangela
Very descriptive and interesting to read. The daily life of a landowner. We here in town forget so easily when we purchase produce that somewhere there is an exhausted farmer. A farmer who has just finished one crop and preparing another thanks for sharing the beauty of your valley and reminder of your dedication to feed others
reply by the author on 27-May-2015
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Very descriptive and interesting to read. The daily life of a landowner. We here in town forget so easily when we purchase produce that somewhere there is an exhausted farmer. A farmer who has just finished one crop and preparing another thanks for sharing the beauty of your valley and reminder of your dedication to feed others
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 27-May-2015
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Thank you so much for your lovely review. Ulla
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, ulla, you did an excellent job writing this essay about the valley that brings peace at the end of a busy picking season. I enjoyed reading it, how did you place in the contest?
reply by the author on 27-May-2015
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this is an excellent write, ulla, you did an excellent job writing this essay about the valley that brings peace at the end of a busy picking season. I enjoyed reading it, how did you place in the contest?
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 27-May-2015
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Thanks a lot or a lovely review. I became fourth. Ulla
Comment from amahra
Wow, I wouldn't tell too many people about this place. Almond flowers in January and cherry trees in March. Look like you guys found paradise. Three hundred trees on your land? Really? I could practical smell the bee pollinating. Great descriptive writing, my dear. I could see and smell it all.
reply by the author on 27-May-2015
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Wow, I wouldn't tell too many people about this place. Almond flowers in January and cherry trees in March. Look like you guys found paradise. Three hundred trees on your land? Really? I could practical smell the bee pollinating. Great descriptive writing, my dear. I could see and smell it all.
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 27-May-2015
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Thanks a lot. Yes it is a very beautiful place. We are lucky. Ulla
Comment from Ekim777
Valleys should be rich gateways to the cosmos. I love the valleys of this planet; I living in the Jordan valley and it might just be the womb of the world. Your valley might be rich and plentiful but it might also represent a grave harboring generations of before. King Saul and his son Jonathan died by the sword of the Philistines, in our valley and it won the lament of the future king David. I'm sure your valley is alive with memories. Treat your valley with respect. There must be something mysterious and uncanny in its slopes. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Valleys should be rich gateways to the cosmos. I love the valleys of this planet; I living in the Jordan valley and it might just be the womb of the world. Your valley might be rich and plentiful but it might also represent a grave harboring generations of before. King Saul and his son Jonathan died by the sword of the Philistines, in our valley and it won the lament of the future king David. I'm sure your valley is alive with memories. Treat your valley with respect. There must be something mysterious and uncanny in its slopes. -Ekim777
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Thank you so much for a lovely review. Yes our valley goes back several thousand years when Iberian tribes settled to be followd by the Phoenicians, Romans and the Moors all of which is very aparent. Ulla
Comment from jpduck
You paint a most alluring picture.
Three SPAGs (Square brackets indicate suggested deletions, and asterisks, suggested insertions):
'In fact I [do] live here with my husband, five cats and a big beautiful dog' (The sentence sounds very strange with 'do' in it -- as if you were contradicting someone who has just said you do not live here).
'and a big*,* beautiful dog' (Consecutive adjectives should normally be separated by a comma).
'to be taken over by the cherry blossom in mid March that last*s* well into April'
Adrian
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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You paint a most alluring picture.
Three SPAGs (Square brackets indicate suggested deletions, and asterisks, suggested insertions):
'In fact I [do] live here with my husband, five cats and a big beautiful dog' (The sentence sounds very strange with 'do' in it -- as if you were contradicting someone who has just said you do not live here).
'and a big*,* beautiful dog' (Consecutive adjectives should normally be separated by a comma).
'to be taken over by the cherry blossom in mid March that last*s* well into April'
Adrian
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Hi Adrian, Thank you so much for your review. You are so right and I have corrected. Ulla
Comment from kriver
Hi Ulla,
This is a very beautifully
descriptive write.
It is very easy for the reader
to picture the various
descriptive scenes.
Over all it is a fine piece.
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Hi Ulla,
This is a very beautifully
descriptive write.
It is very easy for the reader
to picture the various
descriptive scenes.
Over all it is a fine piece.
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Hi Kriver, thank you so much for an encouraging review. Ulla
